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I blew some kisses into the air and they turned into a breeze,
and danced on soft gossamer wings hovering there with ease.
It fluttered gleefully about while always smiling down at me,
“Please take my kisses to my dear love wherever she may be”
She blissfully fluttered off and soon disappeared out of sight,
flying over lush green meadows in the glowing evening light.
Flowers smiled happily and gave forth their beautiful aromas,
until the breeze was saturated with gardenias and begonias.
She played with tiny blinking stars in the shadows of the night,
gathering moonbeams and stardust and any pretty thing in sight.
The old man in the moon chuckled gleefully as she fluttered by,
and blue birds gladly flew by her side in the golden morning sky.
She found my dear true love fast asleep and so softly dreaming,
then sat on silken pillow soft and watched her peaceful sleeping.
Tender kisses placed on my love’s cheek brought a loving smile,
as the breeze then fluttered away for her trip had been worthwhile.
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Author notes
Written June 20th, 2006
Pogo stick
Option 4
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything Contest by PrettyxoxPoison.
300 points, ended April 10, 2007, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - SHOW ME THE LOVE!!!! by Vampyric Kitten.
850 points, ended June 4, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Missing you ( Perwrites Aloud) by Rasmus.
350 points, ended July 5, 2007, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Words to form a smile by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
800 points, ended August 17, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short Love Poems by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended April 21, 2008, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyme and Flow part 9 Feelings - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended September 7, 2008, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Thank you for your entry in the contest. A very beautiful and soft write with a feel good tone to it. A pleasure to read with good rhyme.
All the best to you in the contest
Sue and Jeff
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beautiful poem.
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Glad you liked it and thanks for the comments and applause.
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a wonderful write with strong positive energy all the way through
i loved the imagery and the emotions
thankyou and best of luck
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Hi Misery, thank you for such a nice revue of this poem. I hope you have time to read more of my work and maybe add me to your Favourites. My site has something for everyone. Thanks again.
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This is a really really really good poem! I am amazed by your diction and your style and the way you write is phenomenal. I hope to read some of your other poems as well! I enjoyed reading this poem a lot. You should enter this one into a contest, I have a feeling you would do well.
With love, hope, and encouragement in all that you do
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What would I like you to say !! Easy !! The exact truth in what you think and feel.. That's all dear Tessa. I am so glad you enjoyed it and it was just a little thing that came to me while I was washing the dishes ... so I sat down and posted it. Seems many people like it too.. Great fun.. Thanks again for your wonderful encouragement and applause.
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Now what would you like me to say about this one...I am at a loss for words...I am a free verse poet and not one for Rhyming but I have found a poet who's work I will read with the greatest of pleasure...
This poem was astounding and so beautifully written...Thank you so much for sharing it with me
Much Love
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Sabrinasgarden Thank you for your lovely comment and i am thrilled you liked it, but it was juts something that flew into my head ... literlly ... maybe there is someone out there who blows kisses to me .... another good idea for a poem ..... Thanks a million.
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Just adored the overall idea behind the piece and the way in which you implemented it.Could so easily have become cliched and ultimately soppy...well done
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LeeStone Thank you again for a very encouraging comment I am very grateful for your taking the time to read and comment. I hope you have time to wander about my site more and give your valued opinions. Thanks mate.
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Absolutely beautiful. Has a very lyrical quality to it. You painted a lovely picture in my mind with your words. Very well done.
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wtchr. Thanks a million for you have hit the nail right on the head with your summary about the whole poem and its' meaning. I appreciate your taking the time to comment, especially as it was garnered with your generous applause. I like trying different themes within my specialised framework of "picture poems" in rhyming free verse, and sometimes an unusual poem results. thanks again.
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Mechanical Angel Thank you for taking the time to comment but the sense was intended. "They" were kisses and so plural sense was appropriate, "it" was singular because the kisses had turned into a "breeze" and therefore is correct sense, and "she" is the reference to gender. not sense, so Yopu are wrong in all three. Consistency has nothing to do with this at all for the reasons given but I appreciate your trying to help and at least taking the time.
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This is so light and fanciful. It reads almost like a dream, or an experience. You have done an exquisit job of presentation. The fantasy and imagination evoke brilliant images. Thank you for a MOST pleasant read.
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Damselflydreams, With such a sweet poetic name like you have it is no surprise about your sweet comments. Thank you for reading and taking the time to answer without just grabbing the ponts. Thanks a million.
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I enjoyed the idea of the poem... the kisses turning into a breeze and flying to your love across the night sky.. but I didn't like that you referred to the kisses as three different things... "they" "it" and "she"... you're lacking consistancy. Very nice job otherwise. Form is good--and punctuation is problem free to me. Keep up the good work, good luck in your contest
keep writing!
Mech
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This is sweet and serene and I oh-so know what you are saying, wishing I had a personal carrier-pigeon with a custom-made kiss-carrier. Blessings....
