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Figs And Vinaigrette Tears

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Figs and vinaigrette tears





I tried not to taste the bitterness of the fig
as I peeled the fuzzy skin free,
and suckled it's insides
like eating raw fire with
                                 soft lips

But I did
and spat the seeds called loss
in a garden gone barren
and wondered     will they grow?

I tried not to taste the vinaigrette tears
that rolled down my cheek,
to those charred lips
or think about seeds, and loss, and friends, and death....
but    life    is    bitter
and loss is part of it
as a respirator keeps my bloodline fresh
and words free my anchor, my rock, my     kindred

Figs and vinaigrette tears
loss and life without rewind



Author notes

life...sucks at times. So be it.

I am sorry I was not enough....for one
and sorry I can not do enough....for another
Written June 22nd, 2006

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  • Eusebius
    November 8, 2007

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    bravo

    A very deftly done piece of poetry and that just oozes with saddness and remorse...extremely well done... bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • 2lullabyhaven
    September 28, 2007

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    This is unique, a piece of originality. Should make the writer proud. Good luck in the contest.


  • Epilogue
    September 28, 2007

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    the metaphor in this is outstanding. It is a tragic poem but almost without understanding of how sad it actually is because one is too distracted by it's beauty. The imagery is just amazing, the format is expressive, and everything in between is just moving.
    Thank you for your entry and if you ever need to talk just message me.
    ~elizabeth~


    • SerenityNChains gold member
      September 28, 2007
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      Thank you Elizabeth for the kind and wonderful comment. I hope your contest goes well and you get lots of great entries. I may take you up on the message.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean


  • Venessa
    July 3, 2006
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    I feel this one right deep in the heart my dear friend. This is an amazing write and the story is one I feel for you. I have always felt I could not be enough no matter what I do for many people. You are one of those rare souls that appreciates and understands people with no expectations and no demands and I love you for that.


  • Jacki D
    June 26, 2006
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    you hurt i hurt

    Babysister this is an amazing piece and I think I know where you are coming from with it from our talk the other night.I hope you know I'm always here for you as much as I can be with the diStance between us.I certainly sensed your saddness. Plz take thiS advice from your big sister which is that you do all you can with that big heart of yours and then there comes a time you juSt need to back away and let fate take her course.
    You have always been a wonderful friend to me and I hurt when you hurt. I have always counted you as a blessing having come into my life. Not only do I consider you my babysis but I also consider you a treasure....better than any precious stone.
    Your way with words haS always put me in awe of you and your big heart only addS punch to the pudding.
    I know not much of a critique but you know I think you are the best when it comes to your poetry.
    AlwayS know that there is somebody in Virginia that loves you unconditionally.
    Jackie


  • crisstiena
    June 26, 2006
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    so poignant

    Oh...
    Your work is always so beautiful. Heart-rendingly so.
    And this is no exception.
    I am wondering what is behind this, although from your author comment I can perhaps hazard a guess. I hope I have not
    neglected you for so long that you feel you can't turn to
    me if you really really need a friend.

    Be strong my love, be strong.
    Your sister, always ~ criss ♥


  • Catressa gold member
    June 25, 2006
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    I tried calling you yesterday


  • Porcelain-Heart18
    June 25, 2006
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    Your imagery is very original and haunting. It takes the reader to a depth of sadness. It is extremely moving. I am still very new to poems but I really liked it. Keep up the good work and keep writing.


  • silverael
    June 25, 2006
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    Excellent!

    Your imagery is very, very original... I am impressed with the sheer, raw emotion contained in this piece. Even the most novice poetry reader could not ignore the sorrow and bitterness that pervade your words, limned with that quality that betokens great talent. Sometimes the greatest pain begets the greatest beauty, as evidenced by your writing. Best of luck, thank you for sharing this.

  • LyricalHeritage
    June 25, 2006
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    This poem offered such a smattering of simoltaneous emtions...sadness, emtyness and joy...yes joy. This is because without joy, sad momments aren't really sad and without sadness, joy insn't really joy...at least not in it's entire scope. The emotion was raw indeed and makes takes the reader to a depth without the use of fancy words and phrases. Good work.


  • SimpleSarcasm
    June 25, 2006
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    I loved the title of this piece. Reminds me of a poem I wrote once. I couldn't see the poem very well to really read and soak-up the meaning, the background's to dark for me .

  • serpentscroll
    June 25, 2006
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    very haunting imagery, it cries out in sadness. great job!

  • Damselflydreams
    June 25, 2006
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    This is brilliant, a piece of artwork, I feel a lump in the throat created by the images from the words. Your descriptions are amazing and well done, hope whatever sdaness you may be having in your life is lessening, many blessings....


  • H4rd Kisses
    June 25, 2006
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    yay!

    I love the imagery and description in this piece. Even if I was a literary ignorant the imagery would still be amazing. Great job on this I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thanks so much for sharing your talent!


  • Always Deena
    June 24, 2006
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    Billie Jean,I have been worried about you,I tried to call but you never called back. Perhaps I shall try again. I miss you and I worry about you and yours.

    This poem breaks my heart for I can see the tears behind it. You can't be everything to everybody,Billie. But you must stay true to you and never doubt that you are loved. I am sorry for your pain.
    As Always,
    Deena


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 24, 2006
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    Oooo Billie Jean...this poem really speaks to me. I'm so sorry that you wrote this so well, my friend . Yeah, life sucks big time at times. Somehow the one word that came to mind when I read this poem is swallow... There is so much raw emotion embedded in your words and I understand it so well...even your author's comments. Loved the way you painted how fig skins burn the lips - faw fire that travels down into the heart. So beautiful in its sadness this is...

    ~ Nicolette


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 22, 2006
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    What raw emotion shared in these few lines in such a unique write - tragedy of sorts, sadness, melancholy feelings written through these lines. Great picture and colours as well.


  • macandrew
    June 22, 2006
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    I will have to come back tomorrow and applaud again.

    An exceptional poem with a depth of sadness I have rarely seen.
    John

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