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there is a void


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


in the existence of a few among us


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 



that we long to fill


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 






with dreams


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


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dreams


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 


 



















and ANGST!!!







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and when all is settled down again...






























laughter














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and finally,






the most cherished and rarest gift of all...


























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must I spell it out...














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I think you know what it is already...!















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there could be only one letter remaining...













yes,

















it is




















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as in  e lusive ...





















 e vermore






















 e ternal






















ach e


















a gift that can be captured





















only in a moment






























without words



























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but here, we try

Author notes


Written June 24th, 2006

In a list

A contest entry

What did you think

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Comments

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  • Nermin Nazim
    June 25, 2006
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    that was a wonderful idea, really innovative and so greaaat. loved it. and the words, yes started getting more tense and ufolding.
    great great great


  • Sonja
    June 25, 2006
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    That was really different and crazy but unique idea. tic tic tic
    word words words...It looks like...hm... almost like a mobiuos. I started to scratc my head before the end the end the end tic tic tic
    ~Sonja~


  • suseann
    June 25, 2006
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    This scrolling created a case of vertigo. But nailed the poetic spot of the poet's purpose in a talent's form.Nice penning Poet!~Suseann


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 25, 2006
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    Have had poems that go this way accidentally when something goes wrong, but have never read one spaced this way on purpose. Very unusual, creative and unique.


  • cherche -d -ame
    June 25, 2006
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    Now I know why mom always spoke of you as the creative one . I must admit this is the most bizzare , yet fascinating way I have ever seen anything on here. The entire time I felt as if I was falling and it was almost scary to think as to where that could be. Great job , and best wishes in this contest
    xoxoxoxoxo on the left cheek
    reenie

  • Misty skyes
    June 25, 2006
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    Sensational

    Most effective piece of art came within view as I scrolled throughout the poem of angst...there was a strong sensation of touch throughout.


  • twilight seduction
    June 24, 2006
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    Nice on the text size and formatting, that must have been tough to organize. I think that this is a great way to capture people by the curiousity as yoo start to want to see whats next. I like the "e" "e"xamples best because the are so cute.


  • CokebottleEyes
    June 24, 2006
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    this is clever
    i especially liked when the poem got to the letter 'e' and how each word after had a space before or after the 'e'.
    the bold angst did crack me up as there are soooooo many of those types of poems on this site...a few of them mine but more of them not
    thoroughly enjoyable


  • Nyouya
    June 24, 2006
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    Wow, that was cool. I liked having to scroll down, it was awesome. I also liked how the "dreams" got smaller and smaller until "Angst" was blared out. I generally just loved it...


  • Jaded Eloquence
    June 24, 2006
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    This was wonderfully put together, I completely adored the style and tic tic tics...Great job.

  • PhenollBarbidoll
    June 24, 2006
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    this is very creative...i think the background goes really well with this poem...i love how it is set up...its very unique and its so awesome

    very cool poem and very good imagination and time placed into it


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 24, 2006
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    Ohhh, nooo...not angst!!! Very cool, Poet...a lot of work, but very cool... Interesting layout & progression throughout the creative process, my Friend...I haven't "suffered" for my art in awhile, but it has been known to happen... I'd like to thank you for entering such a great poem into my contest, Wayne. As you know, from the contest statement I made, I am slightly obsessed with poetry...the writing of it, the reading of it, the inspiration for it...I'm pleased to see you "suffer" from the same "malady" as I do... I appreciate your efforts, both for this contest & in general...Please, keep writing...This World needs all the Poets it can hold...Well done, Poet...Good luck in the contest...Be well, Poet... Wanda

    (from my author's page)

    "Among the Haida Indians of the Pacific Northwest, the verb
    for 'making poetry' is the same as the verb 'to breathe'."
    ~ Tom Robbins, from the book: Another Roadside Attraction


  • Untouchable Blue
    June 24, 2006
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    Hey, what do you know, we meet again. Anyway, this poem was really cool, good job with the whole layout, as well as with the content.

