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Cupspeach

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Monday ::: allpoetry.com/poem/2084817

Tuesday ::: allpoetry.com/poem/2085703


Wednesday night
shelters hearts
like a cocktail umbrella.
Whispers realign
with the stir of a swizzle
but the icy roof refuses to melt.

Time ticks
in drips of predisposed condensation.
Winds chill
with claws that kill and the sky
continues to fall.
Stars scrape
across the canvas
reeling unmercifully blue.
Scars form
in patterns of the past
that don't come off in the dishwasher.

Cupboards imprison
words that scream for freedom. 
Life is nothing but
an incontinent circus without a coaster.
Feelings are bitter handfuls of salt
and the moon,
a sour, sour lemon wedge
squeezing drips of acidic hatred
through the veins
of hope.

Finally
the roof caves in,
letting in an
uninvited impostor.
But our hearts beat on...
juggling a crescent moon.


Thursday ::: allpoetry.com/poem/2085829

Friday ::: allpoetry.com/Poem/2087259

Saturday ::: allpoetry.com/Poem/2086559

Sunday ::: allpoetry.com/Poem/2086047 

Author notes

Section three of Old School's "Mission 2" assignment
Written June 22nd, 2006

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  • marrow
    June 24, 2006
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    To my liking this has been my favorite "day of the week" thus far. You have a great knack for making a metaphor not only work, but somehow rendering incredible in the reader's mind. Any time you speak with such a tool, the metaphor seems to then lend itself to a full hand of other great devices.

    I'm sure I've made no sense. Anyways, mid- week is bringing up the pieces. I am excited.

    J


  • Blind-Ambition
    June 23, 2006
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    As everyone else has pointed out, excellent use of layers of metaphors. As I've said so many times before, you have such a way with language and imagrey. Great write!!

    Stars scrape across the canvas reeling unmercifully blue.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    June 22, 2006
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    Metaphor yes and yet, there are levels here - I love that. The overall theme of this entire piece is just mindblowing. This is a fabulous write!


  • MuddyKing
    June 22, 2006
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    I like and this will put me on my merry way...I like that the individual voice is present this time round. I see the metaphors, but it is the imagery and language that speaks. Well done Greg and best wishes
    Peace Muddy


  • Blazing White Wolf
    June 22, 2006
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    Nice metaphors in here and well done keeping to the concept The flow is goodand the message to get up upon life's knocks is solid well done
    Love and light
    blaze

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