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It's Been Too Long!

It’s very late or maybe early

Depending on your point of view

The sun and moon have long since passed

Another day will begin anew


In the tree beyond my window pane

A mocking bird sings to the dark

He doesn’t seem to care one bit

Of the sleepiest night I mark


But sleep will come as it always does

At odd times during the day

When the rest of the world moves about

In its own relentless way
 

I love to work late at night

When everyone is sound asleep

No interruptions to block my mind

As across the page I creep


It has been too long since a single word

Marched across this page of mine

And I suddenly find I’ve come to the end

Of a poem… It’s about damn time…

Author notes

It has been almost a year and a half since I last wrote a new poem. I guess it is about time I got back to work...
Written June 14th, 2006

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  • donnz
    February 1

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    Identified

    I too, haven't written NEW stuff since longago.
    so...I've been re-submitting my oldies.
    ( there is too much emphasis on daily blog posts )

  • Just4u
    January 12, 2007

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    lol

    I've never had writer's block but there have been times when I just didn't feel like writing, kinda like, what's the point, yahknow...
    The hours between midnight and 2AM used to be my fav for doing things back when I was in school. Make for a short night, but then I never did value book education much, though I used to get good grades. It's too bad we we're able to study what we really would have liked too back then, but then hell, we didn't even have a car for driver's education class because the school couldn't afford one...lol...just sit in your desk and pretend
    one was there...
    I'll probably be doing my reading late now as have moved to second shift, so still pretty wound up when
    I get off at 11pm.

    Was nice reading you again

    -Eddy


  • Sagittarius silver member
    September 7, 2006
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    Me too Pat and I think you've just given me reason to start over. love your work, then and now, so lets get started.

    Sag

  • StrmDncr
    June 19, 2006
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    Jeannie, thank you for stopping by. Yes, I have been here a while.. Hopefully I'll be here more often and writing as well. Welcome to AP. I hope you enjoy your stay..
    Hugs & Laughter
    Pat


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    Wow that is a long time, but the poem is great! Great visuals. Your words flowed beautifully. Everyone seems to know you, and I am kinda new, but would like too! Thank you for sharing. Jeannie D Hunter

  • StrmDncr
    June 19, 2006
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    One can only hope... LOL I'll do my best to knock out a piece or two.
    Thank you for all your support.
    Hugs & Laughter
    Pat


  • catz Moderators member
    June 19, 2006
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    Lol... yes, girly, it's about damn time !!!! And this one is not a bad comeback In fact it's very cool. I, for one, am glad to see that you've started writing again. You already know I've missed your wonderful poetry, and now to be working with you on our project is fabulous.

    I'll be on the lookout for more from you, and very soon, I hope

    Love and
    Dee

  • StrmDncr
    June 16, 2006
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    Hi Izzi... I want to thank you for taking the time to leave me a comment well worth reading. As I stated before this was not one of my best works. After the death of my good friend and writing partner I found it very hard to put pen to paper, so to speak. With this poem I was able to actually finish a piece and that was all that mattered to me at the time. Since I was able to get over the hump I'll be able to get back to my usual standard of work. Which is a LOT better than this.
    I invite you to stop by and read one of my older pieces. It will give you an idea of the type of work I prefer.
    allpoetry.com/poem/145954
    Again, thank you.

    Hugs & Laughter
    Pat
    Edited on Jun 19, 4:37 p.m. because ''.

  • StrmDncr
    June 16, 2006
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    Ah... so many comments and so little time. Oh well... I have found that people will see what they want to see. To those who have never read my work they see a poem that needs work. WHat they don't see is a poet fighting to get back into her groove. I know the poem is off and not up to my usual standards but I managed to finish it and to me that is all the matters at this point. Now I have to get busy making it better. Sometimes you have to dig through the mud to find the real gems...

    Thanks for your comments, I see I have a real fan... Hugs..
    And you are most welcome for the flowers. They are from my backyard.

    Hugs and Laughter....
    Pat
    P.S.
    Send some of that paste over here...


  • adios muchachos gold member
    June 15, 2006
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    Grrrreat!

    It is sad that most of the people commentinig here will never venture to your pages to see some of the most incredible poetry construction on this or any other site!

    If you read this and haven't, do! No regrets, guaranteed!

    Got to get going Pat. Just cooked spaghetti and italian sausages for the whole loading dock! Got to do the dishes now.

    Love ya, and welcome back, Pat...................John

    PS> Thanks for the Fleur mon ami!


  • miss stephi
    June 15, 2006
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    fantastic

    Wow your poem is simpley amazing I must say. I loved it. Please do keep writing I would love to read more of your poetry. =)
    Well take care,
    Steph. <3


  • Ladybug
    June 14, 2006
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    hey Pat, good to see your charm on paper again....
    welcome home
    now get busy girl

    Tamara

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    June 14, 2006
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    Wow, you're back, fantastic.

