sky
blue blooms
bellflowers
reach for evening
sun
hands
extend
toward mist
covering dell's
lea~
night
closes
in as bell's
nod at the moon
rays~
lull
settles
whippoorwill
sings it final
song~
A contest entry
- For those who have made 15,000 comments or more by Danna Hobart.
390 points, ended October 20, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This is just lovely. Each stanza is like a charm on a bracelet. So much imagery worked into such a small poem. That takes talent. Thank you for entering
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Love the imagery here. One can feel the stress level drop through the read.
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After a stress fill day of other people dramas in my life. This truly lulls the stress lever. One thinking of some where peaceful and away from day the troubles. It smooth my weary soul. These days it seems pretty ragged.
it getting cooler here.
take care love
brenda
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Very peaceful words you have written here. You have created some nice images for the reader.
Good luck in this contest!
Jeannette
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Beautiful set of lanturnes, Sis!
I like the background also!
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Beautiful poem and background, Sis! (The background I used for my latest poem was one of AP's Floral designs.)
Best of Luck in this contest!
Love Ya!
♥ Maureen
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Love poems that are set in such beauty as this one. Lovely, truly.
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Excellent
A terrific creation for the prompt. Such a great use of the form. Best of luck in the contest.
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a very smoothing write with form and flow and back ground it just leaves feeling of peace. Great write wish her the very best.
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Wow, wonderful write from the form and the flow to the BackGround, picture and imagery!! A Complete work of Art! well done! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
YOU HAVE JUST BEEN HOODWINKED
; Courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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Esquisite
Gorgeous write Susan but then you pen from the heart...
First time write in this form
Loved it
One could feel the connection...without even looking at the picture!!
Wish YOU well Sweet Sister!!
YOU stay strong for you are so loved
Continue to write that which helps you heal!!!
Many blessings to you always!!!
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Loved this chain of lanturnes, loved the background too...you have a magical way of drawing the reader into you're words...sorry that you are suffering with your health and hope writing gives you comfort as well as enjoyment...
for me this is a brilliant write
~Lilac~
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dear blushfulmoon,
your very first lanturne chain is awesome and I hope it will bring you luck in the contest.
your creativity just sparkles joyfully and has birthed a masterpiece in every way.
I am sorry to hear about your worrysome health-condition, and if you permit, I shall pray for you to receive comfort and healing for your body, soul and spirit.
may you find peace in these challenging times and have strength and faith to guide you along this path,
many bright blessings,
marion -
And I have to say great job
a delight to read and more special because someone
reached out and helped you. we all need a helping hand
some great work was turned out here.. beautiful lanturn full of wonderful wording..
Bravo Bravo
Love and Light
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Such a lovely poem! I'm very happy to know that you are recovering, read about the surgery in the group. You my sweetie, deserve to be free of pain and be only smiles. Love it when you bring beauty through your words.
Wishing you the best of all, always
Mari
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Dear Susan, A beautiful write my sweet, the words are so beautiful, I don't know how to do a Lanturne, but with the help you've had I'm sure it's perfect. I posted a little something for you while you were in hospital I hope you like.
allpoetry.com/poem/2074028
I just spent two days in hospital with my heart, but am OK now.
Love Joan
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this is eloquent in style and form
I love the background and affects you give it in your alluring
verbs and metaphors.
keep your spirit high and know God hears all our pleas for your full recovery.
Tamara
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Susan, this is beautifully reflective of the spirit within you. I loved reading this and see you stretch for the evening sun just like that bluesky bell flower. I've never done a lanturne. It's lovely.
love you, Sis. love you!
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sis is back!
now, i hope you will limit your time on the computer,
even if you produce such splendors as this poem.
not writing a novel tonight...hoping you'll get right to bed!
love you lots sis...and am so releaved you're back home!
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wooohooo...Blushie......this is a fantabulous first attempt at lanturne.....mine was not so eloquent as this wondrous beauty is.....absolutely well done......I know you can master this form far to easy.....and looka all them clappie guys....boo hoo
......lol......wish I had a fan club so warm and inviting too........ 
.....wonderful to be loved so much here.....
I am also happy you are feeling much better and back to sharing your heart with all us souls who love you.... and a smoochie....
Hugs baby
Malabu
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beautiful and creative, nice flow and form keep penning hun and nothing but good look..love sis..
