I sat here then and thought of times
of a brighter hour and place,
I tried to forget my woes
While the rain swirled 'round my face.
The world was dark in those times
ere I found my path,
I had no power to fight the ways
of my enemy's evil wrath.
But alas! A shining steed broke through!
His rider clad in gold,
I had known him in the past,
Once, in days of old.
He dismounted off his valiant steed,
Drew his sword, and then, said he...
"This time away from you I can not bear,
When you next open your eyes,
I will be there."
And now, as I awake from this sleepless dream,
I look into those eyes so keen,
to learn to love,
to forget the past,
The darkness has left my face at last.
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Written June 15th, 2006
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well i admit itis an interesting poem but theending needs a bit of work.The ending you have orignally i think you could make it a bit longer as well as check on your ryming sceme that needs work.Other wise not bad.
~OG
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