Silence could talk, if silence could speak.
It would tell of things;
that would make the heart weak.
Silence would tell the secrets that you hide;
and why you have that sad look in your eyes.
It would tell why you've cried;
and why your heart is closed to this world outside.
It would speak of your pain and of your life.
Explaining why you had to pay this price.
If silence could talk, it would tell of your past.
It would say Bad things happen;
but they don't last.
If Silence spoke,I know what it would say.
I love you, and life will be okay.
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Option2
A contest entry
- ANY THING by serenity silvermoon.
430 points, ended May 10, 2007, 145 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Brilliant poem I especially loved the last verse as it was so full of hope. Yet if silence spoke would we then share our deepest thoughts with it? Thank you for sharing.
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Excelent
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this poem reminds me of a poem i wrote called if walls could talk great job i love this poem you are a great poet thanks for sharing and god bless you and keep you and love you to that day he comes to take us home sign dianna lee green also knowned as serenity lynn silvermoon or angel serenity
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aww... i LOVE this one especially!!! the whole speaking of silence and the things that lie within it... i love how you brought it to life! very beautifully put! thank you for telling me of this poem.
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I LOVE THIS POEM!!!!! it is soooooooo good! I really enjoyed reading it! my favorite part was the way you started it "Silence could talk, if silence could speak.
Tell of things that would make the heart weak." It was soooo good! excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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Thank you for the comment. Sometime you feel as if you can trust no one but yourself. But You have someone to put your trust in thank you for your comment on silence.
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I really dolove this poem, It has great wording and It makes the reader think about what they really feel on the inside. great write
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I love this! I really do! The wording is great and well this is just overall a great poem! Good luck in the contest! hehe I entered it too!
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listening to the sound of silence is interesting like your poem...
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This is excellent. I never thought of the things we've said or done in silence... at least not to that degree. This really took it to a different level. The beginning and middle seems as though its dark and bad, but the ending concludes with "If it spoke,I know what it would say. I love you, and life will be okay."
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Silence says alot of things
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This poem is just amazing. It is really a poem that deserves a wider audience and should be published. If you look at the people the inner circle of this site considers as 'excellent poets'- they are choosing only one type of style, and spirit, and a handful of people who fit that style. But outside that style, there are whole large segments who love and crave talent with the kind of pure honest kind of poetry that you write.
You don't just pour emotions on a page (I am guilty of that)- it is obvious that you really understand the dynamics, emotions and situations you write about - you are able to express a level of empathy for another that I have honestly never seen in an American before, and you use really nice poetry techniques- like aliteration 'if silence could speak'- I can't even express the effect of this little phrase on the poem and on the reader. And all the w's you use again- really nice - you are able to use them with a soft effect rather than a harsh adrupt one. It's quite amazing. Finally the use of rhyme in such a subtle smooth gentle way is amazing.
By the way I am no critic, and I'm not trying to be. I just think this poem is great!
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oops ..i meant to say that i would change the word *wreak* to *weak* i think you will find that it fits much better
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good luck in the contest and thank you for entering with this deep and personal write,it puts your thoughts across very well indeed
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Sweet and sincere, a well written piece of hope. Although the word 'wreak' seems to be a bit out of place with a heart, this is still a very powerful piece of expression. Best wishes!
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It is in the silence where the true feelings sit. They are surrounded by a brick wall and for good reason. In the silence are the sounds of the things that you dread admitting or hearing. I liked that you ended this on good note too. Well done.
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oh my goodness
oh my goodness I oficially Love this! This feels like the perfect ode to all my trials. silence in suffering. but you opened up the silence and showed beauty in what it would say. and what you would say and what I would say at the same time so thanks for this peom.
Loved it!
-deep one
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This is probably the first write that I've read that has looked at silence at this angle...very interesting...
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hey...i really liiked this piece..me encanto...it has so much feeling to it...and i can really relate to it...silence can sometimes be the only help to what were feeling or going through...
