"I love you," he says as he goes to hang up the phone;
"I know. I love you too," I tell him with my whole heart behind those words.
My friends could tell how in love I was,
they said I never looked happier and I knew
it was true,I got butterflies just thinking of you.
Laying on your couch late at night,
listening to you sing, watching your hazel eyes
brighten up when I smile at you,
let me know that this love was real.
Running my hands through your soft, brown hair
while our song plays in the background,
it's then you tell me that we're meant to be.
I kiss your pierced lips then you
gently kiss my neck before you have to leave,
I only wish that you could have stayed with me forever.
I know now why you had to leave so early everyday;
you had someone else besides me, someone who loves you
but not as much as I do.
"I'm sorry, I really do love you. I want us to be ok, let me back into your life, to your heart," you say to me as we sit on my bed;
"I wish I could but, babe,You better crawl on your knees, the next time you say that you love me," comes out of my mouth through every other tear.
One year later, now you're all alone, tell me
do you still love me? Do you still care?
I can tell you I do, but you broke my heart
and that's what I can't forgive.
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Written June 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- -=Inspiration=- by pointlessdayz.
300 points, ended July 15, 2006, 11 entries
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oh damn... sorry... i didnt see that! my mistake... but i've already judged this contest... so there's nothing I can do about it right now... however, if you enter another of my contests and this happens again, just give me a huge dope slap upside the head...
-alex -
i did respond to you! look @ the response from me under your first comment on here....pointlessdayz on Jun 19, 1:42 p.m.
just label me as CONFUSED 225 critiques, 145 poems. said:
what did you pick for your inspiration? (delete?) (reply?)pain is beautiful on Jun 19, 1:45 p.m.
tell me that we belong together 82 critiques, 3 poems. Currently online. said:
"You better crawl on your knees, the next time you say that you love me." (the opening lyrics to Over, by Evan's Blue) (delete?) (edit?) -
I;m sorry to say that since you didnt respond and tell me what your inspiration was for this piece, and it's judging time, I'm going to have to discount this piece for the running. I did like it, though, and I would have considered it, had you not broken the rules. So, again, sorry.
-alex -
Wow. I didn't know you had such a passionate side. You did very good with this. Maybe I'll understand this 'love' one day. lol Seriously, it was very good.
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"You better crawl on your knees, the next time you say that you love me." (the opening lyrics to Over, by Evan's Blue)
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what did you pick for your inspiration?
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you really think its good? yeah we can trade poetry as long as we can trade hair too. lol. and over spring break we were gonna trade some thing else too...my freckles for your....what was it I forgot? lol. nah j/k love ya girly.
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awwwwww....that good. can i write like u??? lets trade lol. loive ya girl
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