I hear a song among the night
A haunting sad refrain
A melody, a sad lament
That speaks of anguished pain
It calls to me in haunted dreams
It echoes in my sleep
A woman's voice a distant call
That causes me to weep
She speaks my name in dulcet tones
I feel her every where
And as her voice floats round my bed
I feel her steady stare
She calls to me this shadow voice
A luring trance like air
As gentle as the softest kiss
It's more than I can bear
"Come to me love I need you here"
"I'm so alone you see"
"I am a victim of the night"
"Cursed through eternity"
"I'm Mia of the Vampyre realm"
"I hunger for your heart"
"Please come my love, to be with me"
"And never to depart"
"Please kiss my hungry ruby lips"
"Caress my raven hair"
"Embrace me love I need your touch"
"Please hurry to my lair"
Compelled to go I cannot stop
I rise up from my bed
Too scared to move I venture out
To play among the dead
I feel my body float on air
My feet are off the ground
Through silence of this darkest night
I hear her gentle sound
"That's right my love please come to me"
"You'll soon be at my door"
"My passion is too much to bear"
"Be mine forever more"
"I feel the heat inside of you"
"It pulsates with a beat"
"Please come to me my sweetest love"
"I need to feel your heat"
Her tomb a dark foreboding sight
A sensual affair
In colors of a bloody red
Is Mia's vampyre lair
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Her beauty is beyond compare
I lust for her in sin
She gently takes me by my hand
Beguiled as we begin
Her luscious lips so full and moist
Caress my face and hands
A gentle lick upon my neck
I do what she commands
We lay down in a satin box
That's trimmed in gold and lace
A look of purest ecstasy
A smile is on her face
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"Please look at me don't turn away"
"I'm yours to do your will"
"Caress my flesh with lusting hands"
"Your life then I shall spill"
Our bodies move in heated lust
A gentle throbbing beat
And as we end our sinful dance
I sense a sad defeat
She suckles at my throbbing neck
A piercing pain so rare
I lay there still I cannot move
At least i shouldn't dare
~~~
The morning comes the sun is up
I find myself in bed
I reminisce about my dream
And of the living dead
The song will come again tonight
Nocturnal lust so right
Lured from my bed on songs she sings
My Mia of the night
Copyright 2003 By Johnny Wheeler
Author notes
Choice #1 Vampires
Written March 24th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Poem Sequences by neptune386.
500 points, ended August 11, 2004, 28 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Excellent
Excellent. You really have something with your Mia character. I know these are last years goodies, but I'm new to the site! -
your mia of the night does sound
like a treasure rarely found
beautiful and horney too
sounds like the woman for you. -
You my friend are incredible, I am thoroughly enjoying Mia. You write with a dark sensuality that caresses me and perhaps in a sense, I feel as if I am her.
Ruby lips, raven hair, eyes that glow seductively. She waits for the shadows to fall where she is once again alive in her immortality. -
Excellent
This piece is so sensually beautiful. The imagery of this vampress so beautiful, sensual, intoxicating. The flow of each line, is amazing, each stanza bleeding into the next, never ceasing it's flow. Wonderful job Johnny! This so far is my favorite piece by you! It's truly amazing! Thank you for entering my contest! Good luck to you
~Somber -
damn this is good!!! an amazing story!!! meter is just flawless. sensuous and earthy, perfect in just every way. a rich and erotic story.
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This poem is one of the most well written I have ever read, your rhyme format was constant throught, and it never felt forced. The flow was so steady. I am giving this a bookmark my friend! And I really liked the sensual but not overtly sexual nature of the piece. Great job!
~M~ -
Very good.
Well done. You describe the lure of tempation well. It's interesting how you use the pain of loniness and sadness as the lure. -
And yet another brilliant poem! You really do have a gift for metre, flow, whatever one chooses to call it.
Really really good!
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Excellently written with a very good use of rhythm and rhyme. It tells a story very well and keeps the reader's attention throughout it. You avoided many cliches about vampires that could have been made and finished with an intriguing, original story. The attention you made to the details added even more to it, bringing the reader in closer, allowing them to imagine the scenario in their mind through each stanza along with the great use of imagery. A very wonderful piece this is. Good luck in the contest.
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Great
Wow
this is good I love how you put emotion into the poem and make a picture out of words. It's fantastic I just can't believe how good this really is. This is just great I can actually picture what it's like. I hope that it makes it into the contest good luck. 
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Damn this is good! I love the whole tone and feel, it's so very romantic and in no way tacky. Bravo!
And I love those Dragons. -
You have the ability to hypnotize us with the words you write. When the rhyme and meter are this perfect...it just lulls you.. pulling you deeply to this lucious dark place you speak of.
You do very excellent work... but I'm sure you already know that.
Mary ann -
wow i love this poem, so erotic and dark my approval
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Mia is such a lovely name. Especially for a vampyre. I'm so used to unique names I can barely understand yet she has such a simple short, yet lovely, name. I simply adore these stories of Mia. They're wonderful :).
