In front of amazed eyes and sleepy land
over the rough mountains and calm sea
Sun is holding its magic rays like hands
creating a picture to set you on your knees.
Its journey is like the eternal Phoenix flight
out of dark and ash it arises for us once again.
From the dawn is coming, going to the night
kissing the river on its way toward a glen.
From the ancient time like a God was admired,
babies were shown up to be blessed by Sun.
With this unique beauty poets were inspired
many great poems and paintings had been done.
Fountain of life flows, bringing us a foreseen light
always it is here, this magic for us again to ignite.
Author notes
In a list
A contest entry
- Morning Glow- Picture Inspired by StormGoddess.
300 points, ended July 22, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Collection Point For Sunsets Are Best {Shared}, Sunrises Are Best {Alone} by Death of the Author.
725 points, ended September 12, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your most popular by Beating.
425 points, ended October 26, 2007, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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"With this unique beauty poets were inspired
many great poems and paintings had been done."
Those lines really stood out to me. You truly paint pictures with your words in this, and you bring thoughts that just stuck with me, and I wanted to take them even further. The piece is beautiful and it brought memories of the sun sets I've seen in my life. Great job! -
Wow, excellent, excellent and even more excellent, this is really great. Very nice image and very nice imagery too, you have most certainly been inspired. Really good read, thanks for sharing. Take care and good luck! x
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Absolutely beautiful. Your take on the image is inpiring and this is well written.
Thank you so much for the entry and good luck
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Thank you very much for so nice comment and for this shiny gold trophy too.
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awesome poetry :
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Short and strong comment. thank you.
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This is really good, and I like the way you create an image with words.
Well done and good luck.
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Thank you Paul for your time to read my poetry and thanks for good wishes.
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Hi Sonja
this is a stunning piece both verbally and visually. You paint a pretty picture with these words and I can believe it had inspired many poets… well written. Thank you for entering this all the best
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Thank you Kari. Good wishes are always welcome
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This is breathtaking! I love it Very well done and that graphic is nice. The best of luck to you in the contest.
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Thank you Sam. Even with words it wasn't easy to paint some perfect picture but I am always trying to do that.
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This is wonderfully serene and inspiring. The place you write of should be a goal of us all. If we look for such a place as you are showing us with your poem, even the journey will bring rewards. Very well done.
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Thank you so much for your entry into my contest, your talent and hard work are very much appreciated. I loved this poem about the sun, and it had inspired many poets to write, myself including. Loved the picture you used above it, it created a lovely image for your poem to expand upon.
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Thank you krittikill for such a nice comment and applause.
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wow!such passion and open imagination,a perfect painting from a perfect painter of words,nice picture too,lol
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Thank you Choirangel. I am glad you like it.
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this was so pretty and I just love that picture that you put. so much imaginary in this, thanks for sharing, keep up the awesome poetry.
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Thank you Squashedpie7.
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Good stuff - quite an imagination - good read.
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Thank you Kniepower for your time to read and comment my poetry.
Thanks for applause.
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outstanding
This is such a great poem, so well written and with such a great flow, I really enjoyed reading it, great job -
Hi my dear POE.
It's very interesting that most readers has their favorite lines from this poem. Thank you sweetie for your time to read and comment my work.
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Thank you my dear Sondra. Yes, I like this verses too. Sometimes my muse can work overtime. Maybe we will have to work sometime in collaboration.
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beautiful poem sonja, this was my favorite line
"Fountain of life flowing brings only expected light"
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The Sun kisses you for you created a beautif
My Dear Sidter this is one of the most bless and beautiful poem I have read you know how to write. Iam proud to be your sister -
Yes Vera, you are probably right, but a little diferences are like a good challenge to all of us - not only to get everything too serious and I agree that poetry must be good. Maybe this one is not perfect, but I will try to see my ranking. Also, I am always here to accept constructive and honest comment and to give the same. Thank you for your time to visit my site and to comment. Each comment is very precious to me.
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I have to say that I have certain doubts as to whether this competition is a good idea... Some poets are soliciting applauds - which I feel is not good conduct...
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Thank you Serenahind for this great challenge and absolutely different contest. Let's the best win!
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Thank you Tang for your kind support. If you will ever need my support you know where to find me.
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My dear dreamadream. This picture wasn't for contest. I had it saved on my pc for a very long time ago. I found it somwhere on Internet and it captured my attention like the best poem. I am glad you like my poetry and you make me to blush with your comparision. I even do not dare to think this way. My poetry is not so perfect because I have a problem to count syllables and to put the words and characters into the right orders because of dyslexia, but I am still trying to overcome it with my hard job. My publishers has a great job to prepare my text for publishing. Thank you for all your kind words and support.
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Thank you lyrical-rebel. Now you left me out of speech.