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Im sorry I didnt realize that you were 26.Well it good that you have your boyfriend and everything will turn okay. It always does. I know how it is to be stuck in a job that You dont like.Especially when you know that you can do better or find a better job. You are a good person. things alway work out for good people.Sorry again I thought you were young. But everybody needs advice. I need it sometime, because this world can get you down.Take hope.hang in there. take care.
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Thanks hose. I have a wonderful boyfriend who I had a sob to on the phone today then he cheered me up after he collected me off the bus. I tell him everything. If I didn't I'd feel like I was lying to him or something. I have amazing friends who listen too and have always been there for me. I tell my aunt/godmother a lot too but not about this type of thing. I got through this before and I will again. It just means leaving a job that I absolutely hate and despise and can't wait to get out of. Once I do that, I know I will be happy again.
Thanks again for the support and advice. It is really appreciated.
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Sometimes you may feel like nobody cares. You can only trust yourself because yourself cant disappoint you.So you dont talk to people But i have to come to find out that If you keep everything inside,It can only lead to more pain, eventually. You have to find that one person that you can talk to and speak with them because everyone needs a friend to talk to.That the truth. It might take a little time . But when you find this person hold on to them. Maybe a friend your parents, or aunt or uncle. hang in there.
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Excellent
If silence could speak right now it would be telling my parents that I am sad again. This poem reflects how I am feeling right now at this very moment. It is so well written I wish that I had written it myself. The irony seems to make the piece so great. If it wasn't for the irony, there would be no essence to this poem. I often wish my silence would scream out to people about how sad I am. I could shout, cry and scream but it would make no difference. People only notice when I am quiet (I was a quiet child/teenager) but when I'm asked if everything is OK, I say that it is, even though I know, and feel it in my heart, that it is not. That is why I can truly relate to this poem.
You have a wonderful way with words hose30. Keep up the good work.
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Yeah I learned that the hard way. It took a little of me dying and me actually almost dieing to speak up. I have my mom to talk to and she'll never let me go. thanks
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It makes perfect sense.I feel that way also.Sometime I feel that I can keep it to myself because Myself can never betray me. But I found that You have to tell someone because the pain of keeping it inside kills you even more over the years. you have to find you one person that you trust and tell them. That may and may not be easy. But when you find that person hold on to them.But I understand you.Everyone has secret but it good to talk.
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I really loved this piece. I wish silence could speak because I hate to actually talk to people. In a sense I have such important things to say but it scares me that is would scare them. If that makes any sense.
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I think this says so much, how we all tried to hide ourselves,
How so many don't speak, because we're afraid of someone knowing too much about us, of knowing us too well. Those who live in that silence have a tale to tell. They are ones we try hardest to know and understand. The ones who don't want us to know. Maybe that's why we try so hard to.
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i really enjoyed reading this, it is wonderful writing!
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this reminds me of the saying 'silence is golden' What was the inspiration for your piece?
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Sometimes we have problem or issue we cant face. Maybe we feel like we cant tell anyone.We keep it to ourselves because we feel like ourselves can never betray us but people can. But I guess we have to find that one people that we can trust. because If dont, we will be a lonely person. It hard sometimes but We have to try.we have to keep hope alive because that all we have,that and god.I am happy you like my writing. I think we all have something to talk about.You can write also. Keep writing.IT kind of like therapy. Take care.
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OMG THIS IS EXACTLY HOW I FEEL IN MY LIFE IT WAS SO PERSONAL I STARTED TO CRY TY FOR BEING AN INCREDIBLE WRITER KEEP IT UP NEVER LOSE HOPE
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Thank you for your support. I appreciate that you liked my work. I think that you can write also.Keep up the good work.
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I would firstly like to thank you for commenting on my poem. Also, i adored this poem..it speaks so true. I love the twist at the end, its like i knew it was coming, but was still surprised when it did
good work ! xxxx
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Beautiful!!!! You used irony excellent in this piece. Loved it!!
