If people would just stop
And think about who they really were,
And stop trying to hide around the corner.
If they all took off their mask
And let themselves shine through,
And took the time to realize
Everything they can do.
If they took the time to notice
All that is in front of them,
Wide open, waiting for them to grab it.
If they weren't so caught up
In the uselessness of society
Then maybe they would learn,
That being themselves is the propriety.
Author notes
I'm tired of people trying to be someone they arent.
Written June 18th, 2006
What did you think
Comments
1 - 6 of 6
-
Very true. So many people are just confused though and really don't know who they are or are afraid to be themselves. It takes a speacial person in today world to really allow themselves to just be themslves. Great write, hopefully people will read it and realize it's time to be true. Nicely written.
-
Meaningful
Wow... the words in this poem bring across a really important message. It's really meaningful and truthful.
"If they all took off their mask.
And let themselves shine through
And took the time to realize
Everything they can do."
This is a really deep poem, conveying an important point. People really should be themselves instead of hiding behind a mask that's just not them. No one should be afraid of showing who they truly are. Wonderfully penned! This really did get me thinking. Thanks a lot for sharing, and please do keep up the good work!
Julia -
This is a good poem with a good lesson to be lernt. But sometimes people don't know how to be themself or have a hard time begining theirself becouse if they are they might somehow get in trouble or get in a worse situation. Anyway's, keep up the good work and have a good day.
-
I like this piece and it's message is certainly a good one. I wonder, though, if it's maybe written a little bit more like prose than poetry? If you took away the line breaks, nothing would stop it from reading exactly like a paragraph in an essay or something. That's not necessarily a bad thing. Still, with a little bit of editing, I think you could probably get it to flow in a more poetic fashion. Also, you have some sentence fragments in there. For the sake of proper punctuation, I would leave off the periods altogether. I know this sounds long and critical, but really they are only minor issues. Conceptually, it's very sound. I just think it could be even better with some quick editing work. So, overall nice job. I see a world of potential.
-
exellent
Great work. I wish that this kinda attitude could be bottled up and sold. I think the world would be such a nicer, calmer, honest place if this was the norm. Maybe everybody should print this out, and read it to themself every morning. thanks for the reminder, and keep up the good work!!! -
inspirational
This poem is so true and I love the way it's written. The "uselessness of society" is beautifully worded and I just love the way that reads-this poem is truly inspiring and hopefully people will listen one day and stop pretending to be someone they're not! Keep writing, I liked this piece!!
Adding your comment:
1 - 6 of 6
2 old applause
