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Rebalance





Eyes peer and fix upon known claimed existence
Disregarding secondary emotions clearly evident
Invading territorial boundaries previously placed
Unaware, casting existing renderings into a whirlwind




Shameless actions acted out in high honor
Causing strife to spiraling psychological winds
Bag of masks spill and camouflage takes over
Forked tongue bitten for sakes uncertain




Angst barrels through barricades preventing collisions
Logic steps up to play with transparent reasoning
Theories pave new cobblestone pathways for travel
Assumptions stumble about upon unsteady ground




Conclusions drawn upon doubled thoughts inflicting
Loathing internal reflections of emotions unseen
Wrapped, drowning in a blanket of utter confusion
Animosity, steadfast in its growth within the psyche




Soul slowly suffocates beneath a disease causing sin
Smoke screens cover shattered bonds thought strong
Colorized energies chaotically misaligned in a haze
Gripping logical sanity attempting to rebalance






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Written June 24th, 2006

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  • Ami amour
    June 24, 2006
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    This is such a remarkable sad and powerfull write. Excellent choice of word with a poem flowing so well. You realy write with so much intensity that it can be felt right through. This was my favourite stanza:
    Conclusions drawn upon doubled thoughts inflicting
    Loathing internal reflections of emotions unseen
    Wrapped, drowning in a blanket of utter confusion
    Animosity, steadfast in its growth within the psyche


  • Sunkissedrose
    June 24, 2006
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    Amazing!

    I love the last stanza, it shows strength and unsurmountalbe courage, which I know you have plenty of. I love how this flowed, and how it takes you in and holds you until the very last line. Excellent write.
    ~Carrie


  • Iohagh
    June 24, 2006
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    Darling

    As always wow

    Smoosh

    Janet


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    June 24, 2006
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    This is a beautiful write. It is thought provoking and challenging to the reader. It makes us think of our lives and its substance.


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    June 24, 2006
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    Sis.. I am always here for you as you know and this poem reflects the internal struggles you are going through so well sweety... I am so proud of you for doing this poem and Master is right. The tough healing is very hard but worth every moment in the end. I love you sis and there is nothing and nobody who can take or steal this love away from me. I am here for you angel woman. I love you, Sis and I am so proud to know you and have you as my sister. Keep it up honey, you are worth this battle and effort. I got your back hon.

    Hugs and so much love.

    Sylvyr


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 24, 2006
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    Very deep and meaningful write. It has many layers of meanings that most all of us can relate to. Very well written. Hang in there. Jeannie D Hunter


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 24, 2006
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    A most excellent piece, sweet sister mine! Very deep and thought provoking! I hope when you take inventory of your life, dear soul, that you will see there are many many people who truly love you and wish you all the best!


  • AgeofAquarius
    June 24, 2006
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    very powerfull flow of verbiage in a thought like collage...could feel the confusion, frustration...


  • Gwenevere
    June 24, 2006
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    Looking at ones life and taking stock can be painful.Having looked the best thing to do is to accept that the past cannot be changed and move on with the resolution that from now on things will be different.A great poem with deep insight into the turmoil of the mind, Ros


  • juggilinjuggala
    June 24, 2006
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    very nicely written, congrats

  • ConfabulateME
    June 24, 2006
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    wonderful.

    Wow, that was a lot. It was very good, though. The lack of punctuation makes it a little hard to read, but it also adds a nice touch. I also like the picture at the top. Did you take that? .. You have wonderful thoughts in here, which were to me somewhat confusing at first, but I just had to take a little more time to read that.. And I like that. Sometimes it's good to have something that makes your readers think. I love the way this was put together and the deep thoughts in it. +fav. Good job, keep up the good work.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    June 24, 2006
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    wow babe! this is beautifully written yet sooo sad I know healing is tough but in the end worth it I am soo proud of all the work and strength you are displaying and carrying of this burden upon your shoulders
    Love,
    Blaze
    Edited on Jun 24, 3:07 because ''.

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