She walks to the edge under darkened skies
the beauty of paradise dancing below
amid crimson rocks singing haunting lullabyes
her dreams buried in the deep frozen snow...
The first rays of the sun blaze over the mountain peaks,
time for her deepest regret, or a greatest moment of joy,
either she plunges into the abyss of tattered souls below
or taking flight, discovering a new life in a far-off land
distant from the shattered memories of her murdered soul…
I hereby inscribe a letter that will endeavor
to relieve the pain of her anxious burdens fast,
that will illuminate her darkest impenetrable shadows
and give purpose to her macabre silent past,
to perhaps to win her back from the precipice
reaching out to pull her into its darkness vast…
Dear Angel,
an angel you have been,
a red ribbon in your hair,
you were a white rose wrapped in a lavender bouquet,
then the ribbon turned to blood,
and the lavender bouquet
shattered into glass shards of a melancholy fate
that dripped in its crimson humor...
My words are few, yet they are shrouded
with embers of love,
will they cause the abhorrent stains to be undone?
and if my pleading causes you to stay,
will it only perpetuate a morbid fairytale
that, standing on the precipice, you wish to escape?
Shall I pour ice on your fire,
or fire on your ice?
Shall I rescue you from your heart's courtyard of darkness?
Will my aid merely be one unwelcome night's aphrodisiac
from lost hope, and friendless, tormented dreams?
A distant throbbing reaches me, life does not wait, I hear her silent cry...
The arctic gate of her heart closes shut,
I wait on the outside with the invisible shadows
that hang over this angel as she weighs her lonely outcome…
On the edge of the precipice she stands,
a cold wind blows and weaves a tight cocoon about her…
I sense the new angel trying hard to break out,
without her long-bleeding heart, free of her shattered reflections,
with an end to the melancholic melodies
that slowly drowned her in endless desperate midnights…
The frozen cocoon shatters into a thousand splinters,
a new angel emerges in a naked splendor,
she spreads her wings, and taking quick flight
speeds off into a new morning filled with mysteries.
Just a speck on the horizon now, I see her pause,
and dip below to drink once again from the river of deception…
I keep her door open, and a warm fire lit, for it will be her haven
if she discovers that nothing is different in the great beyond.
Author notes
Written June 25th, 2006
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A contest entry
- Make Me STAY in AP ..... by Scarlet Ambrosia.
300 points, ended July 2, 2006, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Great freeverse piece with an interesting layout
I liked your use of italics and the letter here Should lullabyes be lullabies? Keep writing, this was a great narrative poem- seemed a bit dark to me
All the best
Pozo
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Congratulations Wayne!!
Beautiful piece you have penned and well deserving of the Gold!! What a gem you have written
I know this will keep Di here
Thank you for writing and sharing this with us all!!
Many blessings to YOU always!
and much love~ Desire~*~
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This is of course in one word BRILLIANT. You continually manage to eave me without words. I am stunned by the power in this and there is not a lot I can say to you other than that your words are magical. If this does not inspire her to stay nothing will. Very well done.
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First off, the artwork attached is a brilliant compliment to the words that follow, and the form you've used to display those words was intriguing and kept me interested from the get-go (though the words themselves do that well enough). A tantillizing read.
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holly crap!!!...i know one thing...this poem would most definitely make me stay...everything on here blends together in such an excellent way...the words...the background...the peicing it together...the really cool photos...everything just goes right together
if this was my contest...im sure you would be the winner -
sweet poem
Awesome poem, it took my breath away. Tell me if you write any more poems about dark angels, or anything else. REALLY ENJOYED THIS!! -
I must say that this is by far the most amazing poem I have ever read. The words flowed like a winding river in a vast canyon, always staying together and keeping its course. Well written and if she doesnt stay after reading this, I dont think anything will make her stay. Once again well written.
Kel -
Such bouquets blossom in a plethra of explurlative motions in this elabrate piece.I certainly know this might turn my head as far as assessing weather I'd stay or not.~~just plain jane suseann
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*whistles* I wish I could say something more than wow when it comes to reading this verse... very impressive, truly. Best of luck in the contest!
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a must-read for all!
BRILLIANT<this is a powerfully intoxicating poem,wow,i am blown away by your imagery,your flow,i loved the content,masterfully written,well-versed!!! -
thanks, oh dark angelic daughter... (now where else are you ever going to hear that!) (just another reason for staying... and where else would you get one of these... or
or ! Just a few things for you to think about (and maybe cherish!)
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It is a beautiful poem. I love angels. The angel is very sad, uit sounds to me. I hope she has some peace.
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AWESOME WORK ON THIS POEM I LOVED IT
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X cellente!!
Nice write...POWERFULL grafic and peacefully nurturing words.. -
Great.
Wow Great. I loved it. Your words put a wonderful picture in my mind. But This would want to make me Stay if i was thinking of leaving AP. -
You'r really something else, ya know that? I Loved this!! It was so meaningful, and both visually and literally, it was really well organized. I'm envious, you're great.
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Wow! This one just blew me away.....
Thanks for the superb entry dad
Di
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Excellent
Wow, the imagery was perfect. The rythm and tone were even and it flowed well. The letter only enhanced the poem. I liked the last bit the best about the river of deception and how nothing is different on the other side. Very well written, and it looks like it took a lot of time, not a crappy 10 minute one. GREAT JOB! (GOOD LUCK)
~ Julia -
this poem was realy great
it flowed woderful
i could feel this poem
you rock
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Wow. THat was amazing!!!! I really enjoyed reading it! Best of Luck!!!!!!!!
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WOW... This is an awesome poem for an awesome ap sister!! i will come up with something for this soon!!!
Hugs,
Your brightest angel!!
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