  • Alexis-Rueal
    June 24, 2006
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    Bravo

    WOW! Great poem. I love the presentation of the piece. Just keep scrolling and don't stop to think... the message is so very clear and so very true... good job. No... GREAT job.


  • crisstiena
    June 24, 2006
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    Amazing. Absolutely mind-shatteringly brilliant. (Picks up
    pen and paper and exits reverently, shutting the door
    behind me...)

    ~ crisstiena


  • Nocturne
    June 24, 2006
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    I've no idea if this was the effect you wre going for, but this made me laugh so hard. This just made my day a little bit brighter. Great idea and excecution!


  • Captain Morgan
    June 24, 2006
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    inspirational... original format... I enjoy how you capture the reader, make them focus on the ticking... and then the word dream capturing your attention, getting smaller... and then ANGST is in your face, like a rude awakening, back to reality, its original... and beautifully written... nice job


  • victoria Secret
    June 24, 2006
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    wow. lol. This sure was fucking amazing. Nothing I've ever witness on here before. You've done an awsome job. Really interesting, unique and everything. wow.


    victoria


  • sanmdr
    June 24, 2006
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    seems like self expression... good though


  • jaimevidau1
    June 24, 2006
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    YEA!! Loved this write...Loved the actual definition given for 'love'...Keep it up!!!


  • Scarlet Ambrosia
    June 24, 2006
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    Dad, that was interesting piece
    well done!
    I always enjoy reading your works
    Di


  • wbiro gold member
    June 24, 2006
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    thanks, Cordura, touchpad? Oh, you poor, tortured soul! lol then it was a challenge for you to read...!


  • June 24, 2006
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    This was fun to read lol. Took me a while to scroll though because my Touchpad is retarded. Anywho. . . the angst part kinda made me jump because I wasn't expecting it. Cool poem overall.


  • Lady Altheia
    June 24, 2006
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    This is cool. I like it. I like the poem in the poem. How you spelled out love and all the dreaming. You must dream alot.


  • memorywitch20
    June 24, 2006
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    omg! this is so good it leave me in awe! ya its really great poem i wish i was as good as you are but am not but you are a great poet thats for sure!!

  • wbiro gold member
    June 24, 2006
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    thanks, SimpleSarcasm, I've used the potentially endless space of a webpage before... this one? This one began with the silent act of 'writing'... and time... which is 'the void'... so, I thought, what better way to show the passage of time and 'the void' than using that endless space...!

  • wbiro gold member
    June 24, 2006
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    thanks, Artemis, on a piece that relies on the browser like this one, it should be tested on different computers to see how the spacing is, as it is a critical element... (and I still need to do that!)


  • SimpleSarcasm
    June 24, 2006
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    Very, very imaginative piece of writing. I like the way you involve the reader. I'm curious what inspired you to write in this type of format? Hope you don't mind the question.


  • Artemis Gem
    June 24, 2006
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    interesting effect, though I think it somewhat draws away from the piece. But I admit, its important to have some space between all of those phrases. Very true poem. Keep it up!!!!

    pegleg


  • AgeofAquarius
    June 24, 2006
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    LOL..very kewel jewel... Very true to our reality, our nature...unfortunately we seek validation in someone elses eyes and smile ignoring what WE really need....

    Just to feel whole...

    Write on... needs an auto scroll and be on a website...


  • u took my user name
    June 24, 2006
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    i like the effect this has on the reader. you engage us mentally, emotionally (as well as physically... all that scrolling down i had to do. oh my.... that's my right hand index finger work out for the day)

    so yeah, i enjoyed this. well done.
    best wishes,
    Neri


  • SexyAngel0418
    June 24, 2006
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    This is an awesome poem AP Daddy!!! It's definately different!!! You did a great job!!! Keep up the great worK!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth

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