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There once was a war between two countries.
It doesn’t matter which countries they were.
A war is a war is a war with few differences
And in time, the details fade away to a blur.

 

As the story goes, these two warring nations
Had to meet on another kind of battleground,
But not to kill - to play a game called Soccer
For the World Cup had again rolled around.

 

Both teams’ players were very young and naïve.
Most didn’t even know what the war was about.
All they wanted to do was perfect their skills.
Their only desire was to play the game all-out.

Maybe it was their simplicity and innocence
That caused the events on that amazing day.
They were athletes, not politicians or soldiers
And like all athletes, they just wanted to play.

But that's not how the rest of the world saw it.
To them, the players represented much more.
A victory for them was victory for their country 
And symbolized which side would win the war.

The day of the battle drew nearer and nearer.
The hostilities mounted and the hatred grew. 
Some people even sent threats to the players -
"Don't you lose that game, whatever you do." 
  
Emotions were high on the day of the match.
Not one seat was left unfilled in the stands
Both sides were dressed in their team colors
And flags waved proudly in everyone's hands.

There were terrible fights in the parking lot.
The riot control brigade was out in full force.
The hooligans threw rocks, bottles and darts. 
Fanaticism had robbed them of any remorse.
 
The players took the field amid the madness.
The stadium exploded with boos and cheers.
The patriots on both sides felt well justified
In attacking the boys with insults and jeers.
 
A bottle struck one of the players in the face
Before the game had even gotten underway.
The crowd erupted and more cops came in
With paddy wagons to take the unruly away.

The presence of so many men and weapons
Was enough to quell any further aggression
And the hooligans begrudgingly acquiesced,
Settling for less violent forms of expression.

Each of the players then took their positions,
Assessing each other with determined stares.
The weight of a country on each of their backs
As they whispered fervent, last minute prayers.

They prayed for a swift victory over their enemies.
They prayed they would make their country proud.
The whistle sounded and the charge was declared.
A deafening clamor spewed forth from the crowd.

The game was as reckless and angry as the war.
The pressure to please their fans was immense.
Disgrace and dishonor was certain for the losers
So each was determined to win at any expense.

A leg was broken within the first fifteen minutes.
One player lost a tooth but went ahead, anyway.
The refs were running out of yellow and red cards.
The game had become a ruthless, back alley fray.

The fans were hard enough to control when sober
But by halftime, the alcohol started to take effect.
The police became overwhelmed and outnumbered
And allowed fights in the stands to rage unchecked.

To make matters worse, a bitter rain started falling.
Bloodied and battered, the players grimly fought on.
It resembled a clash between two Medieval armies.
The attrition continued.  Three more men were gone.

The score was tied two to two in the final minute.
The crowd was rabid, blinded by hatred and fear.
The players, exhausted, struggled to keep going.
This was a military skirmish, and no less severe.

The score was still even when the clock ran out.
Extra time was called and the whistle rang again.
Their bodies battered, it became a battle of wills.
Each side scored; it was three to three at the end.

The coaches selected their boys for a shoot-out.
It was easy.  Only a few were still able to stand.
With steely resolve, the star player took his shot.
The ball slipped narrowly past the goalie's hand.

Right up to the end, the drama never diminished.
It was the most glorious soccer game of all time.
But how it ended is what this story is really about
And it's what takes this tale from good to sublime.

Through all the madness of unbridled competition
Fueled by millions of chanting countrymen's pride,
The players realized, even in the midst of the war,
That they were no different at all on the inside.

Their skin color, language and flags were different.
They each heard the chants and screams for blood.
But soldiers share a bond that civilians can't know
Who are far from the fight in the dirt and the mud.

The victorious team was jumping with joy and relief
But the star player who had scored the winning goal
Couldn't seem to celebrate along with his teammates.
Something disturbing and profound stirred in his soul.

