The sphere has spun,
around it goes,
circles of love calling day
in falling words of night's array,
black and white
supposing treasure
to fortune's prose
and other books beyond the burning,
as assets in a constant turning,
beginnings
hiding in the end,
to look around the pointed middle,
curves
to build a better bend
and sound in holes
of string and fiddle,
playing notes
in waves that scatter,
to rise again
in balls of wishes
forming rhyme
to sound and matter,
echoes,
saving love to gather,
and then subside
to watch in distance,
the waves to speak,
in nights of slumber,
where black is white
to blur in number.
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Author notes
Title option...."Black and White"
Written June 26th, 2006
A contest entry
- Black and white....................... by Starswhispers.
500 points, ended February 15, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very interesting and magical write full of opposites to be joined at the end. Beginings and ends, i like the presentation, i like those lines very much.
"to rise again
in balls of wishes
forming rhyme
to sound and matter,"
Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck.
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I'm not sure if I'm interpreting the poem how you mean for it to be. You have me looking up Gyro in every sense of the word with every ending possible. I think you are describing night and day with the earth and sun rotating or moving on their axes(rings). I'm not sure though. I like the title. I like 'to blur in number'. I will read through the poem more and comment again, I'm sure. This is really good. I like poems that I want to read over several times. Thank you very much for this entry.
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Awesome write!
"circles of love calling day
in falling words of night's array" Gorgous lines and most inspiring! The muse is kicking into gear as I read this!
Excellent free verse that flows so gently and stays on the mind long after reading. Congratulations on your GOLD!!
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Many blessings Sandi
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impressive the way... poem is written from the perspective of sphere... relating to the aerial view of the picture...
ephemeral expression and good flow of words...
congrats on winning the trophy... -
This fusion that (in my opinion) M.C.Escher weaves in his picture you have captured with your words.
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First thing I noticed was your poem title, then your verses the same way captured my attention. With not too much words you know how to say a lot. Good luck.
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there are times we do watch as if from a distance, and yet the heart is at the core of it. How well done..brilliant indeed.
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Hello and welcome to the contest. Glad you could make it here to participate. hmmmm... I don't know if I'm reading this right but it seemed like a piece about the cycle of writing and the creation of those writes. I suppose I could be off, but it was just vague enough that it really lends itself more open to interpretation.
Your meter was well done, and consequently your poem had an excellent rhythm through out it, that I rather enjoyed. Your words were primarily simplistic in nature, but I feel suited best your intended message. All in all a nice little write. Thanx for coming by. -
"echoes,
saving love to gather,
and then subside
to watch in distance..."
Wonderful penning, Scribe...there are murmurs of Memory dancing across the horizon, overflowing with the power of Dream...Ahhh, but can we truly "save Love", Rich??? It reminds me of a verse I read many, many years ago...well done, my Friend...
Wanda
"The Love in your Heart
wasn't put there to stay ~
Love isn't Love
until we give it away."
~ Author unknown
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Wonderful work here......the girls have said it perfectly your work brings tranquility to ones soul. Beautiful in every way as your words lead one to another.
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So many beautiful shapes you have molded with your words.
I loved the camouflaged rhyme, it gave the poem the effect of a beautiful musical piece...
This is just heaving with serenity and magic.
Great job Rich.
Best of luck.
Love.
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What a wonderful word Lynda has used to describe your lovely writes...tranquility. Yes I love it. When I come to read your work it leaves me tranquil and serene. It calms me and wraps me in an indescribable essence of peace. Well Done Rich, Trina
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Another beautiful poem, Rich....Sometimes I come here feeling low, and your poems bring tranquility and a smile.....
Lynda
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Thinking about your line of watching in the distance, that is brilliant, and your photo only adds to that line, I love your metaphors again between planets and music, this also sounds serene and at the same time describes chaos in its natural form. Bravo.
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