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I Hope

I hope that you'll follow some examples
that he has shown you
I already know you're a gentlemen
but thank mom for that (I do)

I'm asking for you
to let people see you stern
but with a laugh in your heart
and smile the next instant plastered
on that beautiful face

No, I'm not talking about your pa
I am talking about mine
Be a gentle dragon slayer
and tell your daughter
"be weary of that ring of fire"

Play sports with the kidlets
toss them in the air
where dreams come true
and Heaven seems only a pinkie tip away

Be everything the real poppa wasn't
be everything you dream of Today
just never lose sight of the darkness
we'll jump right in
as-if it is mearly a pool of summer fun

I can't express the way you'll succeed
I just know you will
without fail you will prevail
because I am going to be
right by your side
through hell and angelic skies
til' I see the wings of Love spread
and fly forever here never Goodbye

(this is for Dan...I know you'll be a great dad and so do you)

I love you,

Lauren

Love and fear.  Everything the father of a family says must inspire one or the other.  ~Joseph Joubert

Author notes

this is for someone I love with my being...
hope y'all enjoy it.
Written June 16th, 2006

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  • Death By Deception
    January 17, 2007
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    I never really checked your site recently. This was sweet hun. And I am sure Dan loved it. And if you are confused as to who this is, IM me. And I'll tell you. This way to keep it a secret. But I did love the poem. Very sweet and sentimental. But that is just you I guess. Keep it up.

    ~Angel


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    June 16, 2006
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    Some really nice fresh ideas and thoughts put together with this poem:
    "Be a gentle dragon slayer
    and tell your daughter
    "be weary of that ring of fire"
    "toss them in the air
    where dreams come true
    and Heaven seems only a pinkie tip away"
    These two examples are perfect examples of freshness I was speaking of.I like the insinuation that dads are allowed to make mistakes...Great job!