He had started the game with only winning in mind
And he'd heard terrible things about the other team.
Everyone had told him, "Those people aren't like us.
They're pure evil, no matter how normal they seem."

But he had seen no evil as he played alongside them.
He just saw other young men trying to win, like him.
He looked up at the stadium, full of his cheering fans
But it didn't seem glorious.  It seemed bitter and grim.

He looked over at the goalie who had missed the save.
He was kneeling on one knee, his face hidden in shame.
He walked away from the crowd across the field to him.
He looked back and the rest of his team did the same.

He touched the man's shoulder and helped him stand up,
Then he whispered something to him nobody could hear.
The goalie smiled slightly, shook his hand and nodded,
Then walked away to his team who were gathering near.

The star player led his teammates to the center of the field.
The other team kneeled with them and they all joined hands.
The crowd fell silent, confused about what they were seeing.
Then he asked, "Please pray for peace between our lands."

Many screamed in anger and stormed out of the arena;
Others stood watching, unsure of what they should do;
A few brave souls bowed their heads and started to pray;
But it was a different stadium when they all were through.

The star player stood up when the silent prayer was over
And said, "There's an old saying - 'Let peace begin with me.'
Well, I invite you all to come down and meet your enemy.
Let peace begin here and maybe the politicians will see."

And one by one, the fans, who were so full of hatred before,
Started winding their way through the stands to the grass
And people who were supposed to have nothing in common
Were able to forgive and forget the old, stubborn impasse.

The story made headlines around the world the next day
But the war continued on until it finally burned itself out.
Nobody knows if that prayer made any actual difference.
Hatred often burns higher than the faith of the devout.

But the people who prayed that day were changed forever
For they learned the greatest lesson that any one of us can -
That despite all the commotion on the tossed, angry surface,
We're all one human family; we're all a brotherhood of man.

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  • AusStar gold member
    June 23

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    Great poem Mark and very looooong, you know I have a touch of the ADD, but I didn't even notice it in this one, I was mesmerized from beginning to end, what a wonderful message, my dad has told me some true stories along this vein which have always inspired me.

  • Destiny Fate
    September 23, 2007

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    It would be to goood to be true for one day something like this would come true. Not even great tradgedy brings us close anymore. If anything I feel like it puts a little hatred more than pulling together as a team or community. One always wanting tohave someont to lay blame on. I should have, you should have, we should have, well the way I see it should have's are not important. Great write.
    Tonya Turner


  • September 2, 2006
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    Beautiful

    This was great- I always look for poems to read that make my hairs stand up and goosebump chills. It was great- I loved the message, and you wrote it well.


  • nichtmich silver member
    June 29, 2006
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    Congrats on the Gold, Mark. You have certainly earned it

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    June 29, 2006
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    Hi Schatzi,

    I think you're right. Thanks for pointing that out. I hope you're doing well.

    Mark

  • nichtmich silver member
    June 29, 2006
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    Original

    Mark, this is a wonderfully imaginative poem. If only our international (or national) problems could be solved in such a way. One question, in the 14th stanza ~ "Disgrace and dishonor was...", should that be ~ Disgrace and dishonor were?
    Like the rhyme and flow throughout the poem. Best wishes in the contest.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    You actually saw them filming? Wow. That's a real slice of Americana you had a part in. The DVD's are pretty cool. There's a "commentary" track you can activate where Tom and Delores stroll down memory lane through all four of the movies, telling stories about the actors, locations, etc., and how all the strings they pulled to film on such low budgets. Of course, this requires watching all four movies twice for a combined 16 hours! I like B movies but that's pushing it even for me.

    Re. hoodoo, etc., I'm a little too practical and cynical to fit the California stereotype. I don't believe in much, though I don't discredit the idea of "energy" or God. I think having a firm opinion either way is equally ignorant, if you know what I mean. I'd rather just say I don't know and swim in the mystery of it all.

