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Animal Magnestism

The smoke that lingered in the air left my sense dull and slow. I downed the rest of the beer clutched in my cold hand. I was regretting just wearing a shirt – it was cold outside. I staggered back into the massive lounge, eyes pinched closed from the stinging smoke. I saw a guy take a drag from a cigarette and passed it on to a skinny girl. I stopped and watched the couple for a while.

They went through at least a whole packet of cigarettes before he nodded to her and walked off. I stayed, watching her. Something about her drew me in. Her eyes were dark and outlined in eyeliner. Her stick-insect figure held my gaze. Her hair was pink and frizzy, standing out like a mane. She was pale and looked ill and the black around her eyes added to sickly look. Her lips had pink lipstick on them, showing off her pointed face. In her skeletal hand a bottle of vodka was clutched tightly around the neck. She had a short top that was white with a black logo – I was too far away to see what. A black miniskirt was around her hips and looked a size too big for her bony body.

She looked up at me. She held my gaze for a minute, looking intrigued. Then she bit her lip and looked up from her kohl-rimmed eyelashes. I grinned clumsily and headed over to her, putting the empty bottle in my hand down on a passing surface. When I reached her, I took in her face. Pale skin that had almost turned grey. Dark brown eyes. Smudged pink lipstick. Makeup running down her face – I drank it all in hungrily. My mouth turned up into a sneering grin. She looked up at me – not only was she skinny, but she was short as well.

“Can I help you?” she said. Her voice was husky and deep. I felt a laugh in the back of my throat, formed from longing. I just grinned in response, looking more closely at her. The top was a t-shirt that had been cut down to be too small for her. On the front was a faded black skull.

I couldn’t think of words to say to this hypnotic girl. Instead, I shrugged and followed her into the smaller living room. No one else was there. I felt the breath catch in my throat as she sprawled down on the sofa, eyes half closed. I sat beside her, edging slightly closer. She looked up sleepily and grinned. She crossed her legs and leaned towards me. Her breath was hot and damp on my cheek. I felt my heart speed up as I breathed more heavily. Her hand rest on my lower thigh as she giggled, mouth right up by my ear. She laughed a breathy, smoky laugh in my ear. It was wet and warm and felt good.

She smelt of day old perfume, mixed with smoke and sweat. I grabbed her skinny hips and pulled her closer, kissing her roughly. She responded harshly, her breath coming quickly. Sweat dampened the front of her shirt and back as we kissed maniacally, like the world was going to end tomorrow. Her skirt rode up on one leg and she chuckled huskily.

Every pore of her body dripped seduction and I felt lust deep within me. It was growing and spreading to every cell of my body, overpowering me. My vision blurred and I could just smell her sweaty, perfumed scent. I ran my hand down her back and blindly pulled her towards my mouth again.

Our lips locked together and my body screamed at me, crying out with longing. The frantic kissing made my heart pound and the blood rush loudly to my head. She was smiling and every movement she made twisted me more tightly around her little finger. I gasped, gulping in the air when we broke apart. She let out a deep, smoky laugh and lent back on the sofa.

I kissed her neck, feeling her unbuttoning my shirt. I laughed like a drunkard, placing my hand on her flat stomach. She nipped my lip, drawing blood and ran her enchanting fingers through my hair. They roamed my body and snaked back up to my hair, knotting them selves in it.

I drew back and she chewed on the bottom of her lip. The art of being carelessly sexy seemed to come naturally to her – she didn’t have to try to seduce me. She looked up into my eyes with an animal longing, a beast that lurked deep within her, ready to pounce. I grinned, then threw my head back and laughed.

“Bring it on” I muttered to the monster within, mouth spread widely and crudely in a grin.

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you guys decide how it ends haha hope its alright, my love
Written June 14th, 2006

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  • x dark fairie x
    October 11, 2006
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    very nice... kinda random but cool. the original setting reminded me of the guildhall tavern - lol. this piece itself was intising and well paced good imagery and the slight erotic worked quite well. maybe its a good job you stopped where you did or all the guys reading would have a big problem hee hee. nice work, well done -x-x-x-


  • tragedienne
    June 16, 2006
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    That was great, really hot. The girl you're describing looks a lot like someone I know so it was even more fun to read this. lol
    Now.... where's more?


  • Faithless Angel
    June 15, 2006
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    wow! this was really good!!!! omg im all hot now.. dude your stories are amazing!! this one especially, u have a nack for writing these stories, keep it up coz it rawks!
    kerri x


  • BlooQKazoo
    June 15, 2006
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    aw thankyou honey! yeah, this was a fresh write, so its allllll for you!! haha
    polly
    xxxxxxx


  • stop drop and roll
    June 14, 2006
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    Wow! I don't know if this is a prewrite or if the comment at the end was for me, but it was powerful! damn! lol you should read "Rose of no man's land" by Michelle tea. The main character rose is a lot like the girl you wrote about. I never would have guessed you would have written this so the element of surprise adds to the interest of the story.


    ~Great write!


    ~Daina


  • Twisted--Rose
    June 14, 2006
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    Oo this is really good!
    I wouldn't want to suggest an ending, cos it would probably be crap... =p

    Anway, I really like this. It is quite tense, and your description of the girl is really good as well.

    Good write again pol!
    Love from lilioo!
    <3333 xxxxXxxxx
    Edited on Jun 14, 1:11 p.m. because ''.

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