It’s like your hearing
But you’re not listening to what I’m saying
I’m tired of this…
Of you
Of everything
I need a break
{me time}
{space, air, freedom
a sky with endless beauty
and sunlight
land that goes for miles
where my screams wont be heard
and my tears can rain like a waterfall in December }
We need an ending
We already have the beginning and middle
When you learn to read between the lines
See what I’m really not saying
Then, that’s when the end comes into play
You hear but you really don’t listen
This is becoming unbearable.
Author notes
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Written June 15th, 2006
A contest entry
- Falling Out of Love by March Muffin.
300 points, ended June 22, 2006, 16 entries
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Wow, this is incredible. I love the style you wrote this in. The enormous breaks in between lines serve you very well. I have one or two suggestions. Obviously, take it or leave it, my style is pretty different from yours. You might want to take out the line "(me time)," I think the wording is really elementary, especially next to that metaphor of tears raining like waterfalls in december (WHOA). But basically, this poem is INCREDIBLE. Thank you for sharing this with me. Good luck. I look forward to reading your other poetry.
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thank you
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Excellent poem
I really loved this poem, the content and the style too. I could feel the emotions running through. I loved the way you were asking a question. Excellent poem
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