Deep in the night,
alone,
under a light followed by haze,
mesmerized with the beauty of reality
I want to make a new step
there, where once my only wish was to glint.
Like the moon, soon I will immerse
my face into the liquid truth
where it will be washed
absorbing
the crystals
of life.
My roots are looking
for the solid land...
It's time to excavate my dream,
to see my seed growing strong,
to build the bridge
over the
torn islands,
to collect my lost parts,
to shine
and be born
again
in the morning,
a genuine new soul.
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Written June 15th, 2006
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Thank you Gaylene for your time to read and comment my work and for applause.
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Sonja, this is such an emotional and heartfelt write. So much imagery you have woven through this piece. It was lovely to read
Gaylene
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this is a beautiful poem that is peaceful and filled with wonderful imagery and it has a great meaning! this poem is powerful in your search to fullfill an inner calling. the picture is also very appropriate for the piece because it shows the literal meaning of it,, and the picture is really pretty ^.^ this poem blew me away
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My Sister has accomplish a piece of poetry th
My Sisrer To read this tell me that you are seeking the roots to find your sisters footstep to follow and learn and to walk with us in the moonlight on the sand and on mother Earth to seek the roots of long ago. The Spirit walk with you and you feel peace and quiet amd relaxing with the wind blowing softly as we three sisters walk together seeking the root for just us three. I think you know who the other sister is! she love you also and we are family in this Ap family but we can also be family outside this world of now today and forever. no bounderies and no way to shut ourselves off from finding peace, You found the inner peace you been seeking.
Sister Can you tell youprayer and most of all your love made my day and Iam in no pain and I feel great. love you sis!
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This is very different from what I am used to from you. It is calm and soothing yet does express some anxiety for renewal. This is a very pretty extension of your own inner beauty. I liked this style very much... but I still like the old style too.
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I loved this anything to do with moonlight is my smile as I look and read such world wide poetry, thank you for putting some light over the distance in water or land, keep sharing..Linda
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You are very wise my dear lady. You caught the point of this verses. We are all like a plants. It's always hard to be replanted to some unknown place. You can read this metaphorical too but I do not need to say that to you.
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This piece is excellent and filled with the most beautiful imagery! I loved your word usage and how you made this piece seem as though the narrator were a plant, for we all plant seeds in life, roots absorbing all that can sustain us throughout the years. Well, this piece was excellent and I enjoyed reading it! The flow was fantastic too. Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing!
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Thank you Udit for your time to read my poetry. This time I had a great battle with my dogged muse because she is somehow addicted to rhyming poetry.
~Sonja~ -
It's mostly hard to collect the peaces from the past. Some of them are lost forever. It's hard to find a new place for roots and to grow up again, fresh and new. Bed things could fade but they are engraved like a scars.
~Sonja~
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This is beautiful! Wonderful picture to go with an equally beautifully written poem. Kudos, my friend.
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INSPIRATIONAL AND VERY BEAUTIFUL
Your words here are a terrific inspiration. One does have to forget the bad things and try their best to make their dreams come true.
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Your good wishes brings to me peaceful evening and another chanse to say thank you my dear prinsess.
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A wonderful piece dear Sonja.
Wish you best luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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I tried to make a new agreement with my muse to work better, and here is a result. I just wonder where this verses came from.
It was always a challenge to be in the same contest with you sis.
Maybe we will have to unite our musses to collaborate.
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Excellent
Wow! You found your muse I see! Wonderful, wonderful! I love it, so profound, such meaning to this piece! Excellent job my friend and sister. This is simply beautiful Sonja. The whole presentation is so calming. I love it, good for you! So glad you decided to enter.
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