    Sorry to hear you're going to be leaving ol' AP. Is there no chance of staying on as a free member? Anyway, feel free to get in touch with me if and when you're in L.A. and we'll hang out. I'm in the book under the same name.

    Take care,

    Mark

  • AgeofAquarius
    June 19, 2006
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    Excellente Muchacho

    Funny you should mention gnats, LoL
    As the weather gets warmer here my bro and I are finding theres more sand fleas and gnats on one of these 10 acres than there is in all of Florida. Tanatulas and scorpions are on the state flag...lol

    I hear ya about being too long, thats like the HTML coding here that I know youve done on your page but it waaaay too much trouble for me in writing for cathartic purposes. I designed and did the whole enchilada on a webpage for Joyce at angellighthealing.net if you'd like to take a look. She's a hoodoo juju in a California style medicine....LoL
    Im joking I dont discount it mind you, just not my cupa tea for reality, Im sure it works for some and DEFINITELY a rage on the west coast ..
    Yepp,,I'm ending my subscription here, whittled down to 40 poems that say the most about my journey and experience. But we'll keep in touch!!
    SOmeday I'll get back out that way Mark where the West is the Best and we'll hafta do a starbux or microbrew.

    Youre one of my favs on here brotha, ya drink yur java drama free 4 the most part..

    PS: The second Billy Jack was shot on location in a lil town called Chandler in AZ. I was there.. Weird Karma huh..


  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    lol - that is so funny you should say that because there's kind of a Billy Jack theme going on in my life right now. I ordered all four of the Billy Jack movies online - The Born Losers, Billy Jack, The Trial of Billy Jack and Billy Jack Goes to Washington. They were the movies that first made me want to get into martial arts when I was a kid. I was watching them a few days ago then went to a party that night. A started playing guitar with a friend at the party and he broke into One Tin Soldier. Talk about a coincidence. Now you mentioned it, too. What's going on around here? (Insert Twilight Zone music here.) haha

    Glad you liked it. As you know, I love long, story poems so I had a hoot writing this one. Of course, I have received the usual complaint of "this is too long!" haha I always say to people who make that complaint that their attention span is too short. That got me to thinking about the expression of people having "the attention span of a gnat" and how unfair that is to gnats because, actually, gnats have pretty good attention spans. Have you ever been tormented by gnats trying to get into your ears while you're out hiking? They can be very persistent. Thus, they have long attention spans. Maybe I should start writing poems for gnats.

    Thanks for taking the time. Hope you're doing well.

    Mark

  • AgeofAquarius
    June 19, 2006
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    W rite ON!

    Great write Mark..I heard one tin soldier in the background as I read down in expectation of the ending...

    So simple and yet such a complicated lesson to learn..

  • haikumonk gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    Mark... can you kindly put this into a haiku? I'm ADD.... lol Good luck with the contest.


  • heismysong silver member
    June 17, 2006
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    HHMMMMmmmm... "Let peace begin with me"- I've never heard that statement before. That's a good statement.

    It's interchangeable, too- "Let love begin with me"..."Let humility begin with me"... Man, you could do alot with that... "Let forgiveness begin with me."

    Those statements really just confirm the necessity for personal responsibility in things.

    That's definitely a quote for my little notebook! (I always carry around a big red "Jesus" bag with me, which has all my "little necessities" inside it, including a little fat notebook, to write down poems in, or good quotes or thoughts- it's my brain on paper. )

    Strangely enough, Mark, I can't say I agree with the entire poem (-and I'm not going to tell you why, even if you ask!), but there were some parts I could appreciate, that one little line being the best part.

    Nicely done.
    Edited on Jun 17, 5:00 p.m. because 'forgot a little something'.

  • Tam gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    GOLDEN

    Great write! Thank you for putting this as a feature. I love stories within poetry and with an uplifting message. I wish I could find more like this. I will look at more of your writing. I really like your style/meaning here. Blessings! Tammy

  • hoodoolover silver member
    June 17, 2006
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    This is an incredible write, one that we can all learn from, it literally gave me the chills, thanks for sharing this awesome piece!

