I would like to find an island of cheese
all surrounded with a cold ocean of milk,
where dairy production's grow like a trees;
leaves are special and fruits soft like a silk.
I'll have my own comfy place like a mouse,
and I will prepare a tasty soft whipped cream
I'll have a lot of strawberries in my house;
and bit of chocolate to accomplish my dream.
Cold river of plain water could help me too
if you like it, here I'll set a place for you.
Author notes
Written June 24th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Island of Food w/Sea of a Drink by intanglio2ring.
300 points, ended June 25, 2006, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Excellent
"Cold river of plain water could help me too
if you like it, here is enough place for you. " Oh! you are so nice. I take your cheese,chocolet, etc as kiss, embrace, whisper etc and think your poem as a write on a romantic journey of two souls!
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Thank you surfergirl. I am glad you like it .
~Sonja~ -
Terrific entry! Congratulations on the Silver! Very original and tasty sounding! The graphic is perfect too!
SG
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Welcome to this cheesy land
I am glad you are cheese lover
it's much easier to understand
my cold milky ocean shower.
~Sonja~
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Dear Sonja,
We both agreed that this would truly be a wonderful place to live. We are both very much cheese lovers.
Son Of The Ring & Tang -
Thank you hoodoolover for your cute comment, good wishes and whipped cream
~Sonja~ -
Thanks Sam. I am not selfish to ocupate this great place only for my own use. It's always better to eat in good company.
~Sonja~ -
Lol, this was really fun, and they rhyming very pleasing, best wishes
whipped
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This poem was so much fun to read. I LOVE your imagination. Every part of this poem WORKS. Excellent imagery, wonderful subject and a style that is a joy to read. I liked your presentation, the flow and form and ESPECIALLY the invitation to the reader to come be a part of your wonderful fantasy.
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Please come and be my guest, choose whatever you like!
~Sonja~ -
wow..I'll join you there too.
Wish you the best luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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If you like cheese, milk and all other named delicious and tasty yummy yummy, you are always wecome to be my guest. BTW, as more you eat my island will always grow to be complete. This is magic of fantasy.
~Sonja~ -
A VERY BEAUTIFUL POEM
You have conjured up a truly beautiful place. Can I come?
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Thanks Ami. I just wonder if here is only one mistake. That's a real mirracle. thank you for your nice comment and help. If you will need any help with free verses just shoot.
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Mmmmm, very delectable write and so full of imagery and fantasy. Who could have thought of a Island of cheese, goodness. I loved this piece, I am not very creative and most of my pieces if not all are personal. I am going to post something on fairies later on and will send you the link, my very first try at fantasy. I really think this is a winning piece, there is just one spelling mistake - wiped cream should be wipped cream. The flow is beautifull too and I am a total rhyme addict and am battling to write free verse, but my new pieces will be free verse hope you enjoy it.
I especially liked:
leaves special and fruits soft like a silk
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