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The Bottle

The Bottle
By: Star of Atlantis

Gargoyle on high temple walls
Reveille rolls in swells of music triumph
Coral seas echo in soft refrain
Bell ringing over a lonely bay so rough.

Bottle floats through outer space
Mottle glass, floating encaptured ocean
Travel with time, drifting cosmic garbage
Shoal of star dust, held in slow motion.

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Written June 21st, 2006

A contest entry

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  • Flames-of-Furey
    February 11, 2008
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    wow a unique take on my contest well written a very structured piece.
    good luck