The night is cool
but the wind brings a chill to me
As I walk the tarmac path
gleaming from the lamppost's above me
The path narrows
grass surrounds me, ahead..
I see a bench
A young lady sits upon it
Beautifully, as if like an angel
A glisten in her eye
appears like tears
I walk and walk forever
the bench becomes no nearer
The path narrows further, I blink...
I'm sitting next to her now
She doesn't look at me
Her gaze fixed straight ahead
Then a tear rolls down her cheek
with a sigh she turns to me
How can this be, I rub my eyes, I blink....
She is gone
Was that she who was once loved by me
but now has passed on, I blink....
I stare at the ceiling, awoken from my slumber
It was just a dream
But I saw her in my minds eye
Then outside the window
A bolt of thunder
I hear her and see her everyday.
Author notes
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Written June 21st, 2006
A contest entry
- Sadness...Lots of choices by MysteriousWhisper.
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sweet imagination
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this is very thought provoking. it is very original and i like how it is written. good job and good luck in the contest!
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Hmm..This is good.. I didn't really get a sense who she was and why she was crying. The title of the poem is unique.
Rose -
I cant do the rose....aaaaaaaahhhhhhhh
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That is fine - thank you for tryin'!
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Thanks very much for the comment. Sorry about not putting the rose in, i tried but it did'nt work, maybe i was doing something wrong. How bouts I just reasure you that I have indeed read the rules.
Aaron. -
A lovely underlying story; sad and thought provoking. Very nice piece! Thanks so much for entering!
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very unqiue writting.. very imaginative.. great job.. best wishes on your poem
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Aww I thought this was really good! Thanks for entering and goo luck in my contest!
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Niice write and a good read thanks for entering and good luck
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Tarmac is a surface made of Tarmacadam. Tarmacadam is a material made of stone or slag, bound with tar, commonly used for paving roads or.....paths...like the ones in parks. My poem is amazing because it came from within me, I am unique, therefore my poem is unique, therefore it is amazing. As is every other poem entered in this compition. Well done everyone, keep up the good work.
Aaron. -
'tarmac' isnt that something to do with the military??? just wondering...what makes your poem amazing??
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Thnx alot for the comment on my poem, I try my best to put accross as much emotion as possible in all my work. Tnx again. Aaron.
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hey i like it so much keep up ur skill is writting i can tell keep up and good luck
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