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Well Back my dear sister tis good to see you again. Know you are always in my prayers and thoughts
This a new style/form for you but no less beautiful as the rest you pen. Then I have come to the conclusion that your pen knows nothing BUT beauty. For each piece you pen turns more beautiful than the one before. This is no exception! Exquisite! -
Your poem is beautiful, your poetry skills just keep getting better and better. I am keeping you in my thoughts and prayers. I know all will turn out well
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Welcome Back Poetess!
Hi Susan!
This is wonderful. I don't know which is the greater pleasure, the poem you've written or seeing you back here at ap. It seems years since I last heard from you. I'm sorry about your health problem. I'll keep good thoughts for you.
I know what's the bigger pleasure, knowing that you're better!
Take care. Peace, love, success and happiness to you Susan!
Tommy
Edited on Jun 20, 4:04 p.m. because 'Nobody's Perfect. lol'. -
Thank you all for the critique and comments
Error's have been fixed and re-edited...
Again your comment's are most welcome
Hugs
Susan~~~
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It's a beautiful poem my lovely auntie.
You're always in my prayers.
Love you
Wish you luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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Susan..these are lovely..and it is wonderful to see you here and posting. I have thought of you..and hope you are doing well.
God Bless you and good luck in the contest.
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I do not know a thing about the form , but the write was beautiful. But more than that ......I am soooooooo happy for you. Thx to Red Red Rose my mind was on you that entire day and i kept checking the pagr for updates. Keep up the Spirit and I hope you know how much that you are loved by us all
Good wishes for the other test as well
xoxoxoxoxoxoxxoxoxxooxoalways,
reenie
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Susan, very beautiful write here dear! I won't comment on the form, as others already have. I'll just say that your imagery was awesome, and your story is one of wonder as well! keep writing and getting better! thanks so much for sharing this with us! much love, and many blessings, john
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Interesting form of poetry, Sis! This is the first I know about it. I love that you're back on-line and writing poetry again! The words are beautiful! I'm going to keep praying that everything will be okay.
Love you, Sis!
♥ Maureen
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excellent presentation
This is just beautiful Susan. Your words describe to us the bellflowers existence. This poem puts me into a very peaceful and reflective mood. The last stanza is just great. I can feel the warm air and hear that whippoorwill singing.
Great job!
etherealforu
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A lovely write. Beautiful imagery. Lovely expression of emotion. A very good first attempt at the form. My only observation is that you aren't following the rules of the form. There are 5 lines in each lanturne. The syllable count is 1, 2, 3, 4, 1 respectively. Other than that, this is a lovely piece. Shelley
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A beautiful interpretation of the picture, Susan, a beautiful poem. I see the anethesia didn't effect your poetry skills
It's good to see you back and it was so nice talking to you ont he phone today.... I'm looking forward to it again tomorrow
Good luck in the contest
Love and big
Dee
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You can't write bad poetry my dear regardless of what's going on with your brain or any other body part.
Beautiful work!
Whippoorwills must be a Kentucky thang..i've written about 4 writes with them in 'em..lol...not posted.
Prayers are going up & out..ALL will be well Sugar
I wish you the best in the contest! (as if you need it)
Love ya much
thinkin' of you always
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Susan, lovely job writing this and welcome back I hope you make a full recovery you've been though so much.
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This is simply beautiful. My thoughts and prayers where with you whilst you were gone and in hospital. I am so glad you are back and writing such wonderful poetry again. This is your healing mechanism. Love to you always... x LB.
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Beautiful; just the kind of Earth-imagery blended with the Celestial, that I adore I've IM'd you a query about this one, as there were a couple things you could do with double-checking
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excellent
how did you do this i love the lanturne it is very good. i feel this is so good sis. is it ok to adopt you for a sister. i never had one. i sure love it if you would be mine. if we are sisters sorry i am in a drug induce state my wrist is killin me tonight want to take my mine off of it before i got depress again. i love the pictures it takes me to somewhere the pain does not exist for a moment. it beyond me how you write so lovely. i in envy i feel pale with such a great write. this is a good thing. i don't like my writing i like it better when it not mine. tell your tutor great job. i am glad you had something good to think about. Your bush had three white rose with pink on the edge. The first rose bush to bloom going to put a stake by it. do you like frogs angels or fariys was going to put something you might like by it.
Take care very good. love b -
Beautiful and inspiring
A truly beautiful poem by a poet we love so much!
This is such a sweet poem, it makes me feel relaxed and happy as I read it. The background is perfect, and the picture is perfect, too! We are so glad to find you here with us, again, Susan! We continue to pray for your recovery. 
Congratulations on taking on a challenge with a new kind of poem for you. I need to take lessons. 
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This is really good sis like really good love ya and
WELCOME BACK!!
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