Silken bedsheets,
Beneath my skin,
My love above me,
Satisfying me within.
Whips and chains,
Confining me,
His gentle touch,
Exciting me.
His soft, hot lips,
Caress my breasts,
His big yet gentle hands,
Grip my hips.
His moist tongue runs,
Along my neck,
I gasp and shiver,
Shaking with pleasure.
Our naked bodies,
Are as one,
Our lust,
Being satisfied,
From one final thrust.
In a moment we are cleansed,
He bites my neck delicately,
As I make a sound out loud,
His body rests against mine,
Our legs intertwined.
Author notes
At the moment I can't get writing erotica out of my system i just have to write it!
Written July 17th, 2006
Gothicflamer36
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First I would let to ask you to please not 5 star my comment, or comment me at all for now. I am trying hard not to find out who anyone is.
WoW what a great read, nice hot !!! little piece.
Tons of passion within each line.
This is a lovely, lovemaking, love poem.
Great job...
Thanks for entering my contest and lots of luck to you.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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This is a soft and sensual write, taking it
slow and steady relishing the moment..good one.
Thank you for your entry and good luck.
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I changed it what do you think? lol
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Cuts right to the chase, but with such style, very sensual in the erotic sense but not too blatant, well composed.
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lol ok i'll try it and see how it looks...if it doesn't look right I'll change it XD
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what if you were to replace it with his hot lips? ooh! *shudder*
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*cheeky look* I do practise it
lol and thankyou for your critic cherche -d -ame Do you have any ideas which word I could use to replace crimson?
~marie lee
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very good
a very sensual write (maybe you should practice it if you cant get it out of your system) thank you for sharing 
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A very sweet, soft and subtle piece of erotica. Your pen flows so effortlessly within this piece. I found i quite enjoyed the tenderness of this piece. The love is surely evident within as well.
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I guess these are those moments when some sound is OK! and it just gave me deep thought as to another write... I was thinking 'and he's going to commit to you for life now, right?' then I think how a lot of guys go for 'quantity', as many girls as possible, while girls may be going for 'quality', which means 'time'... (sorry, there I go imagining again!)
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Very sensual write......and wonderful title I might add.
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And write you must for the feeling so sensual the act so instinctive inasmuch as it drowns the love and lust and the lines themselves moments of ecstasy the event a culmination of the earliest instincts known to mankind and your way with words in the explicit scene depicted is a delicious concoction of sensual love well done Shubs
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i see beauty in this piece
good luck
amazing erotica right here -
Why thankyou *blushes*
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I have re read your poem and I think the changes you have made have made all the difference. Now its FABULOUS
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*giggles* Yeah it sounds better like that...I kinda had a word block when I was writing that part...weird...the one final thrust sounds better aswell hehe. thanks for the comments ^_^
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Great work.
Great write. The blend of kink and plesure is always nice. The excitement doesn't stop until the end. How thee is alway an action of satifaction happening. -
I loved this it was erotic without being smutty. theres just one thing I would change and thats "Our sins being satisfied" for the simple reason that I dont think sex is sinful, two consenting adults doing what floats their boat is a beautiful thing. I would change it to lust or needs or something like that. But that of couse is just my personal point of view. I hope youre not offended.
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great imagery
Great write. awesome imagery, flow and great description. You really have a knack for writing erotica, and if you can't get it out of your head just go with it and let it flow keep up the great work.
night owl
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