    We've missed you more than you know, wonderful to see new words across your page.

    You're much loved my dear.

    Great poem, keep em coming

    Karen


  • adios muchachos gold member
    June 14, 2006
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    Not bad after being parked in the garage a ye

    Sounds pretty good after being parked for a year and a half!

    John
    Edited on Jun 15, 10:57 p.m. because 'sp'.

  • ThouShaltNotDefend
    June 14, 2006
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    good job i liked this poem keepwriting

  • poet on skis
    June 14, 2006
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    A year and a half is a long time to not write and a long time to get rusty. May i sugest that if you have trouble getting things to sound just write check your rhyme scheme and your rhythem. Is it ABBA or ABAB or something eles? As for rhythem try writing the poem then count syllables if its a little off and you don't want to change it then don't as long as it still flows. I never go by the rule never compromise your message for rhyme or rhythem. As for this pome i think you did a rather nice job. I like how you condesed your year and a half into one night of trying so very hard to write something good. excellent come back


  • blakdiamone
    June 14, 2006
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    It's about damn good!

    Ah, I like this. I really like this. And you say it's not your best huh? I really liked your style of rhyme but i feel like you could also rhyme within the lines instead of every other line.


  • LonesomeAngel
    June 14, 2006
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    fresh

    This is a wonderful poem, and i enjoyed reading this piece emensly! So new and fresh and i really adored the ending.
    Great job writing this piece and bravo for getting over your blockage so now we can all enjoy reading more of your work.
    keep on doing your thing.
    night owl


  • StarEyes
    June 14, 2006
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    I love the ending!!!!!! very well done!!!!!! this is great!


  • tinuelena
    June 14, 2006
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    Wow, a year and a half without writing? I couldn't imagine. Well, welcome back to the written word, and congratulations on resuming your poet status.

    As for the poem, I have a little constructive criticism for you. I find that rhyming poems are most effective when the rhythm and meter are dead on. So refine your first verse and model the rest of the poem after that verse. Let's take a look... and if I may, I'm going to take the liberty of changing the word 'begin' to 'start.'

    'It’s very late or maybe early
    Depending on your point of view
    The sun and moon have long since passed
    Another day will start anew'

    My steps for defining a verse are these:

    1.) Count syllables
    2.) Figure out the rhyme scheme
    3.) Discover your meter

    Let's start with counting syllables.

    It’s very late or maybe early (9)
    Depending on your point of view (8)
    The sun and moon have long since passed (8)
    Another day will start anew (8)

    Then, figure out the rhyme scheme...

    It’s very late or maybe early
    Depending on your point of view
    The sun and moon have long since passed
    Another day will start anew

    So, ABCB.

    Third, discover your meter... (- stands for an unstressed syllable, / stands for a stressed syllable)

    It’s very late or maybe early
    -/-/-/-/-
    Depending on your point of view
    -/-/-/-/
    The sun and moon have long since passed
    -/-/-/-/
    Another day will start anew
    -/-/-/-/

    Armed with this information, you can model the rest of your verses to fit this pattern.

    Hope I helped... if you're confused or have questions, don't hesitate to IM me!

    Elizabeth


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    June 14, 2006
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    Well congratulations and welcome back!
    It's great that you are writing again. It can be very frustrating sometimes to complete a poem. But, once you do your world starts spinning again!
    Best wishes and keep up the great work! Thanks for sharing this with me!


    Allen0826


  • angelica silver member
    June 14, 2006
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    Welcome back Pat

    Hey Pat, OHHH it's wonderful to see you writing again, I was sooo happy when I looked and there it was..A NEW POEM..
    awww, it's wonderful and you're right, it is about time you got back to work and started writing again.

    Love Joan


  • Riddlebird
    June 14, 2006
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    First let me say grats on giving the block the boot.
    Now, I really like this piece. I find the topic of poetry and writing itself to be one of the hardest things to try to write about. I am not sure why that is, or if it is just me or a general rule, but I do know that I have great respect for those that can and do write about them.


  • RevHead
    June 14, 2006
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    very well written, really liked it, I could really picture that very nice


  • Kal.
    June 14, 2006
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    REAL instense block over there my fellow poet! well as for the poem, you've described it very well. Shows how tough it has been. I liked the last final lines, and I know it was a serious poem, it gave me a smile with the " It’s about damn time "
    A great write, and I hope your block is gone, so you can bring us more poetic writes!

    Btw, nice background

    Cheers

  • StrmDncr
    June 14, 2006
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    Thank You... It's not my best but you gotta start somewhere...

    Hugs & Laughter
    Pat


  • The.Stars.Go.Blue
    June 14, 2006
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    AH, we all have those moments of intense blocks. I had one that lasted 6 months, and that nearly killed me. I can only imagine a year and a half, and what that would do to my mind. Lol.
    Solid poem. Great job.
    Ashleigh <3

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