-Kayla
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PS I'm probably going to be leaving many comments now that I've become obssessed with your lovely poetry. -
The song of the seductress. I'm pleased that you have several writes about her, she is amazing.
-Intricate -
This is an incredibly good write. I love the way you weave the story through your poems. Very beautifully written. Enchanting.
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How dark, yet enchantingly beautiful. I am amazed at all of your poetic talents:) You are a true master of the art.
Carrie -
Oh how I enjoyed meeting Mia....this is , well lovely in it's write , dreamy in it's prose , and sensuous in between
I redid that pic if you want to use it ....mailing it in a few to your e-mail...will put Mia in subject line
Reenie
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awesome awesome:) lol, makes me wonder about myself...
i like her name...or so i thought
i really loved this. your style is great and i just keep reading your poems, lol, even though i dont have time;)
love and smiles,
mia -
Whispered voice on misty scent
in a dark and sultry chant
Willing mind to will away
but finding that you can't
secrets on the night bequeath
the soul to vampire teeth
Lovely indeed!!
~~whims... -
Excellent write.......
this is wonderful..
i now must go on to the next one.....i see there are more......
Ann -
LOL LOL LOL Johnny, I see all the most beautiful vampires lining up here ... hahahhahaha
You know, you are talented and so popular, Poet! No wonder you cannot leave Mia be ...
Next time she calls you, just say ONE word ... yes? NO!
I enjoyed it, even though I hate vampires.
Myra -
I love your stories of Mia. Thay are so intriguing.
Anna -
spellbinding
These poems are of great interest to me. It's rare to find someone that can capture the subject, though. This write is as spellbinding as Mia's sinful song. After reading this one, I will defenitely be reading more. Again, great write!
-Insanitys Mistress -
sensual
Very sensual and dark. I enjoyed reading. You held me captive with the flow of your words and the rhythm. Very nice rhyming, didn't feel forced at all. Lovely words. -
Well I cross all boundaries of poetry . I do write in many styles ... from love to sorrow ... depression and such . I ve always loved reading these types of works as this is one area I enjoy reading >your work drew me in ..and held my attention ... it was well written and it just flowed right into my thoughts . Someday I hope to write a piece as good as this one ...its something I havent been able to capture yet .... till then I will enjoy the works of this style from talented people like yourself . Im goin to as well keep this one ...its inspired me greatly ...thanks for sharing this .
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Excellent! Well done!
This was captivating and bewitching! It flowed like blood from a vampire's kiss! Well-written, never missed a beat...a real treat! Thumbs up for this excellent poem that made me thirsty for more! 
Maureen
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Wow though I am not usually much of a fan of vampire poems. This one is very bequiling, haunting and beautiful really. Powerful write! I enjoy you pen my friend.
Red -
A fare of finest fantasy tale, set before our eyes,
A scan and rhyme so well worked, the mystery never dies,
I’m glad you found your ecstasy; it sure sounds loads of fun,
But on a rather sadder note – night shift is to come…
Why do vampires spend hundreds of years practicing, only to be knocked off by twits with twigs?
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Fangtastic.
It is hard to find a good poem about vampires, but this is a good one! I like the steady beat and how it flows, it doesn't hiccup or trip, I like this a lot. Cool background and color choice too! And please forgive the bad pun below, I can't help myself sometimes. -
incredible write on a female vampire!
legend has it, they're such sensual, yet dangerous creatures!
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Johnny,
You are a master at story telling, at enrapture, enticing...and a whole bunch of other things that would just take up way to much room to print here. If you give me the ok, I'll send you a look for Mia...*grins slightly* I have a bit of a soft spot for the vampires as it's what I play in my RP *Grins* Wonderfully passionate write Johnny, terrifying and intoxicating all at once...I believe I'm breathless *S*
-Angel aka WoundedAngel. -
Beautiful and haunting! You are very talented with rhythm and rhyme.
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8.2/10
I don't like the 'among' in the first line even as 'amongst' I don't think it sounds good. Just don't agree with the usage of that word.
As the flow (in my opinion) of Scott, not language but the flow. A great piece here, just don't like that one word in the first line.
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Thoughts of Vampires have always unnerved me. However the female vampire was always beautiful in the movies and the poor hapless man was always drawn by her etheareal beauty. As in this case, you managed to turn an eerie story into a sensual feast, I enjoyed it so much.
~Von~ -
beautifully written, reminds me of -sort of- Goblin Market by C. Rossetti
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nice story-vampire-epic-poem yes if this is the way to go bla blah!! you have the hilton-hotel for vampire overnights!
(just wondering, maybe she was the hag of the morning? with longish teeth?)...amusing peom thanks! -
Stunning
Really, I would say the same as Wendy, didn't really care of the sorts but this was really awesome, kind of like spell binding, luring the read into the journey of your fantasy, or rather your dream...this was absolutely stunning, enjoyed immensely...Rena~ -
wonderfully written
Wow. I usually don't care to much for the vanpire poems, but this was great. You've really drawn me into this one. This had a really nice flow. Wonderful. I'm gonna print this one out and show it to my sister. She's always had a fascintation with the undead.
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