My salvation
Nights are empty
cold and slow
Day is worse
Death from the crow
Trying to kill the loneliness
Only to lose myself again
I can't remember
When my unhappiness began
Remind my of the love I lost
Remind me once again
Remind me of what it cost
To start over once again
Spare me, my salvation
And return to me, my beloved
Return to me, salvation
I'm dying, save me from the Unloved
Remind me of my heartache
And return to me my fears
Save me for your sake
Keep away my tears
Remind me of salvation
But show me none of your fake love
Author notes
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tourniquet - evanesence
Written June 23rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Song Titles and Options by ShadedRequiem.
300 points, ended June 27, 2006, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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All right, this is an exceptional piece. Wonderful use of imagery, and a story well told. The last two lines, make the poem, they bring your reader back to earth and ground them in reality. A truly impressive write, great job.
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that was a great song to write about. i liked this a lot. good luck in the contest. it had great value
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Beautiful
This is an amazing poem, it's really gripping and it held my attention really, really well.
"Trying to kill the loneliness
Only to lose myself again
I can't remember
When my unhappiness began"
This inspires me to write. I suppose the best compliment a poet can get is that his poetry inspires another to write their own. And I must say, this piece is most definitely inspiring. I hope you get the place you deserve in the contest this is enterent into. Good luck and fantastic-elastic job!
Abbi -
This is very good. It's full of meaning. I really liked it. Good job and good luck.
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