Oh no, here we go again
Me and my best friend
My brown bottle bitch
Like a fuckin nervous twitch
A drink in both fists
and something with a twist
Now this will get me by
One more and I'll be high
Give me another shot
And now I feel so hot
I'm ready for the night
Blurry vision, loss of sight
I'll probably fall down
and I might even drown
I've lost all feeling
My senses sent reeling
Do it one more time
you're the victim of my crime
I didn't mean what I said
It was my alter ego Fred
I think that's his name
He takes all the blame
And now here I sit
Sunken in a pit
My brown bottle bitch
She leaves me in a ditch
When will I learn
This reputation I've earned
I'm headed on a trip
but first another sip
Where'd I leave my smokes
Screw it, have another toke
Where the hell was I going
OK, I'm not all knowing
Sometimes I can forget
Man, I need a cigarette
I wish that I could see
but things don't come so easily
Someday soon I'll find
but right now I'm fuckin blind
My brown bottle bitch
she needs me like an itch
an itch I can't scratch
Jeans that need a patch
It can't be that tragic
It's not like black magic
That isn't what I meant
I only meant to vent
The right to remain silent
You say that I'm too violent
It's you that caused the pain
What did you hope to gain
I was only having fun
You take it on the run
My brown bottle bitch
she goes down without a hitch
and leaves me feeling hazy
and like I'm going crazy
I promise I won't tell
I hope it turns out well
What have you got to lose
It's your right to choose
Pass the bottle here
I won't shed a tear
That's the way it goes
I feel like shit, it shows
Another day of nowhereness
nothing short of emptiness
Give in to that temptation
A different sort of situation
A problem all my own
The seeds have now been sown
My brown bottle bitch
She's caused another glitch.
-Billy the Kid-
Author notes
Option 6. Drugs and Alcohol
A contest entry
- Depressing.... with options by Ntagatf.
500 points, ended September 19, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Any length prewrties excepted...Topic Addiction (Drugs, Liquor, etc.) by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended January 21, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Just Like A Pill by GypsyEyes.
375 points, ended March 12, 2008, 17 entries
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the first couple of lines where just amazing! they just suck you in! great job! thank you for entering and best of luck to you! NineTailedFox
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Been there, done that...so glad it passed...God knows it causes many things in life and many not so good...but at the time we do not care and when we do we normally can't remember what we did to care about...nice form and flow...a deep write of truth here...
Thank you for entering!
mystic -
It's certainly a situation I can relate to. The form reminds me of one of those head banging rap songs. Nothing real fancy but it delivers the message to those who care to listen to the lyrics.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Good write here
Yes sometimes in our enjoyment we within ourselves not knowing whats going on outside . Its a form of new age insanity at its best
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well done
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Wow
I really know that feeling, its bad to get stuck on that path, but you did an awesome job in writing about it, I wish you the best of luck in my contest! Thanks for entering! This is truly an amazing job! I have been there and haven't been able to place all into words!
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interesting
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wow.. i love it! the repition is amazing and you just did a fantastic job! wow..
thanks for entering 
Abused
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This was a real gooden Billy the kid!!! The rhyming was effortless and flowing and the thought expressed well; the repetitive style works well too! Good luck in this contest my friend!
Sarah Louise Hudson
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Great piece, the rhythm and rhyme were well done as was the feel and flow. Loved the thoughts expressed and emotion. Great write. Keep your pen forever flowing!
Bunny
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LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this is great!!!!!!! love the flow, love the rhyme and just the whole damn piece!!!!!!
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Many poems that rhyme, and are a little lengthy usually sound forced, but this one does not strike me as being that way. Good luck in the contest, I like this piece and hope to see more from you soon.
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Dang this is really good! Flowed great...real smoooooth. You described the feelings very well. Very good job on this. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing. Jeannie D Hunter
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wow this was powerful. the rhyming didn't seem too forced, which is what I usually fear. Well done.
Good luck.
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