She is writing this -
driving me to words
to tell you:
just the sound of her voice
makes each day momentous.
She is driving me
to find the taste
of every blesséd kiss
in constructs
of nouns and verbs -
and I am mute.
I cannot articulate
the feeling welling up
inside
while all paths lead to us.
Go, now,
and tell your children:
all poetry arises
to the voice of true love,
and from the need the want the longing
to be naked before another
and not judged.
Author notes
Written June 22nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Poems on Poetry Contest (extended to July 2nd) by Night Hope.
300 points, ended July 2, 2006, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I still think this is beautiful.
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What a sweet love letter!
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another beautiful poem i see
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o0o0h excellent closing with the nekked judging! eloquent and definitely the type of thoughts pondered while sitting on a bridge over a creek, staring into the reflection of the moon. dammit i did it again, started writing a good comment and went all poetic. now i have to use those lines. and now im rambling too. shit. gotta stop.
i really loved:
in constructs
of nouns and verbs -
and I am mute.
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This is great ...I really enjoyed it .
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Darling who is beloved by a friend
I admit to admiring
this love you sing
how it inspires you
to feats daring do.
Smoosh
Janet -
Wonderful...
Wonderful poem. Great representation of what those we love drive us to do. How they make us feel. How they can make us feel so much and yet feel powerless to express it because it is so strong. -
Ah. I always look at the so-called most popular poetry, that is, the most applauded, which can't compare to the few rare gems on this site such as this, and wonder - what could people possibly be thinking?
This should be hailed, this should be applauded, this should be read with reverence. You don't try to hide a lack of talent behind foolish phrases and valiant words, nor do you attempt to be worldly and philosophical. With simple words, each placed just so, you write something so - so *true* that it seems deep and profound to each of us.
Well done. -
I do think more poems are written about love than any other topic. It makes us feel so good, or so bad, that the words just come rushing out, as in a rant sometimes. We can relate to this, for sure. Sentiments well expressed, easy to read and understand.
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This is very beautiful, well done!
Thank you for sharing this! -
"all poetry arises
to the voice of true love,
and from the need the want the longing
to be naked before another
and not judged."
Indeed he has heard it, -Saffron-; I know I've been telling him that for two years now...
He does write the most beautiful love poetry...Sighhh... How fortunate you both are, to be immersed in such radiance as this...I'd like to thank you for entering such a great poem into my contest, Scott. It's a wonderful piece, filled with the yearning ~ & the learning ~ that we've come to know so well from your talented pen...As you know, from the contest statement I made, I am slightly obsessed with poetry...the writing of it, the reading of it, the inspiration for it...I'm pleased to see you "suffer" from the same "malady" as I do... I appreciate your efforts, both for this contest & in general...Please, keep writing...This World needs all the Poets it can hold...Well done, Scribe...Good luck in the contest...Be well, Scribe...
Wanda
(from my author's page)
"Among the Haida Indians of the Pacific Northwest, the verb
for 'making poetry' is the same as the verb 'to breathe'."
~ Tom Robbins, from the book: Another Roadside Attraction
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I know you have heard this thousands and thousands of times, but you write the most beautiful love poetry, and of course, I think it's even more beautiful when you write it for me. I love you~~
Always, forever~~
Saffron
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Awesome.
This is really good, it shows the concept really well, and who on here can't relate to this in some way?
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