The Crow
Pain:
In this moment
you come to feel the hurt...
Your heart breaks,
your body aches.
A chill engulfs your weakened body
as you lay dying...
in a puddle of crimson blood.
Despair:
The fear in your eyes
as you come to realize
that you are going to die.
You ask yourself why
As you close your eyes.
A tear falls across your cheek
as you accept your death.
Agony:
You awaken in a fury.
All at once images of death return.
Scorching what once was your soul.
You question your existance.
Anger flows through your veins.
All that is wrong...
will soon be right.
Death:
Death comes to those who wronged you.
One...by...one.
For each life that they once destroyed,
now it is their turn.
Pain...they do not feel.
Only death.
Victims...aren't we all?
Author notes
Based on my favorite all time movie, The Crow
In a list
A contest entry
- what's your favorite movie by dream5111.
300 points, ended April 16, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Perhaps, Perhaps, Perhaps.... by Wrendered.
318 points, ended April 30, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can movies inspire you?? by A Murderous Lament.
400 points, ended June 11, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I love this poem and this is something I will look into as I love things like this
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thanks for reading this anyway. sorry I couldn't enter it in your contest.
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The rules said 10 lines or less...
I watched this again last night...great movie
♥
whisper
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This was a very lovely write based off the movie ... I think you did a very wonderful job ... And ... your words were powerful with imagery for those who have not yet watched the movie ... thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest ...
Much Love
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Wow, this is great. Amazing.. breathtaking awesome! Omg it's the best poem I've read in a long time and this whole contest. GREAT JOB! I want to see this movie now... I'll prob. rent it tonight lol. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck. Also, thanks for reading the rules Great write!
A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33 -
Very Awe-Inspiring.
I'm impressed with your use of literature when applied to something you love. Thank you for entering such an original piece, and May your pen be blessed!
:Wren:
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"In this moment
you come to feel the hurt...
Your heart breaks,
your body aches.
A chill engulfs your weakened body
as you lay dying...
in a puddle of crimson blood." is my favorite part good luck -
I like your question @ the end
I like how you tied in the movie and Eric's pain into something we can all, in smaller ways, relate to. "Victims...aren't we all?" This movie is a muse for a lot of us. Great piece of work!
*R
-i entered the contest too! It was fun, wasn't it?...to have a contest to enter about an awesome movie like this!!
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This is perfect for my contest.
You wrote this so beautifully. It is so full of emotions, and sadness, just like the movie and the graphic novel. The last stanza is perfect, because it shows how he fought back for the one he loved. Great job. 
Chelsea
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Wow, Ktulu you did a really good job on this poem. As everyone else said you have a really good layout here and the way you wrote it makes it fun to read. Thanks for sharing and entering my contest. Good luck!
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very good
having already commented on this i think you already know that i loved this one , thank you for entering
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Thank you HB for your comment, glad that you liked this one. I appreciate your commenting.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
exelent
oh i just loved this ! it is exelent (agony 2nd line i think you meant to put "all AT once" not "ot")i clicked this first as i have one named the same although no time and thought went into mine so it is no where near the same standard as yours,(if you decide to read it :allpoetry.com/Poem/1997086 ) there is nothing i can say here that others have not already but thank you for sharing this exelent write with us and i look forward to reading more of your work
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thank you for commenting.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Have never seen the Crow but then I dont like the lead actor. This is a good write. Thanks for sharing.
Scribs -
Great Job!! You have always loved this movie. lol
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Yes my love...I do love this movie.....But I love you more.
With all my heart love
~Patrick~
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The Crow--your obsession, i know you love this movie. You have done a great job with this as I read it I could visualze each line. I love you
Elizabeth
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thanks for commenting.
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thank you for your comment. I appreciate it
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Thank you Jamie for your kind words. I always appreciate your comment. Glad that you enjoyed this.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
great work on this masterpiece
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wow. This poem is amazing. It left me breathless. amazing job.
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Unique and creative
I think you did a really great job here, Ktulu. I especially love the layout and presentation of it. I think emphasizing the one word and then following it with a more indepth stanza really stressed the emotions and drew the reader in so that not only were they seeing what the writer was but they were becoming a part of it.
The Crow is such a great story anyway, I always love seeing things on it, I am equally excited to see Aaron's fanfiction about it. Best of luck in this contest, I can tell a lot of thought went into this work.
jamie -
Thank you very much for your comment DP..you are right those are the 4 chapters from the first graphic novel. Good luck with you fanfiction.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
this is good, cause i am thinking about doing a fanfiction on the crow and i think this poem helpped me out a lot, you did a great job on it to, i think those were the chapters in the first series, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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thank you much for your comment. I appreciate it.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
truely amazing piece. I always love reading your works. I think it was the fact that each part was broken up and how each "mini poem" fit it's descripton, that was what i loved so much!
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Thank you very much for your comment. I appreciate it.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Truly coool piece, my friend! All the best to you in the contest!
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Thank you Miss apples for your comment. I appreciate it alot.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
thank you very much for your comment. I also thank you for pointing out my mistake.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Thank you very much for your comment. I appreciate it.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
This is really awesome. I also like how you broke it down like assigning an emotion to each step of how the crow was transformed. Brilliant!
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Interesting peom. I'm not sure I get it, but it still is very interesting.
I only have one quibble. You wrote "You awaken in a furry." Shouldn't it be 'fury'? I got a sudden image of a person waking up after suddenly sprouting thick fur over their body. I doubt that's what you wanted to portray.
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Very expressive. I liked the format and I loved the last line. Very intense. I could feel each of the emotions you listed. Very nice. Good luck in the contest!
lp -
thank you very much for your words..they are very encouraging. I broke it down into the four chapters of the graphic novel. Which is also on my author page. Glad that you liked this. Thank you.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
AWESOME! I love how this is broken down... it made for a extremely powerful read! Best of luck in the contest.. though with pennings such as this, luck is not needed. It should be in the bag
I loved this one!!! Thanks for sharing
Always,
Mel
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thank you very much for commenting. I appreciated it.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
deep
I can feel the pain inside this.
Very nice.
Good Luck,
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That is much better to read!
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Thank you for commenting. Glad that you liked this. Thanks for the suggestion....hows it look now?
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
This is really good Ktulu! I really enjoyed reading this, and the way you have set this up, is great, original. Good luck in this contest, you should take it all the way home. If I may make one minor suggestion, the font is a tad bit hard to read. Tink
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