Don't call me Alice
Because I dream.
La Loba calls
Above the screams
Of right, or wrong,
Or fit to see,
While mirrored
In reality.
I may be noble
To seek the truth,
But I am born
Of Cajun roots.
The coyote calls me,
Strong and clear.
Wakinyan dances
Without fear.
I dream and dream
And when I wake,
There is another
Dream to take.
My head is strong,
My spirit free,
Unhampered by
Society.
The path is narrow,
Rocky still,
But Heyoka
Fits the bill.
Sacred clown
To break the mold
Of growing up
Or growing old.
No deck of cards
To hamper me,
Offed heads of
Moods menagerie.
I was formed of
Sacred clay
To hold the smoke
That others pray.
A little hollow
Bone, it seems,
Where spirit flows
And eagles scream.
The owl looks through
The darkest lie,
Deceived no more
By height and might.
I've found my bones
And gathered them,
Sung life into
The glib and grim.
Twice visited by
Thunderbird.
In clarity,
The voice is heard.
So Butterflies
And spiders dance.
Live the vision,
Take the chance.
Don't call me Alice
Because I dream.
La Loba calls.
Reflect and gleam.
Author notes
Based loosely on the legend of La Loba--The Wolf Woman
Of course, it has a touch of Alice in Wonderland, as well, since I live on both sides of the looking glass
Written June 18th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Only If You Think You're Good Enough... by WordsArentEnough.
300 points, ended July 15, 2006, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I loved this poem simply because it's so different. I particularly liked the first two lines. Unfortunately I am unfamiliar with that legend so I probably lost a lot of the meaning in this...
But I've enjoyed the fresh style of the poem anyway 
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I've grown up in Oklahoma, so I've had appreciation of Native American culture beaten into me since I was young, and this seemed very reminiscent of that. Also I liked "La Loba", I like when other languages are used in poetry (when I can understand it). Pretty good.
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What a fun write that this had to be and it was soooo purrrfect!!! hehe thanks for sharing this piece, and keep upt he awesome poetry here.
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I love this. It's really beautiful. It has a very natural, melodic flow to it. The repetitions are perfect, in the perfect places.
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ar.ar.arhoooooooooooooooowuah.
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great poem.the rhyming flows so beautifully
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What an amazing write. It's so unique and...wow! lolz! i love it well done you are an amazingly good poet im so jealous of your talent lolz well done
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Do Not Touch It!
wow..this is definitely something different and unique..i loved your style..and it's just so amazing and so true...kinda like just let me be huh? Definitely gives a sense of hope and also confidence.
Loved this one...great write, keep it up.
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i truly liked this poem- i can see the lucidity of your verse, befitting to the dreamy subject- the rhyme seems almost to lift you, vasperous, away. i think the choice of words exacted the semblace of life, waking or dreaming, in each words poetry. climatical, and gravitating- always , at the poems transgress, it seemed to continuously intensify its arising, impassioned voice, unil its gratifying and insurmountable close. THANK YOU!!
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Excellent-poem,Indeed'
Magnificent-Write',Thistle. "Loved it". What 'true-words',and well-written,verse.I felt as if I ws climbing a 'mountain',and just kept climbing,and climbing,without an end. An "Eagle' that 'soars',so very 'High',a very good-write. The 'Words',go well,with the-picture. Good-Job......."God-Bless'...Love,Shirley shaw-raytown,mo.64133....... -
very creative with the contest very creative
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Well you have the honor of being the first poem I have read on here...lol Really though that was wonderful. I loved your style and enjoyed the way I was captivated until the very last word. This is a great work.
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I loved the read of this poem, Thistle, knowing nothing of this legend before. so much of nature is evoked throughout this poem and it does have a dream-like mystical quality...a great title choice for thie write!
enjoyed the read and best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo -
there's a pattern and I like that beautiful imagry
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This is very good. Talking about dreams..... its just as beautifull as the sweetest dream come true .
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Wow! its such a good poem! The words flow so nicely and the scheme or may be the line arrangement is too good to fit everything.
As far as the meaning of the poem is concerned, the poem is an absolute stunner!
