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I'm Screaming it Out.

I love you,
I start to shout.
I love you,
I'm screaming it out.

I look and see
The man I want you to be.
I glance your way,
And I start to pray.

As I start to dance,
You look like you're going to prance.
You make me laugh,
As I pick up my glass.

It's these good times,
I know I'm your girl.
I'm no one else's,
You make my head swirl.

It's when I'm happiest,
I'm with you,
I know you feel it too.

I love you.

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Written June 19th, 2006

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  • Naridill
    March 25, 2007
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    Although you have parted ways, you have shown the truth of caring for someone. Sorry about the break up. But i feel this experience alone should have been worth it enough.

    It was beautiful!!!!!!


  • infamous sorrows
    August 10, 2006
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    =]

    thanks, and it was true, very true, but since, the guy and i have parted ways ='[

    ps, i know what you mean about the third stanza

  • Green-Eyed-Goddess
    August 10, 2006
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    This is a very good poem. I enjoyed it though the 3rd stanza is a little rough. I really wish you luck if this poem is true. Great job and good luck


  • infamous sorrows
    August 9, 2006
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    =]

    thanks, i'm glad you like it, this one was fun for me to write, normally, i don't like rhyming poems, but this one, i like =]


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    August 9, 2006
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    That is really beautiful and sweet.
    Excellent choice of words and rhyme.
    It is fun to read too. I really enjoyed reading it.

    Keep on writing.
    Nooni


  • Goddess of illusion
    August 8, 2006
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    Nice flow and rhythm, Ireally, really liked it, it made me miss what seems to be missig in my relationship these days... Keep the pen flowing...

  • infamous sorrows
    June 22, 2006
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    thanks, that means alot to me =]


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 21, 2006
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    be careful angels are flying about you

    does remind me of a balarina its very revealing to your
    thoughts . keep the good work up.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    June 21, 2006
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    Very nicely done. Very sweet and powerful. It's not confusing at all, it's heartfelt and true. Beautifully done.


  • beckyXmarie
    June 21, 2006
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    This has an incredible lyrical element, a really upbeat tempo. You have clearly shown your feelings but it works well. I could imagine a tune in my head. Well done and many thanks.
    --
    Eyes&lies.


  • infamous sorrows
    June 20, 2006
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    you're welcome =] i'm glad you like this poem, i kind of like this poem alot to, thnx for the comment

    ♥ infamous sorrows


  • Gafa
    June 20, 2006
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    !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    thanks for the comment first off wow this is such a good peom really cant articulate it but really really enjoyed it, keep up the good work

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