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Angels flying

Angels flying
God is crying
Watching us
Sinning and dying

Thank you, kid
For shooting your Mother
Thank you, Father
For abusing your daughter





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Written June 19th, 2006

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  • Dead Love
    June 23, 2006
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    hmm i agree with symphony, i like the second stanza more than the 1st


  • Symphony
    June 19, 2006
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    This started off really well, but once you got into the tangent, it went too far off rhythm, and offbeat for my liking but on the whole not a bad job; maybe some tweaking will make perfect


  • monkeynu
    June 19, 2006
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    i really liked this.....it is an awesome poem....


  • PoEtRyInMe
    June 19, 2006
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    hmm...