A thousand time my loved ones dead,
A thousand curses on my head,
A thousand lives I could have led,
A thousand dreams inside my head,
Welcome to my nightmare.....
Author notes
Im not sure, it seems like there should be more.... what do you think?
(option 2: titles)
Written June 14th, 2006
A contest entry
- Silentium, Blood and Carpe Noctem by .
350 points, ended June 17, 2006, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Pretty cool. I like the pause before the last line... and find myself wanting to know more.
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Short but to the point. It does, like Master Warious said, a potential to wow people if you go further into detail. And yet, I think that one of the charming things about it is the fact it is so short and frank. Thank you so much for entering the contest, and keep the ink flowing!
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heh, thanks very much...
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Good job
It's kind of in your face scary thoughts kind of thing.
You do get the picture in the short amount of lines you used though.
It really is up to you if you want to elongate and go further into detail with your poem though.
I think its good the way it is. But it still has the potential to wow people if you go further into detail.
Good luck in the contest ^_^
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