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a group of huts

great glaciers
scraping granite

molding it
like clay

leaving behind
a group of huts

and flocks of crows


a land so vast
multitudes melt into it
like glacial waters
into stony vales
of spruce wood

Author notes

The name Canada is said to come from a Native American word meaning "a group of huts " or "a village".
Written June 23rd, 2006

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  • DogFish silver member
    July 7, 2006
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    Thanks for the compliment and suggestions .I may come back to this poem in the future to expand on it .


  • jantastic gold member
    July 6, 2006
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    You seem to be able to use word economy very well in your writing to create simple, yet effective images. I wonder how this would read if the first three sections were made active -

    great glaciers
    scrape granite

    mold it
    like clay

    leave behind
    a group of huts

    I think the short lines add to the piece and its simplistic beauty.

    Merci.