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Sinful Eyes

 




Piercing raven eyes


Set blazing carnal flames forth


Freeing sinful wants





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To Master Blaze with all my love
Written June 17th, 2006

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 1, 2008

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    Sometimes freeing those wants ingites a fire we cannot control. I think I shall keep mine bottled and save the world Great one.


  • shubs
    June 21, 2006
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    A perfect trilogy of great emotions and feelings and the exigencies of sinful wants being freed by a vision of intensity is well done over here Shubs


  • Desire gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    Mesmerizing Piece

    Beautiful write Bel~~ Love how you did the picture...
    Framed~Raven Eyes
    Short and sweeeeeeeet write!

    ~I need to pick your brain on how to make a black border~

    Thank you for sharing this piece sweetness!
    Look forward to reading more of course

    Many blessings to YOU always!
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Tatianna Valcor
    June 18, 2006
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    Such love and devotion felt in those few words. I love it and I think you are wonderful poetess! Great job and I am sure he loves it as well. Such pretty blue eyes!


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    they are not sinful but they are mesmerizing.... steel on warm chocolate.... loloolol


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 17, 2006
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    Short, sweet, and very sexy! I'm sure Blaze loved this, sister girl! Way to go!


  • honey bear
    June 17, 2006
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    wonderfull

    a lovely write my friend (dont normaly go for the blue eyes myself but wow! its THOSE eyes isnt it ? )
    good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing this with us


  • MisJudged
    June 17, 2006
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    Awesome write. I like it a lot.
    Keep up the good work.
    xox
    MisJudged


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    June 17, 2006
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    A very expressive and passionate write. thank you for this entry and good luck in my contest... x LB


  • wtchr
    June 17, 2006
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    Personally I GIVE points for the correct syllable count. I think the poem is very expressive, carries out the thought process and is complete. You've said a lot and implied so much more in a very short span. Great job!


  • Hellsfire02
    June 17, 2006
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    Great haiku! Good description of the eyes, I wouldn't have classed them as sinful personally but I still like it =) It says as much as it needs to. Keep penning these great Haiku's!

    ~marie lee
    xxx


  • linx20
    June 17, 2006
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    Nice

    I liked it. It says more than the length it has.


  • Gwenevere
    June 17, 2006
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    Don't agree.I think the words are simply perfect.Has anyone said that his eyes are so like Mel Gibsons?MMMMM!!! Stop dreaming Ros.Anyway back to the poem.Your love for your man shines through.well done, Ros

  • counterclockwise
    June 17, 2006
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    I like the idea of it, but I dislike that it relies in present participles (words that end with ING. Maybe you could work with it a little more and use those wasted syllables. Also, the words blazing and flames are redundant.

    Raven eyes pierce
    ignite carnal flames
    unleash sinful desires.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    June 17, 2006
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    thank you My lioness but they are not sinful hehehe they are internal expressions of desire I like the thought of My eyes hypnotizing you >
    Love,
    Your Master

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