I noticed you sitting on the
frost covered street bench
watching deceit being played
on the screen of life.
Glancing at people as they
pass blindly, continuing on
with their mundane lives
I know you have no food
to eat, and the bench that
you sit upon is where you
will sleep tonight
I read the sign that you held
it read "will do anything for
dog food."
You sit motionless, frozen and famish
yet are more concerned about your pet.
I commend you, for you have
better values than most.
These selfish people with homes,
careers and money, which they
take for granted, belongs to you.
You are still so young and should have what they
have
They should have
... nothing
Ironic isn't it?
I wish I had the power to change
the script, but I am only a
character like you
Though, I guess you are better
than me, because I too
passed you by.
Author notes
I wrote this about a boy I saw in my hometown
What did you think
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the newer one i though was quiet a bit better but this is till good, something i noticed was that the two poem or other stories were almost the exact same set-up(not that it isn't a bad thing. thanx for entering
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Damn. Damn. That was such a heartwrenching poem. I absolutely loved it. It was emotional, it flowed well, and the line breaks lent to the effect.
You did such an excellent job with this.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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This was really good and I like the truth to it. So many of us just pass by the homeless without a second thought and its so very sad. I have helped some and passed some by, but it feels so much better to help. To write about something so real is what captures my attention. Great job
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Street poetry is my favorite, and I really like this one. I don't know if it really is street or not, since the writing's so formal, but the subject matter's still the same. Those last lines were really amazing. Its one of the best I've read tonight.
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ouch that one has a twisted turn
sad but true
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brilliant tale told so very well, i was trawling through the writes posted and found this gem, drawn in by the title.
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