Just Another,
sad Kid Suicide?
no one really cried
who cared anyway?
its very sad (that's what they'll say...)
it's too bad (is what they'll say...)
she never should have, run away?
they didn't know the reasons why
she ran so very far and wide
now she just a body
finally
with nothing left to hide
now shes just another
sad kid suicide...
Author notes
you hear on the news about suicide you pretend to care maybe you even do for a second but you dont really.
wierd rhythm not very good as a poem just a few things thrown together? i might come back to it?
Written June 21st, 2006
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i like this very much it's very deep and the truth all the way well done
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meh i warned you, check my newest poem please? its one that means something to me?
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I think you are wrong. Yes, we have become blind to TV violence and even real violence but there is a part of every person who cares, even if it's only the part which fears the same thing happening to itself.
This is critical, but if I might be honest, this is definitely not your best poem. The rhyme scheme is slightly forced and rather sporadic, not to mention that it is very short and the last stanza seems just to be there because it is, not because it emphasises the point you are trying to make.
Regards,
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heart touching
one of my friends has done suicide. it hurts knowing that i could of been there to help her... suicide is sad -
thankyou, that must be the world record for fast comments, i had only just clicked off the submit page and whack you were there, thankyou its always a nice feeling as im sure you know.
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Hm... I know what you mean with this. An interesting way of putting your feeling to prose. Very nicely written.
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