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Lyrical Combination

This following poem was made up of lyrics from the following bands (taken from many of their songs):

Crossfade
Flyleaf
Three Days Grace
Savage Garden
Slipknot
Trapt
Thousand Foot Krutch
Switchfoot

I arranged them into this:

I never really wanted you to go
I can hardly wait by the time you come home
I'll be there when you need me
When I need you
When I get to you
Getting comfy, getting perfect
I'll be your love
You won't be scared or lonely
You'll be safe here
Take my hand, I give it to you
Take me all the way
It's all because of you
And you create all the feelings that I get
Anytime I need t osee your face
I just close my eyes
I love you and I understand taht
I want you and I need you
Only,
When I stop to think about you
Even when you're here
What a minute with you could do
To put a smile on my face
I want to meet up with you
And show you what I'm thinking
I'll take you anywhere that you want to go
I'm waiting for you
Anytime, you're free to show me how you feel
But I'm gonna take you
I won't let you go
Feel my caress so soft and gentle
So delicate you cry for more
Cuddle up close
Entertwined to perfection
Your kisses are like pearls
Carry on, keep romancing
Move closer, passion stronger
You wanted it so much
So let your body move a little bit closer
I've got a dream to take you over
And we stare each other down
I never wanted anybody more than I wanted you
Be mine, just love me
I want you, I need you, I'll have you
All I need to make it real is one more reason
Hard to say what caught my attention
All I do is live with so much fate
I've waited as my time's elapsed
Everything will change
To get that feeling once again
I want your eyes on me
So come and get me
I've got a feeling inside that I can't seem to control
Now you're out of words
You never know where to begin
Face to face
I want this
I guess I'll save the best for last
Are you ready to take my hand and see?
It's just the state of affection
Hope you never hurt
Hope you never cry
I'll pick you up
Wo'nt let you fall
Listen to my voice
It takes everything I am
Because I want to take you away
I need your breath to stay alive
I'm feeling high and my feet don't touch the ground
You make me feel this way
I love the way you move
I love the way you are
I love the way you twist,
The way you're so mysterious
The way your hands have covered me
Mesmerized and taken in
I want to breathe you in
Don't close your eyes
I'd miss you more than I could know
Why do I love you?
There's a truth I now know
And it's you
I want to lay like this forever.

Author notes

I twisted lyrics, phrases, words from songs by Crossfade, Flyleaf, 3 Days Grace, Savage Garden, Slipknot, Trapt, Thousand Foot Krutch, and Switchfoot to create this piece.
Written June 14th, 2006

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  • Nam
    March 28, 2007

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    "Anytime I need t osee your face" - "t osee" should be "to see"

    "I love you and I understand taht" - "taht" should be "that"

    The basic problem with this cento is that it's too long. And it's line-for-line when perhaps it really shouldn't be.

    At first I was thinking I wouldn't really care for it because there's no originality about it but I got into it and actually considered making it a finalist 'til it got to the point where I thought to myself: Is this ever going to end?

    Way too long. Pieces like this shouldn't be. You repeat basic same lines (worded differently) over and over which doesn't need to be done. I note these aren't really your words but it makes it your piece by arranging them to be something different from what they were and then become your words (in essence).

    It was just too long. If it was a society piece or something of such accord, if it was broken in parts and shown a birth, a life, a death (in perception only) then I could understand the utterable length but you don't present that.

    All this presents is a perception of: want.

    -Nam

  • kla
    July 23, 2006
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    awwwwwwwwww so sweet i love it and u
    ~cody~


  • Fixing Tomorrow
    June 19, 2006
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    Awesome. Wow.. it all just fit together so well. I don't know how you did that. Yay sam!