A far distant rumble
As clouds form and tumble
From palest of pearl
As they gather and twirl
They build with intensity
And darken in density
While the wind blows unruly
And leaves dance unduly
The sun blotted out
The end of the drought
A faint scent prevails
As the wind turns to gales
And then there's a crash
And a bright fiery flash
That arcs through the air
A lightening bolt flare
Then the wind disappears
And more lightening appears
As the storm gathers force
As it follows its course
Then the rain hits the ground
With a deafening sound
In large oily drops
As it bounces and hops
Then the deluge gets quicker
As the lightening does flicker
And the thunder explodes
And clouds lessen their loads
One last thunderclap
One last lightening zap
The clouds disappear
And everything's clear
Author notes
I just love a wild and violent thunderstorm, which reminds me just how powerful nature can be and how awesome the world around us is. I love the thunder, the flashes of lightening and the wonderful scent of rain in the air, promising freshness and newness.
Written June 18th, 2006
A contest entry
- The Thunder and the Lightening by Star Shine.
500 points, ended November 13, 2006, 23 entries
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great write and nice use of rhymes, thanks for entering - Jacen an IndividualEleven.
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Loved all the senses attended to by your writing here, I could almost feel the hair on my arms stand up from the electric in the air. Well done, thanks for entering.
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Very well done! Great
imagery, sound, and smell!!
You created your own
storm within this poem.
If flowed so very well.
Great job. Brilliantly
written.
Thank you for sharing.
Good luck in the contest.
Jeannie D Hunter
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I somply adore a strong thunder storm. The power they wield is simply amazing! The sounds, the visuals, the energy within it all is so intense and energizing. I cannot say enough about them. Your poem was just perfect. The flow and rhyme was right one. All of it just really brought this piece to life...WOW!
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nothing like a good thunderstorm, i love watchign them and being high in the air it is great spill poetic ink and twist me into the wild crazy shape of unfathomable love...
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Hi:
I read your Thunderstorm poem. It is well written. I too like the rain. You have described a Thunderstorm very well in your poem. Nature is a good subject to write about. Keep up the good work.
Katie Lazette -
Excellent
I too love thunder storms and applaud your rhyming and description. I can't choose a favourite part! I enjoyed it very much and have added you to my favourites. Looking forward to reading more of your work. -
beautifull work on this piece
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