We have come to a wall, what do we do?
Walk around it?
Turn back?
Tear it down?
I stumbled last night to find words to say
I’m not used to that with you
Usually words flow from my mouth
But suddenly there was silence
A deadening silence
I don’t know what to say
I don’t know what to do
Talk to me
Please do not dismiss
What we have
Open up to me
Your words may hurt me
But the silence is devastating
The frustration of trying to reach you is overwhelming
You have hurt me deeply
I never thought you would do this to me
No, not you
You valued us more than that
Or so I thought
You may one day look over the wall you have built
And realize that you have lost someone who is no
Longer fighting to take the wall down
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Written June 24th, 2006
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This is really a wonderful piece I am sorry for the pain in your words. You have really projected a one sided relationship or at least thats what i got out of it and it's worded just beautifully...Great write ....Micahel -
Very well written. I know that wall all to well and am saddened by it. This is very strong and truthful. Great methaphor and imagery. Wonderfully writte.
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This is a nice work. There is some strong and meaningful imagery found within this write that says alot. Also the imagery coveys deep feelings that enhance the words and their meaning.
Keep up the great work.
LIZ -
This is a very good piece. It's easy to tell that this is personal because the words read exactly like they were pulled from the heart. I loved the whole little wall metaphor thing too.
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So nice to see something new from you! I really loved this write and I related to it so well (you have no idea!!). Wonderful job!
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Thank you ladysaskia for your encouraging words.
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I am speechless i dont know what to say. WOW again i must commend you this is a wonderful poem i really really love it. keep up the good work.
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Not sure if my im went through. Thank you for your kind words. Yes this is a personal piece and written awhile ago. Just a chapter in my life so to speak...But life goes on and it has.
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Nice imagery here
Is this a personal piece? I liked the metaphor of the wall, keep writing- this was a very well written piece, quite a sad piece about love
Thanks for your comment
All the best
Pozo
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