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Thank you for comment.I reallly appreciate it. But you can write also. Keep up the good job
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this is beautiful and Im sure if silence could talk it'd say that you are a wonderful poet.
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Great write. Its very true. I like the way you expressed yourself.
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Thank you for reading my poems. I will continue to and try to improve myself.I appreciate your comments.
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Wow, this is really good....i liked it a lot!!!!
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from the poem itself the writer expressed his feeling in silence especially for the love one he has.
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Wow, I really like this write, it is wuite thought provoking and very beautiful! Nice flow too, good sense of rhythm and use of words! I enjoyed it, thanks for sharing it! Keep it up
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lovely
I especailly loved the ending of this poem is was so not what I was expecting! I was like oh my gosh, hehe. I will a couple more people to read it that I know because I think this is a great poem, and I am just being honest! -
I bow down and worship heartfelt words
If silence could talk, I wouldnt have been lonely, and then i wouldnt have logged on to this site or read your stunning poem which flowed rather rhythmically within the contours of my feeble mind. Absolutely marvelous! -
I hope I'm doing this the right way, this is all new but I thought your poem was beautiful and will read more of your work
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I love this. Powerful, emotional, heart wide open...I really love this...
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Thanks You are a great writer also. You have great passion in your poem also.I like your writes also.Keep up the good work.
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wow
i really enjoyed this
and it sounds so real
and in detail
great job
i can tell that who ever
this is to u really care about
good job
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Thank for your reply.I think you are a great writer also.Continue to write.
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I liked this one alot!!! It is very true in the way that you pointed out all of the things that silence could say.
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No I dont mind> It all poetry. I dont think it a bad or good way to write . I think it a way of communicating.Expressing yourself.I read all kinds. Because you change everyday. One day you feel goo and one day you fee bad.You cant alway have a good day. I have some dark poems myself.I lie here.
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AMAIZNG
AMAZING!! When you asked me to read this in your comment to me, I immidiatly went to see it. It tells the truth for sure all of that does happen in silence. I'll probably ed up writing a poem about silence, but make it suckyer (if that's a real word) or make it darker. I hope you don't mind but I preffer to write the dark stuff. Everything else I've writen stinks if I didn't really try like I do with the dark ones. I'm going to post this one poem I wrote recently, it's called Death, please read if you can.
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Only I wish silent could talk =[ I love this poem, you're a terrific poet and thank you for your comment!
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wow
what a powerful poem
loved this
it touched me
write on
Firequeen
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thanks again for the comment on my poem
i really like this poem very much
the main idea is very creativ
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Thank for your boost.It is a small world.When you can relate to a small town like that it is a small world.I know a lot of town around there. Eau Claire, Ben Harbor.I have Grandparents that stay in Lawrence.I visit them all the time. That cool.Sometime I go to lake and swim.That cool dude.
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OMFG that fuckin ROX!!!!!!! i love the emotion and how it starts out about one thing and ends on a love note!! so sweet you have real talent
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Thank you I know i will I have only been writing for 4 month.
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Thanks for your input. I going to use it.I will alway use a good input.Thanks for takig your time to read my work.I wikll continue to write and continue to work on my poetry.
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this is very sweet and soft. alot better thought on silence than i usally have becasue i compare it to lonliness. but then there is that comfortable silence. which i rare but very nice to have. the poem is that type of silence to me. it gives you a loved feeling.
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This poem reminds me of one I wrote called "If these walls could speak" but I really like the way you put it better..If silence could talk...
I think this was a very personal piece, perhaps you were trying to expose something without actually saying it. Almost like you were testing the water for peoples reactions.
I loved the last line because the reality is, until we can love ourselves we don't allow anyone else to love us eitherOverall a good piece...Faith -
I think we all need someone behind us telling us it will be alright. I really liked this write. It's something that connects with the reader, on a deeper level than them just being able to relate or not. It's as though your poem was "talking" to me
... and that really drew me in . Thank you for pointing me in the poems direction. I really do hope to read more of your poetry sometime.
