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Moral Bounds

The paper is right
All else is wrong
Unless invisible
Then the paper is gone
Good prevails
As evil is denied
Or is good the true evil
Through the untrained eye
Speech is outward
Thoughts are concealed
But through their actions
Their thoughts are revealed
So if the paper dictates
Whats right and whats wrong
Then our actions no longer voice thought
And all hope is gone...

Author notes

So what do you think?
Written June 17th, 2006

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  • Scaryanne
    March 8
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    powerful

    It is nice to read something worthwhile.. I'm never on this website anymore.


  • MaddCuppyCake
    November 17, 2008

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    wow... this flows amazingly! Very Nicely written and so true some days great write!! <3


  • thearmsofsorrow
    November 7, 2008

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    the flow is amazing
    it rolls of your tounge so well
    nice one
    xx


  • DemonicChanel420
    October 29, 2008

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    Very well written and powerful.
    The wording and flow is really good,
    I love it!
    It has a lot of meaning and all in all,
    This is just a great write!

  • cacklingdragon
    June 17, 2006
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    so sad when people use something as pwerful as a pen and message mediums for anything other than good...

    nicely highlighted


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 17, 2006
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    Great poem. Very
    well written. Good
    message penned
    extremely well.
    It flowed so natural
    and smooth.
    Thank you for sharing.

    Jeannie D Hunter


  • starwing
    June 17, 2006
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    ahh..the deviousness of the press...the power of the pen has lost some of it's luster.... peace and harmony...shzoosy


  • Riddlebird
    June 17, 2006
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    very impressive, and a VERY timely topic, in my opinion. Your emotion flys off the screen, out of the poem in into the readers face, which with a topic like this is what it should do. I am a firm beleiver that anger, when properly channeled and harnessed is good and usefull tool. Your poem is a prime example of the proper use of anger. I especialy like the fact you do not point the figner at anyone. You simply address the problem that needs to be fixed, making people see the problem. Thank you for sharing this poem. I look forward to seeing more.


  • Mr Scott
    June 17, 2006
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    A+

    Wow, I feel honored to be one of the first to comment on this masterpeice. I am a fan of flow, and rhyme, but mainly only when there is an actual coherant message, or entertainment in it.

    Guess what.

    This had it, and it was very dope. I felt like I was lost in a desert of cliches, and trampled to death angst, but this actually re-inspired me to start critiquing more peices. Damn, this was 'really' good, and anyone dropping the usual "Nice writing, keep it up! KTHXBYE" needs a kick to the chin.

    Feel good about it, cause its really good writing.

    KTHXBYE..

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