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Piano's Tears

My fingers glide across my sight
O'er the keys, black and white
Thoughts reeling and eyes now glossed
They tell a tale of joy now lost

Grand piano, tell me why
Why did this go so awry?
It truly was not long ago
When my soul was lit aglow

Grand piano, tell me how
How did I get where I am right now?
Tears slide down, and join your keys
Adding to the song's unease

Grand piano, forgive me please
For I tell my story through your keys
I've given up and lost all life
And surrendered to eternal strife

Grand piano, I'll leave you now
And bear this weight upon my brow
Though I found relief within your sound
Still my life remains unwound

Grand piano...Thank you

Author notes

Musical memories.

The song I chose for this contest was Suikoden 2: Reminiscence (Deep Sleep). Originally I was going to choose Emotions Lost in Time, but when I heard this lovely piano piece I had to write about it. The piano is one of the most gorgeous and emotionally expressive instruments, in my opinion.

The concept of the poem is simple. My poems usually depict a scene and the emotions in it, and this is no different. The scene is essentially someone playing Reminiscence, and playing it as if he were talking to the piano. Something has gone horribly wrong in his life, and he's asking the piano for answers, expressing himself through the music. That's really the image I get when I just sit and listen to the song. Sadness, longing, questioning. That's what I tried to convey through this image.
Written June 21st, 2006

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  • Vera Rich
    July 27, 2008

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    Thank you for entering this competition. But please read the rules on presentation again. My sight is not good -hence the stipulation in the rules that poems should be in black type on a white or at the worst pale-pastel background.

    I shall be returning to the competition on Monday to complete my judging. Could you please before then make your poem more legible.

    And PLEASE NOTE, the rules also said: no explanations or commentaries!

  • GarbageCan
    July 9, 2006
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    I love the flow and the feeling of the peice, it honestly gave me goosbumps, the beat of it makes it feel like you are playing the piano, you picked my favorite peice actually, considering I play the piano when I am sad, baring my burdens on the black and white keys...really really pretty job! Thank you so much for entering and best of luck! you did an amazing Job!

    ~Lamia

  • Jakob
    June 22, 2006
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    *tear*

    An incredibly powerful write.