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urehooked ..kenny .. does that mean you liked it ??? lol thanks mate for such a wonderful comment. I am humbled that someone of your talent has made such a nice comment reinforced by applause as well. Geez.. Thanks so much mate.
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Ahhhh,what a magnificent piece of writing my friend,absolutely wonderful Bazza.This is absolutely flawless my friend and just such a pleasure to read.Fantastic.Kenny
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Azul Mariposa Thank you for such a sweet comment and it is so pleasurable for me to know that you enjoyed my work. I hope you have time to read more and that you enjoy them too. Thanks again.
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Beautiful flow, beautiful work..........I loved reading this it leaves you with a smile and such a wonderful feeling inside. Awsome job
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Excellent
Absolutely loved this Bazza, how pretty, so light and lyrical. Someone is in love! Resonates from the poem. Excellent work, great use of imagery and I LOVE the rhyme!
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azure85 I thank you for not only taking the time to read my poem but to comment on it as well. It also pleased me that you enjoyed it too. Thanks again.
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The title sets your poem off in glorious flight of love and fantasy. I liked this line,
"The old man in the moon chuckled gleefully as she fluttered by"
Made the night sky smile on your journey! Very nice poem.
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Ladybug, Thank you for such a delightful comment bolstered by the wonderful applause. I am pleased that someone of your ilk enjoyed it and just hope that you have the time to read and comment on my previous works. Thanyou sincerely again.
Barry.
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now this is authentic great poetry!
so romantic you are in this divine piece
keep on penning and write your beautiful Metaphors into a rainbow.
Tamara
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Hello Joan Hope everything is OK now and that you are OK. Missed your sister's mushroom farm on TV but thanks for thinking of me. We dont have that channel. Thank you for the lovely comments and the applause as it is great to have one's work appreciated. Thanks love.
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Magical
AAhh Barry, this is delightful, I'm glad your sweet love caught the kisses that you sent her, beautiful rhyming couplets the words a magical, as all your poems are my friend, I enjoy reading them. Have been in hospital for two days so I have to catch up on my commenting.
ove Joan
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shaz, the word cute to me probably has different ramifications but pretty fits better rhythmically anyway so it has been changed. My usual polishing up has not been done yet which is due in a day or so after the rhythm and melody have gone out of my head. I wish this poem would put the three boisterous arguning grandkids to sleep but they cant hear it iver the noise. Thank you ever so much for your wonderful comment and warm applause, as it means a lot to me coming from someone so respected and talented. Thanks love.
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Bazza, I absolutely adore the light and breezy feeling coming from this piece of work, it made me feel sort of laid back and at ease. I must agree about the word cute--maybe pretty would sound better as you are referring to moonbeams and stars, just a thought. And may I add---what a beautiful way to send a kiss to a loved one entwined in a breeze, very magical and fairy tale like. Excellent penning--it sounds wonderful when read out loud--I just read it to the cat and dog----even they calmed down, but then again they are used to me reading poetry out loud
Bravo my dear friend. Beautiful!
Shaz xx
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Stunning
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Sandy, being in love now or in the past always has its moments and memories and so although I am like you and am longing for someone past, present or future, I just dust off the old memories and polsih them until they shine and regain the original moment when they happened, so loneliness can then be tolerated as we must make do with what God has given us and not ask for more, for it will happen if only He condones it. take care my Sweet and thank you for the wonderful support and using your hard earned points for applause.
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WONDERFUL POEM
Oh my Barry, this is quite beautiful. I just saw your link to it. You have such a way with words. You are a true romantic. This is so full of wonderful imagery. It makes me smile and want to go out and fall in love again and be with someone. I do miss that. There is so much I miss.Well you have stirred my emotions now. Why does somnething so beautiful such as love have to hurt. This is truly lovely. Thank you for sharing and for the smiles. Take care, Sandy -
angelic-eyes Thank you for such warm words of appreciation and the thought of applause and anyway it is the thought that matters. I hope you find some more of my like to your enjoyment . Thanks again and welcome to AP.
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excellent
oh so beautiful,what a lovely pleasant poem excellent flow through out i have just joined AP so have no points if i did i would certainly applaud this beautiful well done.
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Hello Princess, I am so happy that you enjoyed this little piece of fantasy. It came suddenly to me yesterday morning when I was doing the dishes and so I had to sit down and write it. very late finishing my housework but it appears that it was worth it. Thank you for sharing your hard earned points by applauding it and taking your valuable time in commenting. xoxoxox
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Gwenevere I am honoured that you enjoyed my poem and took the time to comment and sweeten it further with your generous applause. Thanks love.
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AngelicMistress Thank you for a wonderful lengthy comment spiced with the added bonus of an applause from your purse of points. I am thrilled that you enjoyed it and glad that it brought pleasant feelings to people.
