traveling down the super-highway
screw the speed limit
sixty-five
and you still can't stay alive
if you have a wreck.. your body will fly
into a hundred pieces
traveling behind an eighteen-wheeler
I know
the car on my tail is a drug-dealer
I'll just step on the gas
and go sling-shotting around
leave the vacuum and meet the head-on wind
dropping the empty bottle
makes a nice little clinking sound
what the hell? there is a car in my lane
coming right at me
and there is another one right behind him!
damned sunday drivers
I'll show them
fish-tailing off into the other lane
doesn't that oncoming driver have any brains
thought I saw a flash from the corner of my eye
probably hit someone
hope they are okay
or at least have good insurance!
driving along at ninety-five
I'll just have a sip from my brown paper sack
gotta hurry, surgery scheduled for 6:55
blue-lights blinking in the rear view mirror
must be after that bright red car
breaking the speed limit, they are all fools
yes, that's just what they are
just in case I'll
have a breath mint, oh, hell have two
slow it down and give a signal
pull right over by the side of the road
I need to pee like a frigging toad
felt a tap on my shoulder
and looked around
hello officer what did I do
you were doing ninety-eight and caused a wreck
ran a car right off the road
oh, my, God, are they okay
I am a doctor and I am on my way
to an emergency at Mercy Hospital
gotta save this little girl from
going to an early grave
sorry, but I just couldn't be late
you'll give me an escort
thank you sir
tearing up the ticket was a mighty nice thing to do
follow the blue light with sirens blasting
reminds me of dancing at that party last year
flashing lights, some drug induced
I believe dr. cappa overdosed
dying at 36
that's pretty sad, but I'm kind of glad
I was there to help out his wife
gave her a little roxilox
you know to help with the pain
she had one fine hotbox
I cured what ailed her
that's for sure
just what she needed to get on with her life
just another day in the life
of a mighty fine doctor
trying to save the sick and the very ill
and helping the needy along the way
car is swerving...just a little bit
need to get that tire checked out
soon as I can
hope Joe brings his stuff to work
after we cut we'll have a little hit
I'm feeling just a little tired
but when that scalpel is in my hand
I'll feel all wired
and ready to go
Author notes
long, I know...past, present tense all jumbled together to indicate the doctor's state of mind
Written June 25th, 2006
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What did you think
Comments
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Screwed all right!
This is quite modern contemporary lapsing into the prosaic only occasionally.
Atmosphere has been generated through line lengths; diction; flow of consciousness; graphic visual descriptions. This poem manages to take chaos on a super highway and chaos in a driver's mind and cohere the two into an experience that is scary and salutary.
Fine work.
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This simply frightened me. Made me want to really think twice about having surgery...
Wonderfully descriptive and you certainly do have a way of making the jumbled mind come alive. Scattered thought processes but spot on when the instant calls for it. Excellent. ~Pamela
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Well hello and welcome to the contest dolly! I didn't see you come in! lol Glad you were able to crash the party. Always nice to see you.
This is quite different then is normal for you, or at least what I've known to be normal for you. A real poetic ramble you have going on here. I can see easily how it can start to get long on you. A little trick to use is snap images at certain points. When you hit a scene, like when the cars were run off the road, you use two or three image words to project instead. It will help with length.
I realize that I normally do a full blown out thing, but I'm really more of a co-judge this time, so I've been biting my tongue a bit. Hope that doesn't disappoint. Still, a lovely little adventure piece outside of the box. Thanx for coming by.
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