  • SpiritMother gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    Wouldn't it be wonderful if all the people in the world had the undertanding of what the word Wisdom really means! Your words of Wisdom hidden in the words of this poem is a rare find, indeed...Please continue to educate those of us who look for guidance in all things!
  • luvdrkchocolate
    June 17, 2006
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    Well now! That's quite the story that you have played out here! But I like it! It sounds like you were basing it off of something real that actually happened. But I didn't see it said in your author notes so I guess I'm not so sure. But even if it isn't it would just be too bad because that would be the most wonderful show of humanity! If there weren't more such acts in the world, we'd probably be doing better. But even if that player only changed one other persons mind, don't you think that makes a difference? Like a domino, you push one over and other's will start to fall. It may not make a difference you can see but still it's there. You really got me thinking! I think you did a wonderful job of expressing yourself! So thanks for featuring this so that we all had a chance to share your words and feelings with you!

  • Puppydog gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    A TRULY BEAUTIFUL STORY.

    This is a fantastic story one that everyone should read and take to heart.

  • real irish rose
    June 17, 2006
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    If only this would happen in reality then the world would be a better place to live in and also to raise our children in.
    I do not watch football I have no interest in it, but I understand why people support their teams.
    This is well written and indeed a pleasure to read xxx

  • NoWayJo
    June 17, 2006
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    I'm not a soccer fan nor follower of the World Cup myself, Mark, so I can only applaud the star player and you for this poem. So much of politics and issues seem underwritten into EVERYTHING nowadays, and it's not to escape those issues...but only to understand that the ultimate "goal" is peace--(Pardon the pun).

    Your poetry, your writing always provokes such thought as to stay with a reader long after the reading, Mark. This poem is no exception.

    Best wishes always...

    Jo
  • Revwilliamfoos
    June 17, 2006
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    go Brasil. land of the now partial rain forest
    go Brasil. land of beautiful love
    May God Bless the World Cup
    love the papa

  • EyeRaven
    June 17, 2006
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    despite of the simplicity, which is well-noticed through the poem, the point and the imagery struck me and i was overwhelmed, normally i'd look for more, concised and form work, but nevertheless, a good poem is a good poem afterall,
    however, i would say that you have a narrator's tongue, which would work best in a storyline rather than apoem,
    anyway, your poem just scored.
    good work
  • FaithfulDreamer
    June 17, 2006
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    This is really nicely written. I love soccer Some of your words were really well chosen. They added power to the story.
  • Only My Words
    June 17, 2006
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    good poem that reflects how political issues come to play on many levels. not that they belong there as stated in this poem.
    very thoughtful writing.

  • deercatcher
    June 17, 2006
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    Crap! I dont wanna read all that!
    @.@
    /vvv\
    \^^^/

    From my daughter. Ha!

    I see and respect the man in the arena. I am most wounded by those who complain of the mud on me when I have struggled in the muck to try to save someone else...
    Edited on Jun 17, 10:11 because ''.

  • Millie Music
    June 17, 2006
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    awesome

    This was a very nice write!!
    You have an amazing talent
    this poem/story is so factual
    and still goes on today and has for many a year
    you have put it all so beautifuly
    and i loved it very much
    i wish you well
    and hope you have a nice day
    Love Millie

  • Dienush Greeters member
    June 17, 2006
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    It's sad that there's politics even in sports... but then again, the message in this is really uplifting and inspirational. Is this a true story? Anyway, I like the way you worded this too, and you must have had a lot of patience to write it

    ~Diana

  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    excellent

    a wonderful write, the story was engaging and though long, it kept me reading to discover what happened and how you were going to end it...Nice job with the rhyming and flow. I love poems that tell stories such as this, especially those that rhyme. Overall, a thoroughly enjoyable piece with a wonderful message as well.
    Rory
  • xblackxrosesx92x
    June 17, 2006
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    very well written...full of imagery...good job...keep up the good work