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Thank you my dear friend for this great support and uplifting words. You makes me to blush with a coments like this one.
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I will have to you TurtleDove for so nice comment. It worth a gold to me.
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Thank you grannyeri. I am touched with so many great comments and you by my side.
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Thank you gullionmar for comment and great support, I will try to do my best.
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What I could exprect from one of my dearest frined than so nice comment and perfect support. Shivani, I love you.
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Thank you azure85. As I already said, it's always nice to see great friendly support and when you will need me, just scream, and I will be with you.
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You realy brings sunshine to my side. Thank you for your time to read my poetry anf for your great support. If you will ever need me, I am here for you.
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Thank you Jim for your comment and kind support.
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Thank you nay-nay luv. I am glad you like it. Your kind suppurt could help me too.
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This is a beautiful piece. I enjoyed reading it. Your words are beautiful. Good luck in the contest.
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Sweetie, your comments are always very precious to me. Whenever you need me I'll be here for you.
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I know this poem is won by applauses but you won't be receiving mine unless I truly like your poem. And when it comes to this write....I loved it! It was truly beautiful! Amazing Job! Best of luck to you in the contest!
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Thank you zilberman for your time to read and comment my poetry and for kind suggestion. When you are talking about syllabes, I must say that I have a problem to write, not only to count syllables because of my problem with dyslexia. Poetry could be engineering, but I am writing mostly from my heart. ;f
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My sweet Janet always with me. Love you girl.
mum
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Thank you pollywolly for your great support. It's always nice to see so many great friends on this site. If you will ever need me, I am here for you.
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Thank you Ed from the deep of my heart. Your comments and good wishes always are a great frindly gift to me.
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Gentle Chaos Storm, you are one of the best wituh your comment and wishes. Thank you .
~Sonja~ -
Thank you dustookie2 for your time to read my poetry and for your good wishes.
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Thank you Azul Mariposa. Your comment worth a gold to me.
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Thank you bedazzled. I am glad you like it.
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Thank you sgking123 for your time to read and comment ma poetr.
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Thanks cliche for your kind support and uplisfitng words.
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Thank you Bazza.
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Thank you my dear friend. Your commens are always welcome to me.
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Thank you Nanette. This is the first time I entered this kind of contest.
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Dear Sonja,
You have captured the sun with all it's beauty!
Certainly one of the best I've read in a while. You've painted a picture for us even without the wonderful artwork that you have paired with your poem.
Wishing you well in the contest! (I think this is a winner
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beautifully expressed!
Hey beautiful write Sonja, a remarkable one! Do keep it up. you know you deserve more than just a applause you deserve a badge I guess..lol. beautiful write and I just hope that you continue writing coz it could win you more medals and may be you could be the next shakesphere! So just keep writing and some day you will meet your horizon.
Just to tell you I loved all your writes but to be very particular I loved this poem. The picture was just beautiful
Was it a picture contest or something?
coz if it was you have done a brilliant job.
Okay now for the best part of my job... which line did I love?
I just loved the line, 'Fountain of life flowing brings only expected light
always here with its magic for us to ignite.'
This was supposed to be the last line and the best line.
It was a remarkable one!
- with hugs, kisses and best wishes
- Pam
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woof!
Woof!... this poem is worth a woof and more..!
Loved the imagery.. the majestic description... the journey through history and the final words... all brilliantly done...!
Good job and best of luck!
Sue!
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First I liked the Graphic it was a good entry into your poem.Excellent imagery (especially the Phoenix) A picture poem .Well expressed ,unique in it's style .Very well worth reading...Thank you for writing. -
Excellent
The picture you chose goes well with your poem. Your poem delights my soul as always.
"kissing the river on its ways toward a glen." This is a memorable line. I can visualize the sun rolling across heaven touching first this river with a delightful kiss then seeking out the lonely glen. Nice thought. Rock on. Walt. -
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wonderful writing keep up the great work
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this is a very beautiful poem. i love poems on nature. and u have compiled all ur lovely points into just a few stanzas!! great poem!!
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The poem was so lovely to read. I liked the imagery of the Phoenix in it.
"Its journey is like the eternal Phoenix in flight
out of dark and ash it arises for us once again."
Very well written poem. I wish you good luck in the contest.
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I truly enjoyed this read. It was sincere and a joy to read. I loved the images that you penned in this piece.
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Very beautiful Sonja.
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nicely writen, good structure, and words, spelling is good also.
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Good poem.
Good poem.
But if I want the damn allpoetry computer to award me points I have to say more, be long winded. Well, this is your poem, but if it were mine I would consider a few changes. You are writing in good old iambic pentameter, so it matters how many syllables you have in each line. I might, were this my poem, replace "out of" with "from" in line 6 to cut out a syllable. The next to last line also has too many syllables and, the way I read it aloud, six feet rather than five. How about:
Life's flowing fountain brings but expected light
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Mummy you are great.
