Watch the water flow
Hear the gentle sounds
Of the mountain creek going
Through the hills and the meadows
Now it comes to a peak
High above
Where the mountain creek
Empties into a pool of water below
And as the water falls
A rainbow appears
In the mist
That the falling water creates
And you can hear
The loud roar
As the water falls
Into the pool of water below
It is a very beautiful
Sight to see
A waterfall
Such as this
Author notes
3] Talk to me about a thing in nature. Uno. One. A tree. A fish. A lune. Preach to me its wonders and beauties. It could be a microbe or a mountain. Just make it tangible though invisible.
Bring me a shrubbery!
Written June 22nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Nature Heals Contest by kareneisenlord.
1200 points, ended April 27, 2008, 42 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Wildlife by xox-emma-xox.
425 points, ended April 10, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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A great entry
thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent
so take care
message me for anything
Billy (Rhythm Child) -
Judging of the Contest, Nature Heals. The entries were all so beautiful. The gold trophy was easy to judge. “Tree of Love” for option number 2. The rest weren’t quite so clear cut. I awarded a trophy for each best entry per option, and then honorable mentions for the other two. I must admit, I have a real soft spot for mothers and grandmothers. And these were the two that won the silver and the bronze. “Precious Radiant Gem” won the silver for option number 3. After reading this poem, it was one that stayed with me to the end; the endearing love of a mother represented by a gem always worn about the poet’s neck. “Beautiful Ray of Perfection” won the bronze for option number 1. I was extremely moved by this eloquent and loving tribute to the poet’s grandmother. These were both new poems that were written specifically for this contest. If there were more trophies to give out, many more would have won. I gave “The Laughing Brook” an honorable mention for option #4. “The Touch of a Friend” won an honorable mention for option #5. There were 22 more honorable mentions; and here is the list. All lovely and worthy of this and more. I cannot tell you how grateful I am for all of your entries, especially the ones that wrote especially for this contest. A special thanks goes To the other judges, Theresa and Nikki, whose help was invaluable. We were unanimous about the gold trophy. If you have time, I highly recommend that You read “Tree of Love” . It is one of the most beauteous poems that I have read in a long time. All of the contest entries were commented on at least once by me and the other judges. I enjoyed reading them all and felt extremely enriched by it. The Tree of Love new gold for tree # 2 option Precious Radiant Gem. new #3 gems silver beautiful ray of perfection new #1 bronze The Laughing Brook pre h.m. for # 4 The Touch of a Friend Pre h.m for sidewalk café #5 My Strength Around my Neck new h.m. #3 Broken, Half, Unfinished new h.m. Healing Nation h.m. [ Looking through the trees, ] new h.m. Feel better than ever a bloom amidst the gardens. new h.m. No Matter What, Hold Onto Your Dream new h.m. The Quintessence of a Tree pre h.m. LOTUS (oriku) pre h.m. Skeletal Quartz new stones h.m. [ As the water cascades down, ] new h.m. Chocolate Daisies pre h.m. Purpose new h.m The Ash Tree new h.m. Nature’s Mirror pre h.m Nature is a Babysitter pre h.m. Water Falls pre h.m. Magnificent Water new h.m. A Hidden Beauty- h.m. The Little Flower new h.m. "Today, I thought about the woods again..." (Translation) h.m. Nature’s cure - pre h.m. Reflection II - pre h.m. 24 h.m.’s all together
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Very nice, I liked the flow! Well done!
Emma ^_^
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This beautiful write reminds me of where my husband proposed too me by his favorite waterfall up near his parents place a few years ago. Such beautiful imagery I so enjoyed reading. Thanks for entering and good luck
Theresa
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You really make me want to leave right now and go to the mountains. This was lovely. I liked how you built up the crescendo of how a waterfall comes to be. Its journey, so-to-speak - and then how it cascades down as a waterfall. Nice imagery and thank you for sharing. Blessings to you and best wishes!
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This puts some great images in my mind
Good luck in the contest
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Oh that really was beautiful! I love how it gives you such a peaceful feeling! Thank you for entering, and good luck!
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This was a peaceful poem to read, the imagery was great, I could really imagine myself being there! Keep up the great work!
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It is beautiful poem. The flow is nice. Good luck on the contest.
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beautiful description and the flow is also intact! thanks for entering and good luck preets
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very good
wonderfull my friend i love the sound of water and have a small waterfall in my pond very lovely write thank you for sharing this creative poem with us and good luck in the contest
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Great
Lovely.This is splendid.I like this poem better then your other entry. -
Yes this is a beautiful sight to see!
I love waterfalls and am planning on adding one to my backyard.
They bring so much tranquility and joy to your heart and to the hearts of others who are lucky to find them. This is a great write, I love the flow of this. Thanks for sharing it!
Allen0826 -
Beautiful write my friend. Really makes me want to be part of the scenery watching this waterfall. Great write and good luck in the contest.
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I agree with phoenix about making the first verse four lines!! Nice flow to this piece and some nice descriptions - good luck!!
Sarah Louise Hudson
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Good Luck
Great piece. It had a nice flow however, I do agree with phoenixonfire I think you should make the first stanza 4 lines as well. It would read heaps better!! Good luck to you in this contest.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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um ..just a suggestion..since all the paras have 4 lines..why dont u make the first para 4 lines as well ! that brings symmetry to the poem! besides this poem is cool!
thanks for entering and good luck!
will be commenting later properly !
preets
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