the darkness that drowns my soul
a plague that tried to leave behind
a redemption soaked in failure
a pain of a different kind
a reflection that isn't there
a face that is unknown
eyes that have grown cold
emotions that will never be shown
a cold torn heart
scars that will never heal
fear that clouds the mind
the curse to never feel
a rope around my neck
only one step to take
show how weak I've become
with a curse that i hope to break
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Written June 18th, 2006
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David, I loved this. You were right, it is filled with dark emotions that rip at the reader. I honestly don't know what to say about this one. It blew me away no matter how cliche that is.. it's the truth. I loved this hun, and I can't wait for you to post soon. And sorry it's took me forever to comment on this, I've been hella busy. ♥
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Oh... and I love that "a redemption soaked in failure".... glad I came up with it .....
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awwwwwww tears are in my eyes, the ending, so sad. I related to bits and pieces of this poem, and I have to say the image stays in my head nice wording, Great Write! -
nicely done! i really liked the story, and the flow of this piece.
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WOW...awesome rhyme and great 'story'...i definitely enjoyed it!
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i liked this. it was deep and powerful and every line kept me wanting to read the next. stupendous write i must say. best of luck and and much love to you.
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DAVID! YOU DELICIOUS BASTARD!.. haha, nice write man. It's good to know that you're actually still alive focker!
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