As summer's sun is beating down
He hides amid a leafy crown
With tilted head and flicking tail
Unfurling wings with which he'll sail
Upon his head an inky crest
The softest blues adorn his breast
Across his back are brightest blues
His tail's adorned in whitest hues
He lights upon a yonder branch
Waiting, watching for his chance
He studies me with piercing eyes
To see if I'll toss him a prize
It is a game 'tween him and I
To see how close to me he'll fly
At first he won't come very near
As days go by, I ease his fear
There! He's perched up on the roof
I toss a nut to offer proof
Down he sweeps in fierce attack
Then to his tree -- tap tap crack!
Over time I'll earn his trust
Tender patience is a must
For this jay I have a plan
He'll take the nut, right from my hand.
Author notes
Written June 17th, 2006
A contest entry
- a contest DUH!! by xDrippingTearsx.
300 points, ended July 8, 2006, 8 entries
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So well crafted. You look like petula Clark! Are you?
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Cyberartist [Moderator] -
Thanks so much for your kind comments on the Blue Jay. I'm pleased you liked it. I actually wrote it while I was out there playing with him!
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wow how beautiful ,i love the bluejays to,you have decribed them well as i watch them to and the cardinals great imagery
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Great Work
Very clear Loved it-I needed something sweet today. -
This is a very cute and lighthearted poem. It was just the thing I needed as a break from depressing and morbid poetry. I see this as an ode to life's simple pleasures. It's very well written and like the other person who commented said, it's "clean, clear, uncluttered". It's also very simple and joyful. Excellent
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This is just wonderful... clean, clear, uncluttered. The images is beautiful, the story is endearing. You've managed to be very accurately descriptive of your 'friend' in a well written form and style. VERY nice. The pic is great too!!!
Edited on Jun 17, 3:34 p.m. because ''.
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