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granules of sand






life's the song of a siren
alluring, deceiving,
and if one isn't careful
it'll slip through fingers
like streaming granules of sand

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Written June 15th, 2006

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  • Arrianna MacEwan
    July 5, 2006
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    very good paragon. i like it.


  • individuality gold member
    June 23, 2006
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    aye it will that, live for every moment, if possible, sleep is good too spill poetic ink and twist me into the wild crazy shape of unfathomable love...


  • SimpleSarcasm
    June 18, 2006
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    Thanks so much for reading, the applause and for being a dear heart.


  • janejainejayne gold member
    June 18, 2006
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    Welcome Words!

    Dear Poet, I try to grab all life has to offer every day. You have not lost your touch! Hooray! You are back! Jane


  • Anthony-
    June 16, 2006
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    Ofcourse. Something I think that we are all faced with on a daily basis. Thanks for placing such a meaningful piece on here for us to see. Tony.


  • TrulyLoothy
    June 16, 2006
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    how right you are


  • Inside and out
    June 15, 2006
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    This is indeed lovely. Your words flow with such truth. It is very thoughtful and thought provoking. Good luck in the contest!


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    June 15, 2006
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    An excellent deeply penned message - great metaphors. Thank you for this entry... x LB


  • SimpleSarcasm
    June 15, 2006
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    Ok pozo, you keep calling me things like genius and I'll be in love! Thanks so much for reading.

  • pozo
    June 15, 2006
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    Seemingly simple but with a lot of depth I liked your simile and use of sibilance Keep writing, this was a short work of genius
    All the best
    Thanks for your critique
    Pozo


  • SimpleSarcasm
    June 15, 2006
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    Thanks so much for reading. Some words I just love to read and hear and the word brilliant is one of them

  • SimpleSarcasm
    June 15, 2006
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    Hi sweetie,
    So glad to be back. Yeah, I agree as we get older the sand gets finer and harder to hold.

    Thanks for reading.


  • Shakari
    June 15, 2006
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    This piece is brilliant! I never thought of such a simile as life being sand! I also loved how you showed life as delicate. I mean, it makes the ego turn to caution, so that we don't accidentally drop the sand and dissipate into the air as dust in the wind. This piece was full of imagery and beyond the simile, it has a metaphor or two, too! Keep up the great work, good luck in the contest, and thanks for sharing this beautiful piece with all of us at AP!


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 15, 2006
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    Wise words, Dee...and as I get older the sands slipping through fingers becomes much more of a reality than before. Good to read this and good to see you writing again!!

    ~ Nicolette

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