  • Perhaps
    June 17, 2006
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    Love soccer- like the poem, how you made it into a very serious thing- but it's a fun game too

  • Ankeeta silver member
    June 17, 2006
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    whew! finally completed lol! ... to be a game with the serious issue. Good thought
    xoxo

  • lencio-sunchild gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    Mark, this is wonderful and true. I laughed at your bracketted text lol! , Goa is a place where we love football, and people there are crazy about the world cup, not sure if it was the Portuguese influence. Enough of this deviated talk, but your poem took me back there. Thanks for bringing to light what we dont see beneath the surface of this most wonderful sport in the world!

    Love and light,
    Lencio

  • Invisible Comfort
    June 17, 2006
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    Mark you made me cry! However I've just woken up at am over sensitive lol. Fantastic as usual and point clearly made

    Susan x

  • City-of-Angels
    June 17, 2006
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    awesome

    It was truelly wonderful. To me the legth didnt matter I was hooked on it when I started reading it lol. The only thing I didnt like about it is that it ended lol. I didn't want to stop reading lol. Great work truely great!

  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    a must read A+

    Mark, once again you managed to bring social conscience to us in your own unique way. And the world evil or evil-doers as our President referred to an entire nation came to mind when i read this. And now I can't help but wonder about something that is impossible to do----but it would be interesting to see what would happen. A Human chain across the entire world ( every known and unknown little country....holding hands and looking into each others eyes. Would we see mirror images of ourselves reflected?Would we recognize the humanity in each and everyone of us? Would we lay down our weapons , kneel down and pray ( each one to our individual Gods) ? Would we walk away in friendship and Peace?
    Urghhhhhhh.....just like you , I think sometimes I am too much of an idealist..........excellent metaphor you used for what you really wanted to say
    much love and admiration,
    xoxoxo
    reenie

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    Hi Yvette,

    So nice to hear from you. Thank you for your kindness. Your interpretation was exactly what I was hoping for as I wrote it. The "re mark able" bit gave me a laugh, too.

    Glad to see you back. I'm off to your pages to see what's new! Have a great weekend.

    Mark
  • Yvette Champ
    June 17, 2006
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    Dear Mark,this is very well written.Each point made is salient.The imagery and emotion within are powerful and tied together by a moral,akin to a modern day aesop's fable."Let peace begin with me" If everyman held that thought within his heart then indeed there would be peace on earth.I like the way you have used the football match as an arena for war,with the World Cup on many people's mind's this is a clever way to imbue truism without lecturing.Communication is the key to man understanding man and you have an inate ability to write an article or poem that has a voice that needs to be heard and understood and you do it by showing not telling,remarkable,I shall think of you as that Re Mark Able ,from now on.I am heartened by this write.I haven't critiqued for a couple of days for good reasons and am glad this was my first foray back into creativity.Well done,well worthy round of applause,love and light,Yvette

  • Janice M Pickett gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    Absolutely RIGHT my friend. This is so true. I like the build up to your conclusion but found it a little long. I need get through it though because i really liked your story. It was atrue refection of what has happeneed to SPORT..Something which is supposed to be FUN>

    Jan

  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    Excellent and well-written!

    Mark this is a wonderful and well-written story you have written here about the human spirit. It's wonderful to read a story like this after all of the hate and wars that go on daily in our world. This is a very inspiring piece and I really enjoyed reading this. Also very moving and sends out a wonderful message that we are all human and when you really get down to it, we are all the same. Thank you for sharing this piece with me!


    Allen0826

  • Martel Noir
    June 17, 2006
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    Worth the read

    Amazing. Filled with imagery. I personely take away two things from it. The amazing amount of importance that society puts on simple games, and the fierce respect and comraderie that can develop between two warring factions.
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