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i feel you on this one, this is a great one because it can be interpeted in many ways. i got the vibe that yea if only silence could speak it would have alot to tell you unfortunately that day will never come because of silence also. i got the vibe that there is more siad when nothing is said. also, i got from this that in your silence you've kept many secrets of hurt and pain that you would share but silence has become a comforter, this was a great I'd applaud you but I have none left. stay UP!
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Loved It!
WOW!
I love the whole idea you have here. Its really good, how if silence could speak what it would say-its just creative and very cool to think about.. great write, im gonna bookmark it, cause i feel like i can kind of relate to it, perhaps why you mentioned this poem to me..
(Thanks so much for my comment btw)
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Thank for your support.It mean a lot for you to comment on my poem.Thank you for your comments.
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I like the idea of this poem, using the one key line through out it, I enjoyed it because it had a catchy thing going on, and its easy to get it stuck in your head.
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I am glad you liked my pieces but you can write also. I think you are talented also.I try to pick something original.Thank again.Keep up the good work.
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I like how you chose the topic of this piece. And kept it all the way thru. Its very intresting if silence could talk.... ya very haha
greatwrite
Kuts & Kisses
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No I like the way you write.I thank you for your fine comments.I think that we all have something to write about. I am glad I can get a compliment from you.I will copntinue to read your write. Keep up the good work.
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What? You don't need my feedback, your poem is way better than mine. My wasn't even a poem, it was just a bunch of fast-paced thoughts jumbled together in the unfinished pile. This is great, it's like Linkin Park's Papercut on a positive note. I loved all of it because it's so true and the way you used the silence to tell of the things you want your loved one to know was just amazing. It's exactly how I feel right now. That's it, you're going on my favorites list.
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excellent
I am so glad you asked me to read this, it's just beautiful, the flow is good and the stanza placing great. The last line is lovely
"It would tell you that I love you, and that life going to be okay"
Thanks for inviting me to read.
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Beautiful. This is unique. Silence..harbors much pain..often, too much emotion to let through. You did beautifully with this.
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hi thanks for commenting on my poem 'dad',i think your poem is excellent,really intersting,youve certainly got talent
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What an amazing poem! I guess you are right, there is always someone who loves you and that will be there with you through the silence. It only silence could talk. Maybe I'd have someone else to talk to about stuff besides my best friend who is the only person who really believes in me. This poem is so creative and inspiring. Great job. I look forward to reading more from you. Keep it up.
love, midnite rae
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this is so deep and creative! I really liked it! it's so true! how did you think of this poem? it's so unique! keep up the great work
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The beautiful thing about scilence is that it can be your friend and would always be there for you (well for me anyway)O-)
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I THINK THAT IS REALLY TRUE. MAN IF ONLY SILENCE COULD TALK IT WOULD BE TALKIN 2 ME A LOT. IT KINDA MAKES ME WISH SILENCE COULD TALK SO I WOULD HAVE SOME ONE 2 TALK 2 WHEN IM SAD. SOME ONE 2 COMFORT ME. WELL JUST WAUNTED 2 SAY GOOD POEM.
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This one is great to. You and Me both write the same. We take things in life and we go deep with it.
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well written
That was a very insightful poem. Though I don't claim to be much of a poet, I can tell that you seem to have a knack for it. I especially liked how you used repetition throughout all three stanzas to reitterate the importance of certain themes. Well done, and thank you for your comment on my poem. -
Very elegant poem. Loved the ending. So deep, so intense.
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wow, i like the ending, i jus love it all, interesting...lol. and thank u for the nice comment on my poem
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i like this poem. I like the ending especially. Thank you for commenting my Angel Of Love. I wrote it especially for my girlfriend.
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wow this was really good!! i think you are right, but its hard to believe sometimes..thanx for sharing this piece
take care
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