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Goodmorning my dearest daddy
This is a beautiful piece. I'm really glad you're active in writing again. Looking forward to reading more from you,
Love you
Shahrzad
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Angelic Mistess Thank you for such a warm and friendly tribute coupled with the added pleasure of applause. Thrilled you enjoyed it. Barry
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Mairi I don't know where you got that idea from. Please read the following allpoetry.
allpoetry.com/Poem/1725769
allpoetry.com/Poem/1911899 allpoetry.com/Poem/1872631
allpoetry.com/Poem/1868287
allpoetry.com/Poem/1867626
allpoetry.com/Poem/1968250
Are these risque ?? What is your opinion ?
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Bazza, you know how I feel about your folk-poetry. It is simply first rate. This is a touching piece, and I am glad that I surfed by. I'll applaud it.
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I really love this one.Romantic and uplifting.That butterfly knows a thing or two.Well done once again, Ros
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AWESOME JOB!!!!! ENJOYED IT!!!!!
Bazza:
This is such a tender, sweet and yet, romantic piece.....
So very well written and the flow fantastic..... a truly wonderful and enjoyable piece, thank you for sharing with me on this site.....
Be blessed with love and light always.....
Your friend,
AngelicMistress
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Swtpoetryman Thanks mate for such an encouraging comment seasoned witha welcome applaus too. I appreciate your commenst and glad you enjoyed my work. Hope some of my previous ones are enjoyed too. Thanks again mate.
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WORTHY OF TWO OR THREE READINGS.
HER TRIP HAD BEEN WORTHWHILE, INDEED - just as reading this fine piece was! I TRULY enjoyed it for I have often wrote of the wonders of nature myself - which I find is where The Lord has done his best work! For rhyming AROMAS with BEGONIAS (which is something even a fellow like me who has done over 1,000 pieces is the last few years has never thought about - Hell, I can't even spell BEGONIAS) I'll send you applause to me back to you! He! He!
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Musicjunky382 Thank you for your constructive comment and wonderful welcome applause. I will take that to task as it was an improvement over the original write, but certainly may be improved. I have a policy now of leaving it for a day or so, so that I can come back with a clear mind and fine tune it. Glad you enjoyed it and hope some of my previous work is as enjoyable as well. Thanks again.
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very good! not only does it talk about ease and grace but it also reads very smooth. It's perfect except for one thing that tripped me up (just for a moment...i recovered lol): The line about "anything cute in sight" or something alone the lines of that. You were using a very elogent vocabulary and then when i saw the word "cute" i thought of an old lady pinching cheeks lol. Other than that, this poem is awesome!! Good job!
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grannyeri Thank you for those encouraging words and the bonus applause too. I am glad you enjoyed it and thank you for taking the time to express your feelings.
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Rhyming couplets work very well here to express these sentiments, so easy to read and understand, a lovely flow and feeling throuoghout these lines.
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Sonja Well you are melting mine too... what with lovely words like that and a nice fat applause ... It is likely to make my head swell. Honestly though, I am glad you enjoyed t and it makes it all wortwhile especially when appreciated. Thanks love.
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Hello Dear Scarlet... You do pop up at odd times ... I thought you would be in bed fast asleep .... Thank you for the lovely comment ...Glad you liked it ... Thanks love.
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Perfect! :f
Amazing imaginery takes my breath away. I love nature and nice used pictures and descriptions and you are on the right way to melt my heart, well, only poeticaly.
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I love the romance that lives inside this author's mind. These are very nice words:
" Tender kisses placed on my love’s cheek brought a loving smile,
As the breeze fluttered away now her trip had been worthwhile."
Keep up the good poetry.
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Frozentearz Thank you for those lovely words of appreciation, Love to you too. Thanks again, it is nice to have one's work acknowledged.
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what a wonderful write
so full of love
thank you so much for sharing with us
lOve and light
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MisticMoonlite Thank you Dear Linda for lifting my spirits too with your kind friendly words and the luxury of applause. I am glad you enjoyed it and that it had the desired effect. Thanks love, and have a nice day/evening. lol it is hard to keep up with everyone's time.
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Bazza, this is beautifully written, I love it.. the rhyme is outstanding, the love shows through out this piece, yes this got my attention and am smiling as I read, sure lifted my spirits, thank you for sharing..
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asiangirl I was just about to send a link to you as it reminded me of you and thought it may cheer you up. Thank you for the wonderful comments and the applause as well humbled me. Hope you are enjoying your visit and remember to stay out in the sunshine and push away the dark. Keep your head up love, and be proud of yourself, for you have earned it.
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Beautifully penned, and such grace to the poem. I loved reading this. Your talent will take you far, and if it has, you'll go farther. Wonderful work here.
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booitskate Well thank you for those kind words and I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you also for the luxury of applause for it makes one feel appreciated . I hope you enjoy my other (all rhyming) "picture poems" too, as there are nearly 100 now. Thanks love.
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Amazing
Wow I loved this. Very nice write. Creative, flowing, beautiful. Rhyming poems are practically impossible for me to write and yours is very well written good job. Your an incredible writter I hope I get time to read more of your writes.
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