Correct me if I'm wrong
sometimes the feeling get so overwhelming
devotion becomes redemption
have to find something to commit to
or else what is it that we are living for
hate becomes fantasies
as you think you can win
but unfortunately
the battle is never won
always wanting to be something you can't
and never will be
days get harder
as they grow long
solid thoughts of suicide
become thoughts even too pure for you
what is left of the soul
when you are so fed up with life
so tired
so weak
that it seems you starve
to be heard
and recognized for who you are
but no one ever really sees
that you are always bleeding
strength is something so distant
as the leaves turn from green to brown
and the skies gray to black
vision is dimmed with afterthought
and yearnings that make you cry
how can you remain in body
when your soul is dead
and rotting ?
Author notes
Written for my newest group.. I hope I'm not alone..
A Dark Deed.
Written June 17th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Group A Dark Deed ONLY!!!!! by Hales13.
300 points, ended June 22, 2006, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm glad you liked this poem too!
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really great... i really felt what you were saying, thanks for your entry, best of luck!
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lol morbid is what I go for! *hugs* Thank you, hun. I like this poem, but it is not the best.
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thank you night owl. I'm so glad you think so highly of this poem. I ehjoyed writing it. You do have talent. You are a great poet! NEVER DOUBT THAT!!!
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Everything in this was amazing, I can't even begin to get into it all; everything about this was perfect and so morbidly beautiful there aren't even words to describe it all. Great poem hun this is undoubtedly the best one you've done yet!
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AWESOME and the last stanza is so strong, i love that ending! And i can totally relate. Every day seems longer and everything always seeming to be more hopeless by the second.
great stuff, you rock. i only wish i had an ounce of your talent.
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