Spiralling
Uncontrollably
Like a merry-go-round of bloated horses
Perplexed
Confused
Debating why I am once again at this juncture
Seductive
Enticing
Beckoning me to eat, just one bite
Ecstatic
Gorging
Delirious as I feast with fury and conviction
Raiding
Compulsive
Nausiated but anxious - the fridge is again empty
Bloated
Pathetic
Restless, sleep evades me, as the bile moves up and down
Lethargic
Sickly
Powerless - a new day
must force myself to get out of bed
Spiralling
Uncontrollably
When will the merry-go-round stop
I must get off
Author notes
Written June 18th, 2006
A contest entry
- Size zero by Entwining Beauty.
300 points, ended September 11, 2007, 12 entries
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Excellently penned poem beautiful form. Great flow word choose was amzingly done loved the poem had loads of true imagery good luck
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great job! I really liked this! I Loved the background it really went well with the piece! keep up the excellent work and good luck in that contest!!!
-Steve- -
This is a very descriptive setting and it is so touching and moving. Love the symbols!
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Wow i like this poem.very emotional and personal. You are a great writter and i can feel your struggle with an eating disorder. I can relate to this poem and I love the metaphor that you used implying to the merry go round. Great join. I however think that the ending could have used something more but it leaves you hanging and wanting more. Anyways great job keep writting you are a very talented author. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
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Good writting. I like the style and message. Very good way of aproaching a problem many people face. Very creative and well writen. Much Luck!
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Fantastic images and something you so well-portrayed! I never had an eating disorder in any way but I understand the idea of a merry-go-round. One understands so that this isn't right, not the way it's supposed to be but you get 'round the bend and you're right back where you started.
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Very well-written poem! I really like the "merry-go-round of bloated horses" as far as creativity goes. The poem distinctly protrayed the feelings going along with the whole addiction.
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Isn't that incredible. We can be absolute geniuses with our lives seemingly in order yet these monsters invade our private lives and behind the scenes, we're just broken, tortured souls.
As someone who's had a lot of struggles with the "merry-go-round" (spectacular analogy, by the way), I can say this was very well done and represented life with an ED very well.
I hope you can get off the ride before it completely consumes you.
Best of luck,
Sierra -
What a powerful description of something you don't understand. I hope you get help, because it has nothing to do with your intelligence.
God bless,
Anne -
hmmm. pardon the unintended puns but this poem is definitely food for thought... well done too.
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