Why?
Why would you do this to me
Have I ever done anything to hurt you
Why?
Why, I loved you with all my heart
I thought we could have last
but I was wrong and betrayed once more
I talked to you about this before you said you would never hurt me
You lied
And now you have me crying here
So many wasted months
And on you I don't deserve this
I have done nothing to you but love you
I sweared to myself before that
I would never go out with someone who cheated
You told me you would never do a thing like that to me
And the only reason why I did decide to stay with you
Was because I loved you
I tried to get you off my mind but I couldn't
You have me broken
I would never forgive you
You heart breaker
You were the only one that I truly loved
And the only guy I thought I could have lasted with
I thought you weren't a jerk
You were my whole life....
And I still love you with all my heart
I will never forget this
To me you were my first
But now am gonna let go of you because,
I can't waste no more time with you
You broke my heart
So your free now I hope you feel better now
Now you can do whatever you want because,
I guess those feelings I have for you means nothing
So just remember I love you and I will never forget you
You have me sulking here like I have never had in my life
But I guess that means nothing to you so goodbye
Just remember I love you even though it doesn't matter..
Author notes
ForeverLastingComa
A contest entry
- What Hurts The Most by Ignis Corpus.
750 points, ended April 20, 2008, 58 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Betrayal by XXCrimsonRaineXX.
1380 points, ended April 27, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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thanx 4 enterin'
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i think your emotions may take over this poem a bit too much. Its a little 'samey' in places, and it sometimes loses its way.
thanks for entering and good luck!
sunny
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When relationships end a lot of questions come up. Its perfectly natural, but that of course ddoes not make it any easier.
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This reads a bit repetitive to me when it concerns your words. You have many filler words here that really can be removed to help the flow of the piece.
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It was an okay write. Parts of it didn't quite reach me but overall it was pretty good. I especially like lines 1-7. Good luck in the contest.
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A lovely piece of love and heartache, my best wishes in the contest.
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I know this feeling all too well, it's very heartbreaking and makes me want to cry even remembering it...beautifully done and very spectacularly put.
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just an amazing poem to begin with its just wow amazing i understand and have gone threw this, am going threw it really, bf decides to dump me becuase well he doesnt have a reason. hopefully a new guy will walk into ours lives that will out shine the old one.
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aww this is so sad! i'm sorry that some jerk hurt you like this. thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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actually when i got the real story, what really happened was their was this guy who liked me and me and him was REALLY CLOSE..almost best friends and i trusted him and knew him longer than my bf..so i trusted him and he lied to me and told me my bf cheated on me to try and get with me..now me and my bf are even stronger and been going out since sep 23 2005 so he didn't get anything good out of it except me and my bf =)
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Wow, this was truly an amazing write. I loved the emotion evoked in this poem, and the 3 and 5 stanzas were some of my favorite. The last stanza also really blew me away. Excellent write and good luck in my contest
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The whole damn poem had my crying cause I felt that you was right there by my side and me telling you the story as I wrote it. Though he never cheated on me that is the only thing... I know that feeling though. I do wish you the best of luck in this contest.
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aww..am sorry to hear that you and your bf broke up..tears help beleive me..things happen for a reason..i kind of feel bad for making you cry..sorry =(..
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After a relationship ends you are left with all this pain and unaswered questions. It hurts me to see someone as young as yourself going through such pain, just remember pain will only make you stronger.
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omG...i want to CRY!!!
that poem was so truthful
it made me feel your pain and idk i just loved it!
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