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starts of rather well but lost it for me in the last 2 verses
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Such beautiful poetry from such a wonderful poet. It is always a true pleasure reading your poetic masterpieces. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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I like the rising from the ashes connection to the Sun rise. A new day -- new possibilities. Good luck in the contest.
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What a beautiful poem this is.........I enjoyed reading it very much.
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Lovely piece
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Simply effective! Great images created with simple words making it an easy yet beautiful read. Magical!
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Absolutely gorgeous Sonja. Am sure, this poem will go for a crown
My hearty wishes for you in the contest This is a Lovely poem. I see the awesome effort u put into this.
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Pretty pretty my friend!! Regardless, I will applaud - good luck with the contest!!!
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Thank you Melanie. Your love and comments worth a gold to me.
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This is a most incredible poem.. it is beautiful! I applaud your amazing pen
Best of luck in the contest... this certainly looks like a winner to me
Always,
Melanie
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Thank you Sandi. With your precious and so nice comment and good wishes you makes my day better too.
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Sonja, I would have to say its magic ignited your muse, this was truly beautiful! What an inspiring picture,
Your lines " Its journey is like the eternal Phoenix in flight
out of dark and ash it arises for us once again."
Paid it a wonderful tribute. Thank you for the serenity to start my day
Good luck in this contest my friend!
Many blessings Sandi
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Than you Tainted Innocence for this contest and nice comment.
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This is a wonderful poem. The imagery is really fantastic. And the picture you included wasn't bad either ;-) Your word choice is really effective. Your rhythm...great. A wonderful piece :-) Thank you for entering.
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THIS GIVES ONE A WONDERFUL SENSE OF PEACE AND
The days always seem brighter and happier if the sun is shining.
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Thank you for your nice comment too. It's always nice to see old friends are still reading my poetry. I am glad you like it. Thanks for applause.
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excellent
First I really loved the Graphic .It seemed to be a good introduction into the poem. I am sure this is a poem of inspiration to all poets. Liked your flow of words.."It's journey like the eternal phoenix flight. (Beautiful imagery) Thank you for sharing such a talented poem. -
You do such fine work and your English is perfectly used in your poetry that we enjoy so much! A hug for you, today! and a kiss, too, from a pixie sister!
Smooosh!
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No problem. I can accept that you have your own contest rules. Thanks for your good wishes.
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Thank you Di, my dear friend, for your kind words and great support. Actualy I can't be angry when somebody is acting this way. He is young, curious and he want to do something different. Probably he needed a time to collect points for this contest and he want to judge seiruos. He still need a time to accetp himself and the others and when he said that he is not really as mean as he act in this contest I believe this is truth. It is not easy to be young, searcing self-esteem in this pretty cruel world. Also I can see his apologies here and that means that he is on the best way to be to be a nice young man. Also, I am going to read his poetry to see his poteic strenght and expressions.
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your right, i was too harsh, and i thank you for telling me off, im not a total jerk and i will not DQ you...actually you get brownie points for standing up for someone, i relize i can be hurtful...but that's part of my juding...im not really as mean as i act in this contest...i tottally agree with you, and admire your courage in telling me i think im perfect and im a jerk...a long with implying other words i shant say....sonja my deepest apologies if i hurt your feelings, and amazing job overcoming such...disabilities....and your right, you have amazingly vivid descriptions...good job and good luck
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dysgraphia is impaired ability to learn to write, this lady has a lot of courage,time to be more gentle I think my friend,if this gets me DQ'd I don't give a damn, you do not measure your words well and can be very hurtful,she puts her heart and soul behind her poems,take it easy non of us are perfect.except some think they are. all the best, Di
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why dont you write in your first language then?? and whats dysgraphia??
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Good used pictures and vivid descriptions, good rhyme and included picture from the past and myths. All together framed with my love for poetry and my struggle with dyslexia and dysgraphia. Try to suffer from dyslexia and dysgraphia and write a poetry, stories and book at the same time. A lot of blood is included within each line. Also, it takes me much more time to write it because English is not my first language. All that was a great effort for me.
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did you read my rules?? i want to see the hard work, the sweat, and the blood put into this peice...anybody that has put these things into a work can easily speak on and on about why their peice is amazing...that is why i asked you the question and that is a main factor in deciding the winners...you have another chance to answer...what makes your poem amazing??
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BrothaLuv, you do not need to like it but no any rhyme was forced. English is not my language but I know enough to know how to use dictionary. You may try to do the same. It is very usefull. Also is very usefull to read a lot of books about history and all different nations heritage. This is your contest and your right to like or not to like entered poetry. I wish you a lot of great poetry entry
~Sonja~
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