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you have good rhythm. but its a bit too long for my taste. i still love a lot of the paras
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this is really good!!lol
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Lol, I don't know if I have ever seen the word cowabaanga written before, though I am familiar with the term
Thanks
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Lol, there is no rule that says you have to like every poem you run across so there is nothing to be sorry about. That is why we have diversity in creative writing and no official poetry police .
I know that sometimes we just can't put our finger on what makes us like or dislike a write, I would be curious to know what you don't like about it if you can pinpoint it. Just this style of writing? The types of words used? The rhyme or topic?
Anything is helpful to an author and gives us things to consider in future writes.
Thanks for your honesty, it is appreciated.
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I don't like this peice. I'm sorry, it's just not my style at all....At least you got 34 applauses making you the most applaused....So my personal opinion shouldn't matter. I just don't exactly like it.
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hell what more can i say u got the crowd going wild and am a man ofte crowd so i say cowabaanga perfect piece(that meant ur piece stank....in a good way of course)lol.dont take that as a joke course i didnt findit funny either.bottom line.greatpiece
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Great
Very nice and well put!!!!!!!!!!! A+ -
This was a very well written poem
I liked the play of words
Keep on writing you
are a gifted writer
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Well that did it for me, you are on my faves list.
The language was perfect as the flow of thoughts were like neurons racing.
I think you are a safe bet, till the end.
best wishes
Peace Muddy -
i want to cry. this is sooo goood.................WOOOOOOW. i loved this partI dream and dream
And when I wake,
There is another
Dream to take.
My head is strong,
My spirit free,
Unhampered by
Society.
Amazing. i really love this. you are vary good. ppppplllllzzz keep up the good work. love always
Diamond -
This is a fantastic poem and the flow of it really kept me captivated. Well done!!
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The thing I liked most about this was the flowing rhythm. I felt as if I could dance to it. Thanks for sharing it!
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Enchanting!
A very magical write that inspires thought and imagination.
You are a gifted writer with an awesome talent for communicating
some deep emotions. The rays of hope luminate the canvas.
The subject which you write about "Dreams" is the bedrock
of american values. Without dreams we would all be as
beast or cattle in the fields. Your insightful and tender
poem allows us to transcend and ascend to a better way
of thinking. The world could sure use much more of that.
A excellent write with alot of imagination!
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nice i think we need to get this one to the top of most applauded lol keep up the good work
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I love the rhythm and flowiness to this. You did an amazing job.
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this was really well done; you caught the feeling of a 'free spirit' perfectly i think, or so it seemed to me anyway, and i really enjoyed reading this one - nice job!
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This is a beautiful spirit-filled piece with the most fantastic rhythm and cadence to it and amazing vocabulary combinations. Splendid.
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Thsi is sooooooo good Well done you really do have some talent here keep it up!
Luv DevilishEyesxxx -
wicked write! totally cool
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I'm a bit surprised by this poem... not what i expected at all. I think you have really said a lot in a very clever way...
Unbelievable. i really like the imagry in this poem, even though i don't understand the cultural implications and symbolism... Is there somewhere where i can do more research on this? -
I really like how you rhyme in the poem, and its really good. :-)
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GREAT
This is a very good poem.....one of the best i have read ever, great job, keep it up!!! -
Oh, sis this is suPERB in writing and content, each
word comes victoriously out of mediocrity. So needed in
poetry.............so desperately needed.
My head is strong,
My spirit free,
Unhampered by
Society.<---------- now THERE'S a constituent to a good anchor. Very encouraging.
Only thing I would do differently is eliminate most of the
punctuation. It could float and fly better in my estimation.
Terrrrrrrrrrrrrrfic! Love, CookieZeal/D -
loverly. simply loverly!
Madison -
wow, this is a very unique poem! it flows very well...!!! love your imagery!!! u know, this is make a beautiful song!
I suggest you center align this since some of the words are on the border!
Keep up the good work!!
~DesertRose
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lovely
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Oh my goodness. One of the best pieces I have ever read here on All Poetry. The rhythm was PERFECT. The word choice was PERFECT. The rhyming was PERFECT. And you didn't do simple 'cat-hat' rhymes either, which is really great. I love the touch of Alice in Wonderland. And the thing about La Loba...incredible! I was reading this and right at the middle I had to stop and I whispered 'wow' lol. I mean, what more can I say? This is incredible! And I HAVE to applaud. Would be a crime if I didn't. This is really, really wonderful. Please keep writing! :-)
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Insightful
I'm actually reading the book "Women who run with the Wolves" at the moment... this was beautiful. you really captured the highly spiritual essence of La Loba. -
A beautiful poem with many levels; I like how you have mixed two worlds into one. This reminded me of one of my favorite books "women who run with the wolves", a highly recommended read; and I will say the same about this poem, highly recommended.
