Said goodbye to the king of emotion,
As he set foot on the trail of wonderland.
With no explanation or reason why,
He carried with him my soul in his hand.
Sometimes I need to bury the past in me,
I'm just a shadow of the woman I used to be.
So lead me to the east of Eden,
Let the peace ride over this dark misery.
I follow where the harsh wind blows,
I like the way it steals the sad memory.
Sometimes I feel like the restless sea,
I'm just a shadow of the woman I used to be.
I watch how fast the time goes,
I'm not sure about the way it leaves me.
So take me to the east of Eden,
Where I know I'll set my conscience free.
Sometimes it feels like you're watching me,
It's just the shadow of the man you used to be.
I lose your face in the grey skies,
As I fight to save the last of my sanity.
I wait to find that new sunrise,
Wipe it all away and let my broken soul be,
But sometimes the spark of life deceives,
Leaving a shadow of the woman I used to be.
Author notes
Inspired by the song East of Eden--Big Country Option 5
http://www.stlyrics.com/songs/b/bigcountry11950/eastofeden458692.html
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A contest entry
- From The Heart by CanadianGirl1.
650 points, ended March 24, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh this was brilliant and beautiful! Loved the imagery and repititions "Leaving a shadow of the woman I used to be" .. very effective. Lovely write!
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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Wow... I love this... that line "The woman I used to be" kept getting me everytime. I loved the entire flow of this.. You really got me.
Thank you for your entry!! You most definitely gave me a piece of what I was looking for.
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The whole layout of this poem is fantastic
points driven home but yet in such a soft way,
Wonderful job and thanks for sharing,
Love and Light
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Thank you for your most beautiful entry, Josephine
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This poem is so breathtaking and indescribable (in a good way of course) that I actually had to ask for help to create this comment. Even he had a bit of trouble but we managed to get our words back. First, I'd like to complement your picture, its not hard to find a beautiful fairy picture but your goes above and beyond. Your flow is amazing and together your entire poem could touch a million. Thank you so much for entering my contest and congratulations, you are the first person to be added to the finalist list.
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Thank you so much for those wonderful comments.
Shaz xx
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This piece had a fantastic flow and rhyming scheme. Its words were of such beauty and provoked inner emotions. Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!
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The end of this gave me chills. I loved this. Awesome! Thank you for antering and good luck in the contest!
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Mum, this is so beautiful and has just enough of a tinge of sadness to complete the final stunning effect that this work imprints on you as you are reading.
I love so many of the phrases you used that I couldn't pick my favorite if I tried, so I'll suffice it to say that this one really spoke to me, each and every last line.
Awesomely done mum, best of luck in the contest too.
Love ya,
~Sherry~
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A WONDERFUL READ, INDEED!
A very fine piece, indeed - with simple BUT effective rhymes (just the way I like them) written from the heart and soul with a wonderful flow of poetic feeling and emotion! A wonderful and inspiring read, indeed! GOOD LUCK in the contest and thank you SO MUCH for spending your valuable AP POINTS to share this read with anyone lucky enough to click on this before all your points ran out! I TRULY enjoyed it!
Love & Peace!
Earl.
I'm honored to leave my first applause of the day right here for you! -
24KT Lady
An amazing work of art. A completely original viewpoint on the subject of a broken heart. I love the visual, too. Is that Jessica Gilbreath? It looks like a lot of her work that I've seen. LOL, back to the poem...This is excellently thought out and brilliantly presented. It is polished and publishable Thank you for sharing and, of course, best wishes in the contest!
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excellent .. rhyming at its best and the content of poem though not unique but has been explained in an extremly unique style ..your turn of phrases are really good and the choice of words really wonderful.. more than that the flow of the poem is really smooth ..and it sticks to its path righjt down to the very end..and excellent effort ..keep it up
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this is awesome, I love the pic, but your words are all so carefully placed, this write is amazing. great job with this. keep it up!
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What a very sad poem!! The last line is very powerful. I don't think most people would like to be in that position. A shadow can be a scary thing. Warm Regards...vivela
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WOW!!!! that was so awesome ,,,, you have talent my friend and you can write so well.... it has so much meaning and is so full of emotions, i can give picture to this poem like a small film in my mind... keep those wondeful writes coming....
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