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A very well written poem, with fantasic use of imagery. This piece combines elements of fantasy, spirituality, and introspective observation, all accompanied by a flawless rhyme scheme. A superb bit of writing!
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One of the best peices in a long, long time. Great write and I love the Alice in Wonderland touch to it. I guess so does everyone else who reads this. The style is beautiful, and it flows with a sort of free spirited pixieish type dance thing.(don't mind me) Keep thats ink flowin'.
-Kris
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Very good poem! I love the imagery & rhyming that is used in "Don't Call Me Alice."
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simply beautiful! keep up the great works!!!
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This was fun to read and I love the picture and I especially loved your author's comment. All in all, great job.
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Wow, great poem. Nice flow and rhymes. Really great job on making the poem a smooth read all the way through. And I love what it says along with the imagery of creatures. Good one!
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You have done a really good job here. I like the intermingling of legend and reality, a terrific write,keep it up. Val.
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i like the negotiation of myth and reality. very good poem really enjoyed reading this well done keep up the good work!
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woohoo you have used my name in your poem! I liked it a lot, as I tend to dream a lot. It has agreat ryhtmn and has an air of fantasy which I am drawn to. I wish to find out more about this la loba tale now!
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hey there, very nicely down, to feel more than the calling on the wind or totally natures call. the alice touch to this was very good. Is the narrow path Alices's? good write my frind. image
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HEY! HEY! HEY! I LOVE ALICE IN WONDERLAND!!! hence the name Tweedle Dum..hehehehe. Well this my friend is an awesome poem!!! Makes me wanna go play cards with the queen...mwahaha.
Bye!
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I love all your mythical and archeptypical images here--it felt very international and most deeply human, if that makes sense. "Dont call me Alice because I dream" is my favorite line. Of course, DO call ME Ruby Alice, for many reasons.
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great read
great poem i have said this many times but i never have criticized a poem, which to everyone i s'pose is good!
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EXCELLENT!!!
VERY NICE, I LOVED IT, BECAUSE IT'S DIFFRENT, AND YOU SPEAK WITH POWER, THANKS ALOT FOR SHARING YOUR TALENT!! GREAT JOB!! -
Lyrical
Lyrical, moves along quickly with a beautiful cadence. Great write.
Thanks,
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Great division between myth and dream. Facinating story. Well written. Keep the spirit.
Joan -
ok, you mentioned cajun.. deck of cards... i imediately think: Gambit.
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Brava
I enjoyed the mix between two dream worlds...I read Alice in Wonderland monthly(at least) and I enjoyed the cards and chopped heads as while as the images of the eagle and La Loba. -
This is a great piece. It has such a perfect rhythm and a wonderful, imaginative, complex-yet-simple (if I make any sense) rhyme. You create some great imagery, addressing the concept that we have all been assigned in a truly unique way. Not to mention; you have introduced me to a new myth, lol
Best of luck with this
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I came looking for Alice -- I happen to love her. Cool last stanza.
Lisa -
This is very deep! My favorite part-
My head is strong,
My spirit free,
Unhampered by
Society.
This seems to fit me pretty well. I really enjoyed this writing!
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Wow... this was awsome.
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Amazing! You did a most wonderful job on this one!!
Best of luck!
Melanie
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Deeply moving, and I loved the Artwork! It was a wonderful poem to read.
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that is quite wonderful, it rhymed beautifully, I am trying to save my points for a contest and have used my daily applause but I cannot let this pass without recognition, wish I could promote it for you, it is wonderful.
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I really enjoyed this - what a fabulous piece.
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"I was formed of
Sacred clay
To hold the smoke
That others pray.
A little hollow
Bone, it seems,"
I loved that succession of lines.
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Bravo, Bravo, Wonderful read...I loved everything about it..the flow, the imagery, the humor of Heyoka!!!
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well crafted
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I like the rythem in this, nice job.
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